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would be 'not keen on walking'. The rendition of the last sentence
in line 28 of the original as "and you will be right to do so"
implies a structural miscorrespondence, detrimental to the
expressive effect of the sentence. A better replacement would be
'and right you will have done so'. "But we ask no one to subject
himself to the difficulties of our life" (lines 41-42) is a
misrepresentation of the Arabic original (lines 31-32) It is
stylistically crooked and burdensome, due to the translator's close
fidelity to the source text. A better translation would be 'And we
ask no one to put up with our life'.
(c) In the 'preacher' episode, the translator failed to grasp the
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precise meaning of the Arabic sentence: 'wa salla bina sal . at sl-
.
(Isha' (lines 39-40). His translation of the sentence as: "and (he)
joined us in evening prayers" (line 52) is semantically non-
equivalent to the ST. An appropriate translation would be '... and
he led the late evening congregational prayer'. "I visited him at
noon and found him prostrate in bed ..." projects two mismatches,
one semantic and the other structural. "At noon" and "prostrate"
would be more semantically equivalent to the source text were they
replaced by 'in the afternoon of that day' and 'lying sick in bed',
respectively.
(d) The translator's strict observance of the verbal accuracy of the
source text led him, sometimes, into structural pitfalls. His
translation of the last sentence in line 60 of the ST as "- they
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