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of Style” (Note for readers: an<br />
American English writing style guide)<br />
is the guiding principle here. You edit<br />
dialogue by eliminating all unnecessary<br />
words short of turning dialogue into<br />
a telegram (laughs). One of the most<br />
important steps is not only economy,<br />
but the placement of the key word.<br />
Every sentence, generally, has a word<br />
or phrase within it that completes its<br />
meaning. It could be the verb, it could<br />
be the noun, but it’s a word or phrase<br />
that if you took it out of that line of<br />
dialogue it wouldn’t make any sense.<br />
The key then is where you do you place<br />
that key word—at the beginning, in the<br />
middle or toward the end? I urge people<br />
to use the periodic sentence. It’s the<br />
suspense sentence. It’s the sentence<br />
you cannot know the meaning of until<br />
you hear the very last word. By delaying<br />
the meaning until the end of the line the<br />
audience then has to listen with curiosity<br />
wondering “What is this character<br />
saying?” When the last word or phrase<br />
lands at the end of the sentence,<br />
suddenly the sentence has greater<br />
impact. If you do it the other way, if you<br />
start the sentence with the key word,<br />
then everything after it is a modifier. It<br />
risks losing interest.<br />
Now, you can’t have every single line of<br />
dialogue end on its key word because<br />
that becomes repetitious and it doesn’t<br />
sound like conversation. You always<br />
mix periodic sentence with cumulative<br />
sentences in order to create a<br />
conversational tone. Generally speaking,<br />
withholding the meaning until the end of<br />
the line gives greater weight or impact to<br />
every single speech.<br />
Does character determine dialogue or<br />
the other way around?<br />
Yes, character determines dialogue.<br />
On the other hand, suppose you found<br />
a wonderful style of speech that really<br />
fascinates you and then it leads you to<br />
ask the question, “What kind of person<br />
would talk like that?” As a result the<br />
inspiration you found in the dialogue<br />
urges you to create a character who<br />
actually would use that kind of dialogue.<br />
In those cases the dialogue creates the<br />
character, but they are rare. When you<br />
write from the inside out, as I advocate<br />
in my teachings, dialogue is the final<br />
step, it’s the frosting on the cake. You<br />
create characters, you bring them into<br />
conflict, out of that you create story and<br />
then ultimately you have to find ways<br />
for them to speak. Ninety-nine percent<br />
of the time as you create the character<br />
the character then has to have a true<br />
speech style. There are exceptions<br />
when dialogue or speech style actually<br />
becomes the inspiration for a character,<br />
but those are the exceptions.<br />
What advice would you offer a writer<br />
starting a redraft, with particular<br />
emphasis on dialogue?<br />
First and foremost, eliminate all<br />
unnecessary dialogue. Write as lean as<br />
you can. At the same time you have to<br />
think about the nature of the particular<br />
characters and some characters<br />
are loquacious, but they have to be<br />
loquacious in the most economical<br />
way possible. If there’s a fault in writing<br />
dialogue that needs to be addressed as<br />
you rewrite, it tends to be overwriting.<br />
Say the absolute maximum with the<br />
fewest possible words and yet retain the<br />
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