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Judge’s Comment<br />
Capturing the experiences of a cancer ward using senses and well chosen<br />
images including the squeak of shoes on the linoleum. The focus on the<br />
contrasts of the ward – a scarf being used to wrap or to cradle, the filling<br />
and emptying of beds, the tears and the smiles – is simple yet powerful.<br />
A haunting poem.<br />
Pranchad CHAURASIA, 13<br />
Griffith High School<br />
GRIFFITH NSW<br />
Techniques<br />
Today I wrote this poem,<br />
but I'm not sure if it's good.<br />
It doesn't have the things<br />
my teacher says it should.<br />
It doesn't share the feelings<br />
I have deep inside of me.<br />
It hasn't got any metaphors<br />
and not one simile.<br />
It's missing nearly everything.<br />
Alliteration too.<br />
It isn't an acrostic,<br />
shape, or a haiku.<br />
There's nothing that's personified.<br />
It doesn't even have a plot.<br />
I'm pretty sure that rhyming<br />
is the only thing it's got.<br />
It sure was fun to write it,<br />
and I think it's long enough.<br />
It's just too bad it's missing<br />
all that great poetic fluff.<br />
I put it on my teacher's desk<br />
and, wow, she made a fuss.
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