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Wherever you go A spider is a vine Spindly and sneaky Long and lanky About without a trace A spider is a vine Judge’s Comment Whilst arachnophobics may tremble, the image of the spider as a vine, spreading across floors through trees and from corner to corner, is well wrought. The use of the repeated line mirrors the message – that spiders (and their webs) spread their reach. Both creepy and amusing, this is a successful poem. Matti SCHWARZ, 13 Tarremah Steiner School KINGSTON TAS The Authority In the night, The shutters lifted, Curtains open, God's will shifted, Into the night, Where angels fall, Where all is one, AND HE IS ALL Out of the night, Come shades of fear, Priests of light, We hold him near, Their fires burn, Their will is tall, We serve our lord, OUR LORD RULES ALL But now at last, The town is still, No claws upon

The windowsill, Into the dark, We are called, To serve the light, Our people fall. Into the dark, Our angels fall, We were all one, NOW HE IS ALL Judge’s Comment This is a chilling poem, crafting an image of an unknown predatory presence arriving under the cover of darkness and shifting the town to ‘his’ will. Whilst the seemingly supernatural predator is not named, the feeling created by the repetition, the marching beat and images of contrasting light and dark, create an eerie effect which leave the reader wanting to know more. Summer WENDEN, 14 Mackellar Girls High School MANLY VALE NSW Bushfire Dancing embers fall to the ground, Oh so swiftly and then comes the sound, A crackling chant. A deafening song, Will it ever end? So beautiful, yet wrong. Judge’s Comment This short poem highlights the beauty and horror of the bushfire a topic which seems to be ever topical in Australia. The use of words such as beauty, dancing and chant makes the fire seem at first quite attractive, but the questioning ‘Will it ever end?’ and the final words ‘so wrong’ leave us in no doubt that the fire is a foe.

Wherever you go<br />

A spider is a vine<br />

Spindly and sneaky<br />

Long and lanky<br />

About without a trace<br />

A spider is a vine<br />

Judge’s Comment<br />

Whilst arachnophobics may tremble, the image of the spider as a vine,<br />

spreading across floors through trees and from corner to corner, is well<br />

wrought. The use of the repeated line mirrors the message – that spiders<br />

(and their webs) spread their reach. Both creepy and amusing, this is a<br />

successful poem.<br />

Matti SCHWARZ, 13<br />

Tarremah Steiner School<br />

KINGSTON TAS<br />

The Authority<br />

In the night,<br />

The shutters lifted,<br />

Curtains open,<br />

God's will shifted,<br />

Into the night,<br />

Where angels fall,<br />

Where all is one,<br />

AND HE IS ALL<br />

Out of the night,<br />

Come shades of fear,<br />

Priests of light,<br />

We hold him near,<br />

Their fires burn,<br />

Their will is tall,<br />

We serve our lord,<br />

OUR LORD RULES ALL<br />

But now at last,<br />

The town is still,<br />

No claws upon

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