Expository Essay Rough Draft Revision - St. Edwards University

Regina Pribyl Fall 2012
Expository Essay Rough Draft Revision
Grade Level: 10 Subject: ENGL Pre-AP Prepared By: Regina Pribyl
OVERVIEW/OBJECTIVE
The students will be revising their scored Expository Essay rough drafts that were
completed last week. Their objective is to revise the essay to bring up the score by 1
point.
If the student scored a 4, they will revise the essay to make sure it’s:
• Free of grammatical errors
• Fits within the 26 line STAAR limit
• Is the very best essay they can write.
The students will use a STAAR Writing Rubric provided by TEA in order to help
achieve the objective.
The students will also support their changes by explaining why they believe the 2 nd
draft deserves the next highest score point on the back of the 2 nd draft.
TEKS OBJECTIVES
13) Writing/Writing Process. Students use elements of the
writing process (planning, drafting, revising, editing, and
publishing) to compose text. Students are expected to:
(A) plan a first draft by selecting the correct genre for
conveying the intended meaning to multiple audiences,
determining appropriate topics through a range of strategies
(e.g., discussion, background reading, personal interests,
interviews), and developing a thesis or controlling idea;
(B) structure ideas in a sustained and persuasive way (e.g.,
using outlines, note taking, graphic organizers, lists) and
develop drafts in timed and open-ended situations that
include transitions and rhetorical devices used to convey
meaning;
(C) revise drafts to improve style, word choice, figurative
language, sentence variety, and subtlety of meaning after
rethinking how well questions of purpose, audience, and
genre have been addressed;
(D) edit drafts for grammar, mechanics, and spelling; and
(E) revise final draft in response to feedback from peers and
teacher and publish written work for appropriate audiences.
LESSON OUTLINE:
(5 min)
I will explain the instructions to the students by reading the handout while projecting it on the Doc Cam. Each student will have a copy of the
handout in front of him or her. This time will also be used to clarify any confusion.
(45 min)
Step 1: Locate your score on the Writing Rubric.

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Step 2: COMPARE YOUR ESSAY TO THE RUBRIC: Locate areas in your rough draft that match the information in the rubric. Highlight,
underline, or circle what you find. Make sure to label what you identify so you can refer to it when you’re revising.
**The point of doing this is so that you can see WHY you scored a 1, 2, 3, or 4, and what you can do to improve that score. **
Step 3: When you are finished with step 2, go back and review the areas you identified. Begin to revise those areas, and write your 2nd draft on
the STAAR Example Lined Page.

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WARM UP
MODELING
CHECK FOR
UNDERSTANDING
The teacher will pass back the students’
rough drafts and ask them to take note
of their score. Then they will look at the
criteria for that score using the writing
rubric.
The teacher will introduce the lesson by
reading the objective and asking
students to highlight any key words or
important information as she goes
through the instructions and rubric.
The teacher will ask students if they
have any questions, or if they need
anything clarified.
The teacher will ask the students to
recall an activity from the previous week
where they had to analyze and dissect
the STAAR Writing Rubric for
Expository essays.
The teacher will check for
understanding conferring with students
as they work on their projects. The
teacher will use the conferring moments
to see if the students understand the
assignment, expectations, and the
progress of their work.
The students will analyze the score they
received on their rough draft.
Students should face forward and listen.
Students will remain quiet and attentive
while the teacher explains the activity.
Students will ask questions and for
clarification.
Students will show that they understand
by answering questions in conferring
sessions.
Students will show their understanding
by supporting their 2 nd drafts and
explaining their revisions.
Materials Needed
• Expository Essay
Rough Draft
• STAAR Writing Rubric
• Instructions
• STAAR Lined Paper
• Pen/Pencil
Vocabulary
STAAR
The teacher will check for
understanding by asking the students to
support their 2 nd draft by explaining their
revisions.
QUESTIONING
STRATEGY/ QUESTIONS
ASKED
The teacher will ask students different
questions throughout the class period to
make sure they fully understand the
assignment.
Students should use their critical
thinking skills to answer these
questions, and expand revise their
essays.
REFLECTION
The teacher will instruct students to
explain their revisions on the back of the
2 nd draft in order to support the changes
they made in order to bring up their
score.
Students will explain their revisions on
the back of the 2 nd draft in order to
support the changes they made in order
to bring up their score.
How students know they
achieved objective:
Students should know
they achieved the

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objective by revising their
essays and using the
writing rubric to bring up
their score point. They will
also be able to
successfully support their
revisions.
Differentiation: Students will working individually and on their own rough drafts.
Special Populations: Students with disabilities that require extra attention will get one-on-one help during the activity and the teacher will also
leave written instructions on the board for them to refer to.