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RESEARCH<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
<strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2<br />
Professor Lynne Cameron <strong>an</strong>d Dr Sharon Besser<br />
School of Educ<strong>at</strong>ion, University of Leeds<br />
Research Report RR586
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 1<br />
Research Report<br />
No 586<br />
Research Report<br />
Research Report<br />
No 586 Research Report<br />
No 586 <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
<strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2<br />
No 586 Research Report<br />
No 58<br />
Professor Lynne Cameron <strong>an</strong>d Dr Sharon Besser<br />
School of Educ<strong>at</strong>ion, University of Leeds<br />
No 586<br />
6 Research Report<br />
The views expressed <strong>in</strong> this report are the authors’ <strong>an</strong>d do not necessarily reflect those of the Department for<br />
Educ<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d Skills.<br />
© University of Leeds 2004<br />
ISBN 1 84478 329 4
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 2<br />
Contents<br />
ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS ................................................................................................................................ 5<br />
WRITING IN ENGLISH AS AN ADDITIONAL LANGUAGE AT KEY STAGE 2: EXECUTIVE<br />
SUMMARY.......................................................................................................................................................... 6<br />
INTRODUCTION.................................................................................................................................................. 6<br />
KEY FINDINGS................................................................................................................................................... 6<br />
BACKGROUND AND AIMS .................................................................................................................................. 7<br />
METHODOLOGY................................................................................................................................................. 7<br />
FINDINGS........................................................................................................................................................... 8<br />
COMPARISON WITH FINDINGS FROM EAL STUDY ON KS4 WRITING (CAMERON 2003) ..................................... 9<br />
SUMMARY OF KEY RECOMMENDATIONS .......................................................................................................... 10<br />
SUMMARY OF RESULTS .............................................................................................................................. 11<br />
1 INTRODUCTION ......................................................................................................................................... 15<br />
1.1 THE AIMS OF THE RESEARCH PROJECT....................................................................................................... 15<br />
1.2 ENGLISH AS AN ADDITIONAL LANGUAGE AT KEY STAGE 2 ....................................................................... 15<br />
1.3 LINKS TO THE “WRITING IN EAL AT KEY STAGE 4 AND POST-16” PROJECT ............................................. 18<br />
2 WRITING AT KEY STAGE 2..................................................................................................................... 20<br />
2.1 THE DEVELOPMENT OF WRITING ............................................................................................................... 20<br />
2.2 THE DEVELOPMENT OF WRITING IN EAL................................................................................................... 21<br />
2.3 DIFFERENCES BETWEEN EAL AND EMT WRITING AT KEY STAGE 4......................................................... 21<br />
2.4 THE TEACHING OF WRITING AT PRIMARY LEVEL ....................................................................................... 22<br />
2.5 AN INTEGRATED FRAMEWORK FOR WRITING............................................................................................. 22<br />
2.6 GENRE ...................................................................................................................................................... 25<br />
2.7 GRAMMAR ................................................................................................................................................ 26<br />
2.7.1 Clause structure ............................................................................................................................... 26<br />
2.7.2 Clause constituents .......................................................................................................................... 27<br />
2.7.3 Sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d co-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion.................................................................................................... 27<br />
2.7.4 Types of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion..................................................................................................................... 28<br />
2.7.5 Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite clauses............................................................................................................................. 29<br />
3 PROJECT DETAILS.................................................................................................................................... 30<br />
3.1 THE SCRIPTS AND THE WRITERS ................................................................................................................ 30<br />
3.1.1 The schools <strong>an</strong>d pupils..................................................................................................................... 30<br />
3.1.2 Length of time <strong>in</strong> UK........................................................................................................................ 30<br />
3.1.3 L<strong>an</strong>guage backgrounds.................................................................................................................... 31<br />
3.2 THE SCRIPTS AND THE WRITING TASKS...................................................................................................... 31<br />
3.3 THE PROJECT ANALYSES AND THE NATIONAL CURRICULUM MARK SCHEME ............................................ 31<br />
3.4 THE ANALYSIS OF THE SCRIPTS ................................................................................................................. 32<br />
4 WRITING A STORY.................................................................................................................................... 33<br />
4.1 THE WRITING TASK ................................................................................................................................... 33<br />
4.2 THE ANALYSIS .......................................................................................................................................... 33<br />
4.3 THE OVERALL CONSTRUCTION OF THE STORY: ANALYSIS........................................................................ 35<br />
4.4 OVERALL CONSTRUCTION OF THE STORY: FINDINGS................................................................................. 35<br />
4.4.1 Overview of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs ........................................................................................................................ 35<br />
4.4.2 Follow<strong>in</strong>g the pictures ..................................................................................................................... 37<br />
4.4.3 Development of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive........................................................................................................... 38<br />
4.4.4 Story end<strong>in</strong>gs.................................................................................................................................... 41<br />
4.4.5 Use of paragraphs............................................................................................................................ 43<br />
4.5 DIRECT SPEECH......................................................................................................................................... 43<br />
4.5.1 Analys<strong>in</strong>g the use of direct speech ................................................................................................... 43<br />
4.5.2 F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs ........................................................................................................................................... 44<br />
5 USE OF LANGUAGE IN WRITING A STORY ....................................................................................... 46
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5.1 OVERVIEW OF FINDINGS............................................................................................................................ 47<br />
5.2 SENTENCES AND CLAUSES......................................................................................................................... 49<br />
5.2.1 Ma<strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>d subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses ......................................................................................................... 49<br />
5.2.2 Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses................................................................................................................................ 50<br />
5.2.3 Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors................................................................................................................................... 51<br />
5.3 WORDS AND PHRASES IN THE CLAUSE SLOTS............................................................................................ 52<br />
5.3.1 Subject <strong>an</strong>d Object Phr<strong>as</strong>es .............................................................................................................. 52<br />
5.3.2 Adverbials ........................................................................................................................................ 53<br />
5.3.3 Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es .................................................................................................................................... 54<br />
5.3.4 Modal verbs ..................................................................................................................................... 56<br />
5.4 ACCURACY IN USE OF LANGUAGE ............................................................................................................. 57<br />
5.4.1 Agreements....................................................................................................................................... 57<br />
5.4.2 Verb form errors .............................................................................................................................. 58<br />
5.4.3 Articles ............................................................................................................................................. 59<br />
5.4.4 Prepositions ..................................................................................................................................... 60<br />
5.5 TECHNICAL ACCURACY............................................................................................................................. 61<br />
5.5.1 Spell<strong>in</strong>g ............................................................................................................................................ 61<br />
5.5.2 Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion...................................................................................................................................... 61<br />
6 THE USE OF VOCABULARY.................................................................................................................... 64<br />
6.1 OVERVIEW OF FINDINGS............................................................................................................................ 64<br />
6.2 RICHNESS OF VOCABULARY...................................................................................................................... 64<br />
6.2.1 Richness of vocabulary: overall f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs ......................................................................................... 65<br />
6.2.2 Length of stories............................................................................................................................... 65<br />
6.2.3 R<strong>an</strong>ge of word types used................................................................................................................. 66<br />
6.3 FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE............................................................................................................................ 68<br />
6.3.1 Types of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage............................................................................................................ 68<br />
6.3.2 Extended <strong>an</strong>d s<strong>in</strong>gle uses of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage ............................................................................. 68<br />
6.3.3 Amount of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage......................................................................................................... 69<br />
6.3.4 Animal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes ......................................................................................................... 70<br />
6.3.5 Errors with metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes .................................................................................................. 71<br />
6.4 FORMULAIC PHRASES................................................................................................................................73<br />
7 USING LANGUAGE RESOURCES TO CONSTRUCT TIME IN A STORY....................................... 77<br />
7.1 USE OF TIME PHRASES................................................................................................................................77<br />
7.1.1 Types of time phr<strong>as</strong>es....................................................................................................................... 77<br />
7.1.2 Accur<strong>at</strong>e use of time phr<strong>as</strong>es............................................................................................................ 78<br />
7.2 ADVERBIAL CLAUSES OF TIME .................................................................................................................. 79<br />
7.3 VERB TENSES ............................................................................................................................................ 79<br />
7.3.1 Wh<strong>at</strong> verbs c<strong>an</strong> do............................................................................................................................ 79<br />
7.3.2 Accur<strong>at</strong>e use of verbs ....................................................................................................................... 80<br />
7.4 BRINGING IT ALL TOGETHER ..................................................................................................................... 80<br />
8 WRITING A RADIO ADVERTISEMENT ................................................................................................81<br />
8.1 THE WRITING TASK ................................................................................................................................... 81<br />
8.2 THE GENRE OF THE LOCAL RADIO ADVERTISEMENT .................................................................................. 81<br />
8.3 FINDINGS .................................................................................................................................................. 83<br />
8.3.1 Overview of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs ........................................................................................................................ 83<br />
8.3.2 Form<strong>at</strong> ............................................................................................................................................. 83<br />
8.3.2 Inform<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d Style....................................................................................................................... 84<br />
8.3.3 Voice ................................................................................................................................................ 85<br />
8.4 CONCLUSIONS........................................................................................................................................... 85<br />
9 IMPLICATIONS FOR THE TEACHING OF WRITING........................................................................ 86<br />
9.1 TYPES OF INTERVENTION IN CHILDREN’S WRITING .................................................................................... 86<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g...................................................................................................................................... 86<br />
Develop<strong>in</strong>g str<strong>at</strong>egies................................................................................................................................. 88<br />
Practice...................................................................................................................................................... 88<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction..................................................................................................................................... 88<br />
Feedback b<strong>as</strong>ed on <strong>as</strong>sessment for learn<strong>in</strong>g.............................................................................................. 89
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 4<br />
9.2 EVALUATING STORY WRITING AT KS2..................................................................................................... 90<br />
9.3 CONCLUSIONS............................................................................................................................................ 94<br />
REFERENCES .................................................................................................................................................. 95<br />
APPENDIX 1 DETAILS OF SCHOOLS AND PUPILS’ FIRST LANGUAGES ...................................... 96<br />
APPENDIX 2 NATIONAL CURRICULUM TESTS (WRITING) ............................................................. 97<br />
APPENDIX 3 SAMPLE SCRIPTS .............................................................................................................. 102<br />
APPENDIX 4 METHODOLOGY................................................................................................................. 133<br />
THE EXPLORATORY STAGE OF ANALYSIS ....................................................................................................... 133<br />
RATING THE SCRIPTS ..................................................................................................................................... 133<br />
Storyl<strong>in</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d narr<strong>at</strong>ive development ....................................................................................................... 133<br />
Grammar <strong>an</strong>d errors................................................................................................................................ 133<br />
Inter-r<strong>at</strong>er reliability................................................................................................................................ 134<br />
STATISTICAL ANALYSES ................................................................................................................................134<br />
DESCRIPTIVE ANALYSES................................................................................................................................135
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 5<br />
Acknowledgements<br />
I would like to th<strong>an</strong>k the follow<strong>in</strong>g who have contributed to the project:<br />
<strong>at</strong> the University of Leeds<br />
Dr Sharon Besser, for work <strong>as</strong> Research Fellow,<br />
Ayt<strong>an</strong> Guliyeva, for clerical support,<br />
Dr Juup Stelma, for <strong>as</strong>sist<strong>an</strong>ce with the <strong>an</strong>alysis of vocabulary.<br />
The project steer<strong>in</strong>g group: Silva<strong>in</strong>e Wiles (OFSTED), J<strong>an</strong>et White (QCA), L<strong>at</strong>ika Davis<br />
(CfBT), Sue Webb (Southwark LEA), K<strong>at</strong>e Daly (DfES), Annabel Burns (DfES), Paul<br />
Jackson (DfES), Liz Ison (DfES),<br />
Lynne Cameron<br />
Leeds, October 2004.
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<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong><br />
2: Executive Summary<br />
Introduction<br />
Researchers from the University of Leeds were commissioned by the Department for<br />
Educ<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d Skills (DfES) to conduct research <strong>in</strong>to the writ<strong>in</strong>g of pupils <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2<br />
(KS2) who use <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage (EAL) <strong>an</strong>d who are def<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> ‘adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
learners’, <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> they have been <strong>in</strong> the UK for <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t five years. Scripts produced by 264<br />
pupils for the 2003 <strong>English</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum Test (<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>) were <strong>an</strong>alysed qualit<strong>at</strong>ively<br />
<strong>an</strong>d qu<strong>an</strong>tit<strong>at</strong>ively to identify fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g EAL h<strong>an</strong>dle less<br />
confidently th<strong>an</strong> their peers who use <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> a mother tongue (EMT). This research adds<br />
to previous evidence g<strong>at</strong>hered about EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 (KS4) <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong> earlier, Ofstedfunded,<br />
project by the same author (Cameron 2003).<br />
<strong>Key</strong> F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• The best writers <strong>at</strong> this age, us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> a mother tongue (EMT) or <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong><br />
additional l<strong>an</strong>guage (EAL), were found to employ the resources of <strong>English</strong> -<br />
grammar, vocabulary, direct speech, punctu<strong>at</strong>ion, rhetorical fe<strong>at</strong>ures - with flexibility<br />
<strong>an</strong>d adaptability to cre<strong>at</strong>e strong story characters <strong>an</strong>d plots, <strong>an</strong>d effective persu<strong>as</strong>ive<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• However, m<strong>an</strong>y EAL learners, even high achiev<strong>in</strong>g pupils, h<strong>an</strong>dle adapt<strong>at</strong>ion to a<br />
variety of genres less confidently th<strong>an</strong> their EMT peers.<br />
• Two fe<strong>at</strong>ures of l<strong>an</strong>guage show st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t differences between EAL <strong>an</strong>d<br />
EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g: the use of prepositions <strong>an</strong>d the composition of short, fixed phr<strong>as</strong>es.<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>s more errors <strong>in</strong> both fe<strong>at</strong>ures, which also caused difficulties <strong>in</strong><br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> KS4.<br />
• EAL learners write stories th<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong>clude more metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
stories, for pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g both level 4 <strong>an</strong>d level 5. EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> level 5 used<br />
most figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, with <strong>an</strong>imal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes the most popular.<br />
• Certa<strong>in</strong> fe<strong>at</strong>ures of l<strong>an</strong>guage are h<strong>an</strong>dled less confidently by lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL<br />
writers. In particular: use of Adverbials, modal verbs, Subject-Verb agreement, verb<br />
tenses <strong>an</strong>d end<strong>in</strong>gs, <strong>an</strong>d subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors to l<strong>in</strong>k clauses.<br />
• In m<strong>an</strong>y ways, EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> KS2 w<strong>as</strong> more fluent <strong>an</strong>d more accur<strong>at</strong>e th<strong>an</strong> the<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g seen <strong>at</strong> KS4. These differences would seem to be l<strong>in</strong>ked to the teach<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong><br />
the younger children have received through the N<strong>at</strong>ional Literacy Str<strong>at</strong>egy.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 7<br />
Background <strong>an</strong>d Aims<br />
Until recently, it h<strong>as</strong> been <strong>as</strong>sumed th<strong>at</strong> learners of <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage who<br />
have been <strong>in</strong> the country <strong>an</strong>d the school system for five years or more will have developed<br />
their l<strong>an</strong>guage skills to a sufficiently high level to achieve to their potential <strong>in</strong> school<br />
educ<strong>at</strong>ion. However, <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong>ment d<strong>at</strong>a show a p<strong>at</strong>tern of under-achievement <strong>in</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional<br />
Curriculum tests from <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 1 through to GCSE for pupils with <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage (DfES, 2003).<br />
A research project also carried out by the first author <strong>an</strong>d funded by Ofsted (Cameron, 2003)<br />
<strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ed differences <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 (KS4) between adv<strong>an</strong>ced bil<strong>in</strong>gual learners<br />
<strong>an</strong>d their peers who have <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> a mother tongue. The KS4 study found differences <strong>in</strong><br />
accur<strong>at</strong>e use of some types of words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es, <strong>an</strong>d th<strong>at</strong> some pupils seemed to have<br />
problems us<strong>in</strong>g their additional l<strong>an</strong>guage to express their ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g. Lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners shared a tendency to lack sufficient content <strong>in</strong> their writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d not<br />
to use paragraph<strong>in</strong>g to org<strong>an</strong>ise content.<br />
The research reported here aimed to <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>e writ<strong>in</strong>g skills of younger children <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong><br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 2, <strong>an</strong>d to see if similar p<strong>at</strong>terns were evident. Specifically, the project aimed:<br />
• To identify key fe<strong>at</strong>ures of l<strong>an</strong>guage th<strong>at</strong> pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
appear to h<strong>an</strong>dle less confidently th<strong>an</strong> <strong>English</strong> mother tongue speakers.<br />
• To <strong>an</strong>alyse these fe<strong>at</strong>ures accord<strong>in</strong>g to level of ability <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> (<strong>as</strong> me<strong>as</strong>ured by n<strong>at</strong>ional<br />
tests).<br />
• To strengthen exist<strong>in</strong>g evidence provided by Ofsted research <strong>in</strong>to older pupils’ writ<strong>in</strong>g by<br />
add<strong>in</strong>g to our underst<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g development.<br />
• To <strong>in</strong>form the EAL str<strong>an</strong>d of the Ethnic M<strong>in</strong>ority Achievement Str<strong>at</strong>egy by provid<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d guid<strong>an</strong>ce on the teach<strong>in</strong>g of bil<strong>in</strong>gual primary <strong>an</strong>d secondary students<br />
(by pull<strong>in</strong>g together both pieces of work).<br />
Methodology<br />
264 scripts from the 2003 N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum Test (<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>) were provided by 13 schools<br />
from 8 LEAs. The schools varied <strong>in</strong> socio-economic context <strong>an</strong>d proportions of EAL pupils.<br />
Scripts were provided from pupils <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g each of levels 3, 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5 <strong>in</strong> the <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> test,<br />
giv<strong>in</strong>g six groups (2 l<strong>an</strong>guage background x 3 <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong>ment level) for comparison.<br />
Each script comprised a story <strong>an</strong>d a radio advertisement. The prompt for the story writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
w<strong>as</strong> a set of pictures lead<strong>in</strong>g to a problem for the ma<strong>in</strong> characters, which pupils then had to<br />
resolve <strong>an</strong>d conclude. The shorter t<strong>as</strong>k w<strong>as</strong> to write <strong>an</strong> advertisement for local radio to<br />
persuade listeners to buy a new toy.<br />
Texts were <strong>an</strong>alysed us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>tegr<strong>at</strong>ed framework for writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> exam<strong>in</strong>es both the text <strong>as</strong><br />
a whole, <strong>in</strong> terms of control <strong>an</strong>d use of the genre (narr<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d advertisement), <strong>an</strong>d l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
use <strong>at</strong> the levels of sentence, clause, phr<strong>as</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d word. All the story texts <strong>an</strong>d a sample of 40<br />
radio advertisements were <strong>an</strong>alysed <strong>in</strong> depth. Story texts were r<strong>at</strong>ed for the amount <strong>an</strong>d type<br />
of development of four key narr<strong>at</strong>ive components: Sett<strong>in</strong>g, Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Resolution of problem. The first 100 words of each story were gramm<strong>at</strong>ically <strong>an</strong>alysed for
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use of clauses, <strong>an</strong>d errors of various types were counted (agreements, articles, prepositions,<br />
formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es, spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d punctu<strong>at</strong>ion). St<strong>at</strong>istical <strong>an</strong>alyses of numerical r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d<br />
scores were complemented by descriptive <strong>an</strong>alyses of error types <strong>an</strong>d figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong><br />
the stories, <strong>an</strong>d of the radio advertisements.<br />
F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es: EAL learners made a gre<strong>at</strong>er number of errors th<strong>an</strong> EMT learners <strong>in</strong><br />
the use of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es (a formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e is a group of words th<strong>at</strong> are ‘bound’<br />
together, <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> certa<strong>in</strong> words must, or tend to be, accomp<strong>an</strong>ied, by certa<strong>in</strong> other words,<br />
e.g. his best friend r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> his best of all friend). The gre<strong>at</strong>est difference w<strong>as</strong> found <strong>in</strong><br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g by learners <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 4, where EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong>ed signific<strong>an</strong>tly more<br />
errors th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
• Prepositions: Overall, <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> level 3, EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g omitted signific<strong>an</strong>tly more<br />
prepositions th<strong>an</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT groups <strong>at</strong> level 3 used some<br />
prepositions <strong>in</strong>correctly. EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g improved <strong>in</strong> terms of <strong>in</strong>correct use between levels<br />
3 <strong>an</strong>d 4; EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> level 4 conta<strong>in</strong>ed signific<strong>an</strong>tly more <strong>in</strong>correctly used<br />
prepositions. For pupils <strong>at</strong> level 5, there w<strong>as</strong> no signific<strong>an</strong>t difference <strong>in</strong> numbers of<br />
preposition errors.<br />
• Use of Genres: Expertise <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g requires learners to develop knowledge of a r<strong>an</strong>ge of<br />
genres <strong>an</strong>d how l<strong>an</strong>guage is used to cre<strong>at</strong>e the form<strong>at</strong>, style, voice, purpose <strong>an</strong>d st<strong>an</strong>ce<br />
th<strong>at</strong> characterise a particular genre, comb<strong>in</strong>ed with skills to select from <strong>an</strong>d adapt<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage resources <strong>as</strong> required for the genre. In some ways, EAL learners h<strong>an</strong>dled the<br />
genres less confidently th<strong>an</strong> their EMT peers, <strong>an</strong>d this seems to become more obvious <strong>in</strong><br />
the writ<strong>in</strong>g of higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g pupils, perhaps because they use word <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>e level<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ures more accur<strong>at</strong>ely:<br />
-Story end<strong>in</strong>gs: For the group of pupils <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 5, more stories written by EAL<br />
learners had end<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> were r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> ‘<strong>in</strong>complete’, <strong>an</strong>d fewer had end<strong>in</strong>gs r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong><br />
‘orig<strong>in</strong>al’ or ‘cre<strong>at</strong>ive’ <strong>in</strong> some way.<br />
-Narr<strong>at</strong>ive components: For the group of pupils <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 5,writ<strong>in</strong>g by EAL<br />
learners developed the story components of Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d Resolution less th<strong>an</strong><br />
stories by EMT pupils. Stories by EAL learners did more development of the Sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
-Radio advertisements: Adverts written by EAL learners <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g both level 3 <strong>an</strong>d<br />
level 5 were less likely to open with a c<strong>at</strong>chy ‘hook’ to <strong>at</strong>tract the <strong>at</strong>tention of listeners.<br />
Instead, a full sentence w<strong>as</strong> often used. Adverts by EAL learners <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 5<br />
conta<strong>in</strong>ed less variety <strong>in</strong> sentence types <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary th<strong>an</strong> those by their EMT peers.<br />
• Length <strong>an</strong>d paragraph<strong>in</strong>g: Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners wrote stories th<strong>at</strong> were usually<br />
long enough <strong>an</strong>d, <strong>at</strong> levels 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5, were mak<strong>in</strong>g good use of paragraph<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Sentence grammar: The amount of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion w<strong>as</strong> not signific<strong>an</strong>tly different between<br />
groups, other th<strong>an</strong> between EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4, where the me<strong>an</strong> for level 4<br />
w<strong>as</strong> signific<strong>an</strong>tly higher. However, type of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion varied, with ‘adv<strong>an</strong>ced’<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors (while, until, after etc) be<strong>in</strong>g used more <strong>in</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d by pupils<br />
<strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g higher levels.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 9<br />
• Clause structure: EAL learners <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 4 overall showed st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
differences with EMT peers <strong>in</strong> their use of clause slots. They used:<br />
• more Subjects th<strong>at</strong> were s<strong>in</strong>gle nouns<br />
• more <strong>an</strong>d shorter Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
• more <strong>an</strong>d longer Objects / Complements<br />
• fewer words <strong>in</strong> Adverbial slots.<br />
Put together, these suggest EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> this level uses more short clauses, <strong>in</strong> which<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion is concentr<strong>at</strong>ed towards the end.<br />
• Adverbials: In writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 3 overall, the me<strong>an</strong> number of words used<br />
<strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> signific<strong>an</strong>tly lower th<strong>an</strong> EMT, <strong>as</strong> with level 4<br />
(above). At both levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4, therefore, writ<strong>in</strong>g by EAL learners is likely to be<br />
<strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g less <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion about time, place, m<strong>an</strong>ner <strong>an</strong>d purpose.<br />
• Verbs: EAL learners <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 5 made some errors with adv<strong>an</strong>ced verb tenses th<strong>at</strong><br />
show the rel<strong>at</strong>ive tim<strong>in</strong>g of two events, such <strong>as</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t perfect tense e.g. he had queued<br />
• Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage: Use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage w<strong>as</strong> limited to a subset of pupils <strong>in</strong> each<br />
group, with more use by higher level groups. EAL stories used more metaphors <strong>an</strong>d<br />
similes th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories, for pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g both level 4 <strong>an</strong>d level 5. EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong><br />
level 5 used most figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.<br />
• Spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d punctu<strong>at</strong>ion: EAL learners <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 4 made signific<strong>an</strong>tly fewer<br />
spell<strong>in</strong>g errors th<strong>an</strong> their EMT peers. At the other levels, there w<strong>as</strong> no signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
difference <strong>in</strong> spell<strong>in</strong>g or punctu<strong>at</strong>ion errors.<br />
Comparison with f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs from EAL study on KS4 <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong><br />
(Cameron 2003)<br />
• At both KS2 <strong>an</strong>d KS4, the strongest differences (qu<strong>an</strong>tit<strong>at</strong>ively) between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g were found <strong>at</strong> word <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>e level, <strong>in</strong> formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e errors <strong>an</strong>d the use of<br />
prepositions.<br />
• In m<strong>an</strong>y ways, KS2 writ<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> more fluent <strong>an</strong>d more accur<strong>at</strong>e th<strong>an</strong> the writ<strong>in</strong>g seen <strong>at</strong><br />
KS4. Length <strong>an</strong>d paragraph<strong>in</strong>g were better; there were fewer errors with agreements <strong>an</strong>d<br />
articles; comm<strong>as</strong> were used more accur<strong>at</strong>ely by KS2 EAL writers <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 5 th<strong>an</strong><br />
by sixteen year olds predicted A or B <strong>in</strong> their GCSE <strong>English</strong>. These improvements would<br />
seem to be l<strong>in</strong>ked to the teach<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> the younger children have received through the<br />
N<strong>at</strong>ional Literacy Str<strong>at</strong>egy.<br />
• At discourse level, the lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL writers <strong>at</strong> KS4 had more difficulties with<br />
h<strong>an</strong>dl<strong>in</strong>g genre th<strong>an</strong> EMT peers. The narr<strong>at</strong>ive genre <strong>at</strong> KS2 w<strong>as</strong> h<strong>an</strong>dled quite<br />
confidently, probably because it is the earliest acquired genre for children <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
ways the most b<strong>as</strong>ic. However, some EAL writers <strong>at</strong> KS2 did not adapt their l<strong>an</strong>guage to<br />
the dem<strong>an</strong>ds of the radio advertisement genre <strong>as</strong> readily <strong>as</strong> their EMT peers.<br />
• Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion: At KS2 <strong>an</strong>d KS4, lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners <strong>an</strong>d their EMT peers
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 10<br />
made less use of adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors th<strong>an</strong> higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners.<br />
In addition, higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners <strong>at</strong> KS2 used fewer adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT learners.<br />
Summary of key recommend<strong>at</strong>ions<br />
• Schools need to ensure th<strong>at</strong> EAL learners have extensive opportunities to encounter <strong>an</strong>d<br />
work with a r<strong>an</strong>ge of genres of written <strong>English</strong>.<br />
• EAL learners might be helped with h<strong>an</strong>dl<strong>in</strong>g formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es through a focus, across<br />
the curriculum, on phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>as</strong> whole units r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> only on words.<br />
• Higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners could benefit from exposure to, <strong>an</strong>d direct teach<strong>in</strong>g<br />
about, more adv<strong>an</strong>ced tenses th<strong>at</strong> show the rel<strong>at</strong>ive times of events, <strong>an</strong>d more adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors to cre<strong>at</strong>e more varied sentences.<br />
• EAL learners, even those <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g level 5, could benefit from notic<strong>in</strong>g different ways <strong>in</strong><br />
which well-written stories are brought to <strong>an</strong> end, <strong>an</strong>d from try<strong>in</strong>g out various story<br />
end<strong>in</strong>g techniques.<br />
• Level 3 story writ<strong>in</strong>g is characterised by lack of development of narr<strong>at</strong>ive components,<br />
<strong>an</strong>d both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writers could be helped to <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e the amount of development<br />
of story sett<strong>in</strong>g, characters, <strong>an</strong>d plot, by th<strong>in</strong>k<strong>in</strong>g about the imag<strong>in</strong>ed readers of their<br />
stories, wh<strong>at</strong> they might w<strong>an</strong>t to know <strong>an</strong>d how this could be made <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g for them<br />
to read.<br />
• Explicit <strong>at</strong>tention to certa<strong>in</strong> fe<strong>at</strong>ures of l<strong>an</strong>guage such <strong>as</strong> modal verbs, Adverbials <strong>an</strong>d<br />
prepositional phr<strong>as</strong>es seems especially import<strong>an</strong>t for lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL writers, who<br />
seem less likely to discover the gramm<strong>at</strong>ical p<strong>at</strong>terns by themselves th<strong>an</strong> higher<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners.<br />
• Pupils’ <strong>in</strong>dividual vocabularies offer a rich resource for cl<strong>as</strong>sroom activities, s<strong>in</strong>ce m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
of the less common words used by <strong>in</strong>dividual pupils may not be known or used by others.<br />
• Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage allows some children opportunities to cre<strong>at</strong>e vivid images <strong>in</strong> their<br />
stories. Some level 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5 EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g makes <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage th<strong>at</strong><br />
could be used <strong>as</strong> a resource for teach<strong>in</strong>g all pupils.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 11<br />
Summary of results<br />
To read the tables: Shaded columns show the results for writ<strong>in</strong>g from pupils <strong>at</strong> each of the three <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong>ment levels. These columns report differences <strong>an</strong>d similarities between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
groups. Boxes <strong>in</strong> bold show st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t results or f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> are judged import<strong>an</strong>t. The non-shaded columns show results of compar<strong>in</strong>g writ<strong>in</strong>g from pupils <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g one level with<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g from pupils <strong>at</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g the next level.<br />
St<strong>at</strong>istically tested results are marked <strong>as</strong> follows: (*) signific<strong>an</strong>t <strong>at</strong> p < 0.05; (**) signific<strong>an</strong>t <strong>at</strong> p < 0.01; (***) signific<strong>an</strong>t <strong>at</strong> p < 0.001; (§) approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce, 0.05 < p < 0.1<br />
STORY level 3 from level 3 to 4 level 4 from level 4 to level 5 level 5<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT EAL EMT EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT EAL EMT EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories<br />
have similar (low)<br />
amounts of<br />
development of each<br />
component, except<br />
Resolution.<br />
more<br />
development of<br />
the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
more<br />
development of<br />
the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
EAL stories have<br />
slightly less<br />
development of each<br />
component.<br />
No clear difference <strong>in</strong><br />
preferred str<strong>at</strong>egies.<br />
<strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e <strong>in</strong> the<br />
amount of<br />
development of<br />
the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
<strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e <strong>in</strong> the<br />
amount of<br />
development of<br />
the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
EAL stories have less<br />
development of<br />
Characters, Problem<br />
<strong>an</strong>d Resolution th<strong>an</strong><br />
EMT; more dev. of<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
EMT stories less likely<br />
to follow the given<br />
pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
fewer stories th<strong>at</strong><br />
did not follow<br />
pictures<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
fewer stories th<strong>at</strong><br />
did not follow<br />
pictures<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
EAL stories less likely<br />
to follow the given<br />
pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
slightly more<br />
stories th<strong>at</strong> did<br />
not follow<br />
pictures<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
slightly more<br />
stories th<strong>at</strong> did<br />
not follow<br />
pictures<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
EAL stories less likely<br />
to follow the given<br />
pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
EAL stories had m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
<strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
<strong>an</strong>d more th<strong>an</strong> EMT.<br />
Very few <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs, similar to<br />
EMT.<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
have problems with<br />
lack of paragraphs<br />
fewer <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
more <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
better use of<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
fewer <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
more <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
better use of<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Slightly more EMT<br />
stories have <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
More EMT stories have<br />
<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
Similar use of<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
fewer <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
more <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
better use of<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
very m<strong>an</strong>y fewer<br />
<strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y more<br />
<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
better use of<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
More EAL stories<br />
have <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Fewer EAL stories<br />
have <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
Both use paragraphs<br />
well.<br />
Length<br />
Direct speech<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
write shorter stories,<br />
but long enough.<br />
EAL use gre<strong>at</strong>er % of<br />
DS (§)<br />
Similar problems <strong>in</strong><br />
punctu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g direct<br />
speech.<br />
slightly longer slightly longer Similar lengths longer stories longer stories Similar lengths<br />
reduction <strong>in</strong><br />
comm<strong>as</strong> mark<strong>in</strong>g<br />
DS <strong>in</strong> wrong<br />
place (§)<br />
EAL use more words<br />
of DS (§)<br />
EAL use more DS to<br />
develop the Problem<br />
<strong>an</strong>d less to develop<br />
Resolution.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 12<br />
STORY level 3 from level 3 to 4 level 4 from level 4 to level 5 level 5<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT EAL EMT EMT EAL EMT EAL<br />
Similar higher<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>io<br />
n <strong>in</strong>dex (*)<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Subjects<br />
More EMT<br />
stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
EAL stories<br />
use more<br />
pronouns <strong>as</strong><br />
Subjects (§)<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
s<strong>in</strong>gle word Subjects<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (*)<br />
double the<br />
number of<br />
stories use <strong>at</strong><br />
le<strong>as</strong>t one<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
double the number<br />
of scripts use <strong>at</strong><br />
le<strong>as</strong>t one<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
more s<strong>in</strong>gle noun<br />
Subjects (§)<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Subject slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Objt/Cmp<br />
Advbial<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong><br />
use of Object /<br />
Complement<br />
slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL use fewer<br />
words <strong>in</strong> the<br />
Adverbial slot<br />
(**)<br />
more words<br />
<strong>in</strong> Object /<br />
Complement<br />
slot (*)<br />
more words<br />
<strong>in</strong> Adverbial<br />
slot (*)<br />
EAL use more <strong>an</strong>d<br />
longer Objects /<br />
Complements (*)<br />
<strong>an</strong>d more th<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>y<br />
other group.<br />
EAL use fewer words <strong>in</strong><br />
Adverbial slot (*)<br />
fewer Objects /<br />
Complements<br />
(*)<br />
more Objects /<br />
Complements (*)<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Object / Complement<br />
slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Adverbial slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Verb<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong><br />
use of Verb<br />
slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL use more, shorter,<br />
Verb Phr<strong>as</strong>es (*)<br />
more Verb<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es (*)<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Verb slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL conta<strong>in</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
more errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es (***)<br />
fewer<br />
formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e errors<br />
(*)<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL stories<br />
use more<br />
metaphors<br />
<strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
stories.<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d<br />
similes<br />
more metaphors<br />
<strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d<br />
similes th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
stories.<br />
EAL stories used<br />
most <strong>an</strong>imal similes.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 13<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
verb<br />
errors<br />
Sub -Verb<br />
agreement<br />
Noun -Pron<br />
agreement<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
fewer verb<br />
errors (*)<br />
fewer Subject -<br />
Verb agreement<br />
errors (*)<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
fewer verb<br />
errors (*)<br />
decre<strong>as</strong>e <strong>in</strong><br />
Subject -Verb<br />
agreement<br />
errors (§)<br />
reduction <strong>in</strong><br />
Noun -Pronoun<br />
agreement<br />
errors (*)<br />
fewer verb errors<br />
(§)<br />
fewer Subject -<br />
Verb agreement<br />
errors (§)<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>s<br />
some errors <strong>in</strong><br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced verb tenses<br />
e.g. p<strong>as</strong>t perfect.<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Articles<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
fewer errors with<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct articles (*)<br />
EAL more errors with<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct articles (*)<br />
Very few errors with<br />
articles, but EAL more<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (§)<br />
Prepositions<br />
EAL errors<br />
with <strong>in</strong>correct<br />
<strong>an</strong>d omitted<br />
prepositions.<br />
EAL more<br />
omitted<br />
prepositions<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (*)<br />
fewer errors with<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct<br />
prepositions (§)<br />
EAL prepositions errors<br />
more likely to be<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct th<strong>an</strong> omission.<br />
EAL more <strong>in</strong>correctly<br />
used prepositions th<strong>an</strong><br />
EMT (*)<br />
fewer<br />
<strong>in</strong>correctly<br />
used<br />
prepositions (*)<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Technical<br />
accuracy:<br />
Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
fewer<br />
miss<strong>in</strong>g<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion:<br />
comm<strong>as</strong>, full<br />
stops <strong>an</strong>d<br />
<strong>in</strong>verted<br />
comm<strong>as</strong> (*).<br />
fewer miss<strong>in</strong>g full<br />
stops (**); <strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d full stops <strong>in</strong><br />
direct speech (*);<br />
<strong>in</strong> other<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion (§)<br />
EAL omit fewer<br />
comm<strong>as</strong> (§)<br />
fewer wrongly<br />
used comm<strong>as</strong><br />
(*)<br />
reduction <strong>in</strong><br />
errors <strong>in</strong> other<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
(**)<br />
fewer miss<strong>in</strong>g<br />
comm<strong>as</strong> (**);<br />
wrongly used<br />
comm<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> direct<br />
speech <strong>an</strong>d full<br />
stops (§); other<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion errors<br />
(§)<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL make fewer<br />
spell<strong>in</strong>g errors (*)<br />
fewer spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
errors<br />
(§)<br />
fewer spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
errors<br />
(**)<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 14<br />
level 3 level 5<br />
Radio<br />
advertisement<br />
EAL learners seem to h<strong>an</strong>dle the genre less<br />
confidently th<strong>an</strong> EMT writers, particularly <strong>at</strong><br />
level 3.<br />
Open<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d slog<strong>an</strong>s less varied <strong>an</strong>d<br />
c<strong>at</strong>chy.<br />
Omission of key <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion, repe<strong>at</strong>ed<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT often <strong>in</strong>clude too much <strong>in</strong>fo on<br />
price <strong>an</strong>d purch<strong>as</strong>e<br />
Clear overview of content. -<strong>in</strong>cluded sufficient<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d not too much of <strong>an</strong>y one k<strong>in</strong>d,<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>ed less variety of sentences <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
Grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary used to show ch<strong>an</strong>ge <strong>in</strong><br />
voice.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 15<br />
1 Introduction<br />
The Department for Educ<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d Skills (DfES) commissioned this research project<br />
to <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>e the writ<strong>in</strong>g of pupils who use <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage (EAL)<br />
<strong>an</strong>d who are ‘adv<strong>an</strong>ced learners’, <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> they are not recently arrived <strong>in</strong> the country<br />
but have spent <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t five years <strong>in</strong> UK schools. Until recently, it h<strong>as</strong> been <strong>as</strong>sumed<br />
th<strong>at</strong> adv<strong>an</strong>ced bil<strong>in</strong>gual learners will have developed their l<strong>an</strong>guage skills to a<br />
sufficiently high level to achieve to their potential <strong>in</strong> school educ<strong>at</strong>ion. This research<br />
project is part of a wider effort to ensure th<strong>at</strong> this is the c<strong>as</strong>e, <strong>an</strong>d th<strong>at</strong> these pupils are<br />
not disadv<strong>an</strong>taged by cont<strong>in</strong>u<strong>in</strong>g difficulties with <strong>English</strong>.<br />
Over three hundred pieces of writ<strong>in</strong>g from the <strong>English</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum Tests<br />
taken <strong>in</strong> July 2003 have been <strong>an</strong>alysed qualit<strong>at</strong>ively <strong>an</strong>d qu<strong>an</strong>tit<strong>at</strong>ively by l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
background <strong>an</strong>d n<strong>at</strong>ional curriculum level to produce profiles of achievement <strong>an</strong>d<br />
needs, which <strong>in</strong> turn lead to suggestions for the teach<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d evalu<strong>at</strong>ion of writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
1.1 The aims of the research project<br />
The project worked to the follow<strong>in</strong>g aims supplied by DfES:<br />
• To identify key fe<strong>at</strong>ures of l<strong>an</strong>guage th<strong>at</strong> pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong><br />
additional l<strong>an</strong>guage appear to h<strong>an</strong>dle less confidently th<strong>an</strong> <strong>English</strong> mother<br />
tongue (EMT) speakers.<br />
• To <strong>an</strong>alyse these fe<strong>at</strong>ures accord<strong>in</strong>g to level of ability <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> (<strong>as</strong> me<strong>as</strong>ured<br />
by n<strong>at</strong>ional tests).<br />
• To strengthen exist<strong>in</strong>g evidence provided by Ofsted research <strong>in</strong>to older pupils’<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g by add<strong>in</strong>g to our underst<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g development.<br />
• To <strong>in</strong>form the EAL str<strong>an</strong>d of the Ethnic M<strong>in</strong>ority Achievement Str<strong>at</strong>egy by<br />
provid<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d guid<strong>an</strong>ce on the teach<strong>in</strong>g of bil<strong>in</strong>gual primary <strong>an</strong>d<br />
secondary students (by pull<strong>in</strong>g together both pieces of work).<br />
1.2 <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2<br />
In 2003, DfES figures show 57,132 pupils, 9.3% of the total, <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 us<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage,<br />
(http://www.dfes.gov.uk/rsg<strong>at</strong>eway/DB/SFR/s000448/table33-36.xls).<br />
Children of Indi<strong>an</strong>, Pakist<strong>an</strong>i, Black Afric<strong>an</strong>, Ch<strong>in</strong>ese <strong>an</strong>d B<strong>an</strong>gladeshi heritage make<br />
up the largest sub-groups, <strong>as</strong> shown <strong>in</strong> Figure 1.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 16<br />
Proportion of primary school pupils with <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage (2003)<br />
100.0<br />
94.6<br />
98.3<br />
90.0<br />
80.0<br />
70.0<br />
85.0<br />
81.3<br />
72.1<br />
81.7 82.0<br />
60.0<br />
50.0<br />
49.3<br />
40.0<br />
30.0<br />
20.0<br />
17.7<br />
14.6<br />
14.0<br />
15.7<br />
10.0<br />
0.4 1.6 2.0<br />
2.8<br />
0.0<br />
White British<br />
Irish<br />
Traveller of Irish heritage<br />
Any other White background<br />
Gypsy / Roma<br />
White <strong>an</strong>d Black Caribbe<strong>an</strong><br />
White <strong>an</strong>d Black Afric<strong>an</strong><br />
White <strong>an</strong>d Asi<strong>an</strong><br />
Any other mixed background<br />
Indi<strong>an</strong><br />
Pakist<strong>an</strong>i<br />
B<strong>an</strong>gladeshi<br />
Any other Asi<strong>an</strong> background<br />
Black Caribbe<strong>an</strong><br />
Black Afric<strong>an</strong><br />
25.4<br />
10.5<br />
7.2<br />
Any other Black background<br />
Ch<strong>in</strong>ese<br />
Any other ethnic group<br />
All Pupils (1)<br />
Figure 1 Proportions of EAL learners by ethnic group (primary school)<br />
Atta<strong>in</strong>ment d<strong>at</strong>a show a p<strong>at</strong>tern of under-achievement <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>, M<strong>at</strong>hem<strong>at</strong>ics <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Science N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum Tests for each of these groups of pupils, apart from<br />
those of Indi<strong>an</strong>, Ch<strong>in</strong>ese <strong>an</strong>d ‘Any other mixed’ background, who achieve results<br />
higher th<strong>an</strong> or level with their EMT peers. However, Indi<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>d Ch<strong>in</strong>ese EAL pupils<br />
do less well th<strong>an</strong> Indi<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>d Ch<strong>in</strong>ese EMT pupils.<br />
Most of the children who use <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> UK schools are<br />
from established m<strong>in</strong>ority ethnic communities, <strong>an</strong>d have been born <strong>an</strong>d brought up <strong>in</strong><br />
the UK. Recent arrivals are likely to be identified <strong>as</strong> Black Afric<strong>an</strong> (Somalia, Ethiopia<br />
etc) or Any Other White (E<strong>as</strong>tern <strong>an</strong>d Central Europe).<br />
Figures 2 – 4 show achievement <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> for some of these groups, me<strong>as</strong>ured <strong>as</strong> the<br />
percentage of pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 <strong>an</strong>d above <strong>in</strong> the <strong>English</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum<br />
Test <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 (aged around 11 years). The right-h<strong>an</strong>d bars <strong>in</strong> Figure 2 show th<strong>at</strong><br />
overall, 9% fewer pupils us<strong>in</strong>g EAL achieve <strong>at</strong> the expected level th<strong>an</strong> their mother<br />
tongue peer group. When we look <strong>at</strong> gender <strong>an</strong>d background (<strong>an</strong>d ignor<strong>in</strong>g the “Any<br />
other …” groups which may lead to comparisons across groups with very different<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d socio-cultural backgrounds), the largest gap between EAL learners’ <strong>an</strong>d<br />
EMT pupils’ achievement, 16%, is for Pakist<strong>an</strong>i boys (54% of Pakist<strong>an</strong>i boys achieve<br />
level 4+ compared to 70% of EMT boys).
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 17<br />
Percent of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT pupils by ethnic group achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 or above <strong>in</strong> KS2 <strong>English</strong> (2003)<br />
100<br />
90<br />
80<br />
70<br />
60<br />
84<br />
63<br />
86<br />
78<br />
72<br />
60<br />
68 68<br />
85<br />
70<br />
77<br />
63<br />
72<br />
66<br />
90<br />
80<br />
80<br />
59<br />
76<br />
67<br />
50<br />
% 4+ EMT<br />
% 4+ EAL<br />
40<br />
30<br />
20<br />
10<br />
0<br />
Any other<br />
White<br />
background<br />
Indi<strong>an</strong> Pakist<strong>an</strong>i B<strong>an</strong>gladeshi Any other Black Afric<strong>an</strong> Any other<br />
Asi<strong>an</strong><br />
Black<br />
background<br />
background<br />
Ch<strong>in</strong>ese<br />
Any other<br />
ethnic group<br />
All pupils<br />
Figure 2 % of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 or above <strong>in</strong> KS2 <strong>English</strong> (2003)<br />
Percent of EMT <strong>an</strong>d EAL boys by ethnic group achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 or above <strong>in</strong> KS2 <strong>English</strong> (2003)<br />
100<br />
90<br />
80<br />
70<br />
81<br />
83<br />
74<br />
67<br />
83<br />
67<br />
72<br />
67<br />
86<br />
75<br />
75<br />
70<br />
60<br />
58<br />
54<br />
62<br />
60<br />
57<br />
59<br />
55<br />
62<br />
50<br />
% 4+ EMT<br />
% 4+ EAL<br />
40<br />
30<br />
20<br />
10<br />
0<br />
Any other<br />
White<br />
background<br />
Indi<strong>an</strong> Pakist<strong>an</strong>i B<strong>an</strong>gladeshi Any other Black Afric<strong>an</strong> Any other<br />
Asi<strong>an</strong><br />
Black<br />
background<br />
background<br />
Ch<strong>in</strong>ese<br />
Any other<br />
ethnic group<br />
All pupils<br />
Figure 3 % of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT boys achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 or above <strong>in</strong> KS2 <strong>English</strong> (2003)
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 18<br />
Percent of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT girls achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 or above <strong>in</strong> KS2 <strong>English</strong> (2003)<br />
100<br />
90<br />
80<br />
70<br />
88 89<br />
69<br />
82<br />
77<br />
66<br />
87<br />
75 75 74<br />
82<br />
69<br />
77<br />
73<br />
94<br />
85<br />
85<br />
64<br />
81<br />
72<br />
60<br />
50<br />
% 4+ EMT<br />
% 4+ EAL<br />
40<br />
30<br />
20<br />
10<br />
0<br />
Any other<br />
White<br />
background<br />
Indi<strong>an</strong> Pakist<strong>an</strong>i B<strong>an</strong>gladeshi Any other Black Afric<strong>an</strong> Any other<br />
Asi<strong>an</strong><br />
Black<br />
background<br />
background<br />
Ch<strong>in</strong>ese<br />
Any other<br />
ethnic group<br />
All pupils<br />
Figure 4 % of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT girls achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 or above <strong>in</strong> KS2 <strong>English</strong> (2003)<br />
A p<strong>at</strong>tern of under-achievement is visible <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 1, <strong>an</strong>d after <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong><br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 2 <strong>as</strong> seen above, is ma<strong>in</strong>ta<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 3 (age around 14 years). At schoolleav<strong>in</strong>g<br />
age, only 34.7% of boys of Pakist<strong>an</strong>i background learn<strong>in</strong>g EAL p<strong>as</strong>s 5 or<br />
more GCSEs <strong>at</strong> grade C or above, <strong>as</strong> compared with 46% of boys whose mother<br />
tongue is <strong>English</strong>.<br />
The development of <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage is <strong>as</strong>sumed to take place<br />
through immersion <strong>in</strong> ma<strong>in</strong>stream school<strong>in</strong>g, comb<strong>in</strong>ed with some specialist<br />
<strong>as</strong>sist<strong>an</strong>ce <strong>at</strong> the early stages from L<strong>an</strong>guage Support or L<strong>an</strong>guage Development<br />
teachers. Research <strong>in</strong> other countries, particularly North America, suggests th<strong>at</strong> it<br />
takes between 5 <strong>an</strong>d 7 years for children’s additional l<strong>an</strong>guage to reach a level<br />
comparable with their mother tongue peers (Collier, 1996). By the end of <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong><br />
2, therefore, we would expect differences <strong>in</strong> achievement due to first l<strong>an</strong>guage to be<br />
disappear<strong>in</strong>g, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> to be widen<strong>in</strong>g. While a r<strong>an</strong>ge of other factors, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g<br />
socio-economic background, may <strong>in</strong>fluence achievement, it is import<strong>an</strong>t to consider<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage issues so th<strong>at</strong> children c<strong>an</strong> be given appropri<strong>at</strong>e support <strong>an</strong>d teach<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the<br />
primary school.<br />
1.3 L<strong>in</strong>ks to the “<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 <strong>an</strong>d post-16”<br />
project<br />
The project w<strong>as</strong> designed to follow <strong>an</strong> earlier, Ofsted-funded research study of writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
by more adv<strong>an</strong>ced learners of EAL <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 <strong>an</strong>d post-16 (Cameron, 2003). In<br />
th<strong>at</strong> project, the writ<strong>in</strong>g of bil<strong>in</strong>gual learners w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>alysed <strong>an</strong>d compared with writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
from first l<strong>an</strong>guage peers <strong>an</strong>d from higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners. It w<strong>as</strong> found th<strong>at</strong><br />
some l<strong>an</strong>guage fe<strong>at</strong>ures were still caus<strong>in</strong>g difficulties for bil<strong>in</strong>gual learners,<br />
particularly <strong>at</strong> the levels of genre <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>e.
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The methodology of the current project follows th<strong>at</strong> of the earlier project <strong>as</strong> far <strong>as</strong><br />
possible, with some adjustments made to improve methods <strong>in</strong> the light of th<strong>at</strong><br />
experience <strong>an</strong>d to c<strong>at</strong>er for the different n<strong>at</strong>ure of the writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks.<br />
Where fe<strong>as</strong>ible, comparisons are made between writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong>s 2 <strong>an</strong>d 4.
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2 <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> is a key skill for social <strong>in</strong>teraction <strong>an</strong>d for formal educ<strong>at</strong>ion. <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> enables<br />
us to expla<strong>in</strong> ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>d feel<strong>in</strong>gs, to record wh<strong>at</strong> is learnt, to explore the me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>gs of<br />
ide<strong>as</strong>, <strong>an</strong>d to display knowledge for <strong>as</strong>sessment purposes.<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> is a complex process, <strong>in</strong> which thoughts <strong>an</strong>d ide<strong>as</strong> are turned <strong>in</strong>to written<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> the form of paragraphs, sentences, phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d words, org<strong>an</strong>ised to make<br />
the content accessible to <strong>in</strong>tended readers <strong>an</strong>d to fit conventionalised form<strong>at</strong>s <strong>an</strong>d text<br />
types.<br />
In this section, we describe the context <strong>in</strong> which pupils are learn<strong>in</strong>g to write, <strong>an</strong>d<br />
report some of the more recent liter<strong>at</strong>ure on writ<strong>in</strong>g development <strong>in</strong> first <strong>an</strong>d<br />
additional l<strong>an</strong>guages.<br />
2.1 The development of writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
The concept of ‘l<strong>in</strong>guistic literacy’ (Ravid <strong>an</strong>d Tolch<strong>in</strong>sky, 2002) is helpful <strong>in</strong><br />
captur<strong>in</strong>g some of the complexity of learn<strong>in</strong>g to write. L<strong>in</strong>guistic literacy concerns<br />
literacy skills th<strong>at</strong> are expressed <strong>in</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage, <strong>in</strong> contr<strong>as</strong>t to, for example, visual or<br />
computer literacy, <strong>an</strong>d <strong>as</strong>pects of l<strong>an</strong>guage knowledge th<strong>at</strong> are <strong>in</strong>fluenced by the<br />
development of literacy skills. A l<strong>in</strong>guistically liter<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong>dividual c<strong>an</strong> be characterised<br />
<strong>as</strong> hav<strong>in</strong>g wh<strong>at</strong> Ravid <strong>an</strong>d Tolch<strong>in</strong>sky call ‘rhetorical adaptability’. In other words, the<br />
skilled writer h<strong>as</strong> a r<strong>an</strong>ge of registers <strong>an</strong>d genres available to choose from <strong>an</strong>d the<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage knowledge to compose with<strong>in</strong> them, <strong>an</strong>d c<strong>an</strong> choose appropri<strong>at</strong>ely for the<br />
particular communic<strong>at</strong>ive purpose <strong>an</strong>d audience.<br />
In a liter<strong>at</strong>e society, spoken <strong>an</strong>d written l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong>teract <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>fluence each other.<br />
Some forms will move from talk to writ<strong>in</strong>g, but others may be encountered through<br />
written texts <strong>an</strong>d absorbed <strong>in</strong>to talk (ibid, p 430).<br />
Awareness of discourse style – th<strong>at</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage is used differently <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g from how it<br />
is used <strong>in</strong> speech – emerges <strong>at</strong> pre-school ages, particularly where children experience<br />
different types of l<strong>an</strong>guage from television, computer games <strong>an</strong>d other literacy<br />
activities. Children with such experiences constructed spoken narr<strong>at</strong>ives differently<br />
from children without them (Michaels <strong>an</strong>d Coll<strong>in</strong>s 1984). Evidence from first<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage children shows th<strong>at</strong> register differences th<strong>at</strong> mark social dist<strong>in</strong>ctions are<br />
noticed by pre-school children but th<strong>at</strong> more formal gramm<strong>at</strong>ical structures <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary take much longer to develop, <strong>an</strong>d are still cont<strong>in</strong>u<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>to secondary<br />
school (Berm<strong>an</strong>, 2000).<br />
Register <strong>an</strong>d genre are closely <strong>in</strong>ter-rel<strong>at</strong>ed. Ravid <strong>an</strong>d Tolch<strong>in</strong>sky identify the broad<br />
genres of convers<strong>at</strong>ion, narr<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d exposition, <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d poetry, which split<br />
<strong>in</strong>to m<strong>an</strong>y sub-genres, such <strong>as</strong> jokes, letters, stories, scientific writ<strong>in</strong>g. They report<br />
studies which show th<strong>at</strong> children under 7 c<strong>an</strong> recognise differences <strong>in</strong> genre, <strong>an</strong>d th<strong>at</strong><br />
the writ<strong>in</strong>g of 9 year olds shows differenti<strong>at</strong>ion between narr<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d expository<br />
texts.
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The grammar of written texts differs from the grammar of talk, <strong>an</strong>d learn<strong>in</strong>g to write<br />
<strong>in</strong>volves the development of new gramm<strong>at</strong>ical resources th<strong>at</strong> produce larger <strong>an</strong>d more<br />
complex units. While young children c<strong>an</strong> identify such expressions <strong>an</strong>d produce them<br />
<strong>in</strong> certa<strong>in</strong> contexts, it aga<strong>in</strong> takes most of secondary school<strong>in</strong>g to develop “appropri<strong>at</strong>e<br />
<strong>an</strong>d consistent <strong>in</strong>tegr<strong>at</strong>ion.. <strong>in</strong> suitable contexts” (ibid, p 429).<br />
At the end of primary school then, children us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> a first l<strong>an</strong>guage c<strong>an</strong> be<br />
expected to have learnt the b<strong>as</strong>ic conventions of written text, to be develop<strong>in</strong>g their<br />
control of several written genres, with narr<strong>at</strong>ive probably the best developed, <strong>an</strong>d to<br />
be still develop<strong>in</strong>g their skills <strong>in</strong> address<strong>in</strong>g texts to imag<strong>in</strong>ed / <strong>in</strong>tended readers.<br />
Children of this age will show variable familiarity with <strong>an</strong>d control of l<strong>an</strong>guage forms,<br />
such <strong>as</strong> rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses <strong>an</strong>d the p<strong>as</strong>sive voice, th<strong>at</strong> are developed through exposure to<br />
written l<strong>an</strong>guage (Perera, 1984).<br />
2.2 The development of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> EAL<br />
Views seem to be split <strong>as</strong> to whether or not EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g development follows the<br />
same p<strong>at</strong>h <strong>as</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. It seems unlikely th<strong>at</strong> there is a simple <strong>an</strong>swer to this<br />
question, s<strong>in</strong>ce much must depend on pupils’ level of spoken <strong>English</strong> on entry to<br />
school, <strong>an</strong>d on experiences of literacy <strong>in</strong> both <strong>English</strong> <strong>an</strong>d heritage l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> home<br />
(Gregory 1996). The available research liter<strong>at</strong>ure does not offer much clarific<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
Hudelson (1994), from a US ‘whole l<strong>an</strong>guage’ perspective, argues th<strong>at</strong> the two groups<br />
of children engage <strong>in</strong> similar processes, but, <strong>as</strong> Reynolds (2002) po<strong>in</strong>ts out, she offers<br />
little evidence to support the claim.<br />
Reynolds’ study <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>es the development of certa<strong>in</strong> discourse markers <strong>in</strong> the<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g of 10 -13 year old EMT <strong>an</strong>d mostly Sp<strong>an</strong>ish-speak<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> a Second<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage (ESL) pupils, who were <strong>as</strong>ked to write on two different topics. The most<br />
<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of this study w<strong>as</strong> the difference between EMT <strong>an</strong>d ESL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong><br />
the responses to the different topics. While the EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g made use of the markers<br />
differently for the different registers of writ<strong>in</strong>g required by the topics, the ESL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
did not do so. Reynolds makes the po<strong>in</strong>t th<strong>at</strong> for the ESL pupils, development requires<br />
learn<strong>in</strong>g to dist<strong>in</strong>guish between the requirements of different writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks. Us<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
idea of rhetorical adaptability, we c<strong>an</strong> see development <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>g both the r<strong>an</strong>ge of<br />
resources available to be used <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d the awareness of which resources are<br />
most appropri<strong>at</strong>e for a particular t<strong>as</strong>k.<br />
Another f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of Reynolds’ study relev<strong>an</strong>t to the current project w<strong>as</strong> the higher<br />
overall use of the causality markers (because, so, therefore, thus, by, through, with) <strong>in</strong><br />
the ESL writ<strong>in</strong>g. Similar f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs – of higher use of <strong>an</strong>d <strong>an</strong>d because – were found <strong>in</strong><br />
two other studies. Reynolds suggests th<strong>at</strong> this may result from a gre<strong>at</strong>er reli<strong>an</strong>ce on<br />
narr<strong>at</strong>ive style <strong>in</strong> the writ<strong>in</strong>g, aga<strong>in</strong> suggest<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> development <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>in</strong>volves <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>g diversity <strong>in</strong> available styles <strong>an</strong>d genres.<br />
2.3 Differences between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4<br />
The previous research project commissioned by Ofsted (Cameron, 2003) compared<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> mock GCSE exam<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ions across three groups: pupils us<strong>in</strong>g EAL predicted
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 22<br />
grades A or B <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> GCSE; pupils us<strong>in</strong>g EAL predicted C/D borderl<strong>in</strong>e or below;<br />
<strong>an</strong>d EMT pupils predicted C/D borderl<strong>in</strong>e or below.<br />
The strongest differences between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> the lower levels w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong><br />
the use of words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es, particularly the accur<strong>at</strong>e use of ‘small’ words such <strong>as</strong><br />
prepositions <strong>an</strong>d delexical verbs such <strong>as</strong> make, do, put, <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> word grammar,<br />
especially agreements <strong>an</strong>d end<strong>in</strong>gs. Prepositions, articles <strong>an</strong>d Subject-Verb<br />
agreements showed <strong>in</strong>accuracies even <strong>in</strong> the high achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Interest<strong>in</strong>gly, like Reynolds, we also found lack of vari<strong>at</strong>ion with topic <strong>in</strong> the length of<br />
Subject Noun Phr<strong>as</strong>es. The writ<strong>in</strong>g of both high achiev<strong>in</strong>g pupils us<strong>in</strong>g EAL <strong>an</strong>d low<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g EMT pupils showed <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e <strong>in</strong> the length of Subjects <strong>in</strong> the curriculum<br />
are<strong>as</strong> of History, Religious Educ<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d Geography, <strong>as</strong> compared with the<br />
persu<strong>as</strong>ive writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the <strong>English</strong> exam. The length of Subjects <strong>in</strong> the writ<strong>in</strong>g of the<br />
lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g pupils us<strong>in</strong>g EAL did not show such vari<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
At discourse level, we found th<strong>at</strong> the lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g had more<br />
difficulties with the control of genre, particularly <strong>in</strong> ma<strong>in</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g the rel<strong>at</strong>ionship<br />
between writer <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>tended reader.<br />
2.4 The teach<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> primary level<br />
The N<strong>at</strong>ional Literacy Str<strong>at</strong>egy w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>troduced <strong>in</strong>to all primary schools <strong>in</strong> 1998 <strong>an</strong>d<br />
s<strong>in</strong>ce then pupils experience a daily ‘Literacy Hour’. The Literacy Hour <strong>in</strong>cludes<br />
focused teach<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d applic<strong>at</strong>ion of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> word, sentence <strong>an</strong>d text level for a<br />
r<strong>an</strong>ge of fiction, poetry <strong>an</strong>d non-fiction. It <strong>in</strong>cludes explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
through the demonstr<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d modell<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g (composition <strong>an</strong>d tr<strong>an</strong>scription<br />
process), explor<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d discussion of choices writers make <strong>at</strong> the po<strong>in</strong>t of writ<strong>in</strong>g,<br />
scaffold<strong>in</strong>g specific <strong>as</strong>pects of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d opportunities to practise <strong>an</strong>d apply the<br />
skills across the curriculum. Resources such <strong>as</strong> Develop<strong>in</strong>g Early <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> (DfES,<br />
2001) <strong>an</strong>d Grammar for <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> (DfES, 2000) support teachers <strong>in</strong> develop<strong>in</strong>g<br />
str<strong>at</strong>egies for learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d teach<strong>in</strong>g which enable children to become explicitly aware<br />
of gramm<strong>at</strong>ical pr<strong>in</strong>ciples <strong>an</strong>d their effect <strong>an</strong>d to <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e the r<strong>an</strong>ge of choices open to<br />
them when they write for a r<strong>an</strong>ge of purposes <strong>an</strong>d audience. Pupils <strong>in</strong> this study will<br />
have experienced 5 years of the N<strong>at</strong>ional Literacy Str<strong>at</strong>egy (unlike the students <strong>in</strong> the<br />
<strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 study) <strong>an</strong>d it is likely th<strong>at</strong> this will have <strong>in</strong>fluenced the n<strong>at</strong>ure <strong>an</strong>d the<br />
level of their writ<strong>in</strong>g skills.<br />
2.5 An <strong>in</strong>tegr<strong>at</strong>ed framework for writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
We present here a slightly revised version of the Integr<strong>at</strong>ed Framework for <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong><br />
th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> developed <strong>in</strong> the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project (Figure 5). As before, the framework<br />
tries to capture how we thought about writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> order to underst<strong>an</strong>d about the writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
process <strong>an</strong>d product, <strong>an</strong>d to <strong>an</strong>alyse the texts.<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> is seen <strong>as</strong> the <strong>in</strong>terplay of wh<strong>at</strong> the writer w<strong>an</strong>ts to tell the reader (the<br />
content) <strong>an</strong>d how this is done (l<strong>an</strong>guage resources).<br />
Written text is seen <strong>as</strong> oper<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> two, <strong>in</strong>terconnected, levels – the text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
<strong>an</strong>d with<strong>in</strong> the text.
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At the level of the whole text, l<strong>an</strong>guage resources <strong>in</strong>clude repertoires of genre <strong>an</strong>d<br />
register, together with ways of org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>in</strong>g a whole text such <strong>as</strong> paragraph<strong>in</strong>g. The<br />
content <strong>at</strong> this holistic level would <strong>in</strong>clude the general ide<strong>as</strong> th<strong>at</strong> the writer w<strong>an</strong>ts to<br />
get across, such <strong>as</strong> the overall plot of a story, <strong>an</strong>d the topics th<strong>at</strong> the writer w<strong>an</strong>ts to<br />
write about.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text, the content becomes the detailed development of ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>d subtopics,<br />
us<strong>in</strong>g resources of grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary <strong>in</strong> sentences, clauses, phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d<br />
words, <strong>an</strong>d technical resources of spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d punctu<strong>at</strong>ion. Also <strong>in</strong>cluded here <strong>as</strong><br />
resources are the conventions of direct speech <strong>an</strong>d the use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.
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Figure 5 An <strong>in</strong>tegr<strong>at</strong>ed framework for writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Content<br />
ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>d topics<br />
narr<strong>at</strong>ive content<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
resources<br />
genre<br />
description<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
with<strong>in</strong> the<br />
text<br />
with<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Content<br />
detailed development<br />
of ide<strong>as</strong>, topics,<br />
narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage resources<br />
sentence grammar<br />
words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
direct speech
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2.6 Genre<br />
At whole text level, the concept of ‘genre’ is a useful tool to underst<strong>an</strong>d wh<strong>at</strong> it is th<strong>at</strong><br />
children are learn<strong>in</strong>g to do. Genres are socially conventionalised ways of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d<br />
produc<strong>in</strong>g texts th<strong>at</strong> emerge from the writ<strong>in</strong>g activities th<strong>at</strong> people engage <strong>in</strong>. The<br />
letter <strong>as</strong> a genre probably took shape quite early <strong>in</strong> the historical development of<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g from people’s need to communic<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion to each other <strong>at</strong> dist<strong>an</strong>ce or <strong>in</strong><br />
a more perm<strong>an</strong>ent form th<strong>an</strong> speech. The genre of the novel, however, emerged much<br />
more recently <strong>in</strong> the history of Europe<strong>an</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g, develop<strong>in</strong>g out of collections of<br />
fictional letters around the 17 th century. Much more recently, we have seen the<br />
emergence of ‘chick lit’ novels <strong>as</strong> a new sub-genre, <strong>an</strong>d of the completely new genre<br />
of the text message.<br />
As active members of a liter<strong>at</strong>e society, children will learn about genres <strong>as</strong> they take<br />
part <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> home <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> school. Children who are read a bedtime story or who<br />
w<strong>at</strong>ch Disney videos will learn early on about the genre of the fairy tale. It h<strong>as</strong><br />
become <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>gly common for educ<strong>at</strong>ion systems to <strong>in</strong>clude explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g of<br />
genres to children, although this is sometimes controversial. While proponents of<br />
genre teach<strong>in</strong>g argue th<strong>at</strong> all children need access to the written genres of their<br />
society, opponents see genre teach<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> perpetu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g old or frozen forms, restrict<strong>in</strong>g<br />
cre<strong>at</strong>ivity <strong>an</strong>d forc<strong>in</strong>g children <strong>in</strong>to particular moulds too early. We would argue th<strong>at</strong><br />
genres are cont<strong>in</strong>ually ch<strong>an</strong>g<strong>in</strong>g, <strong>an</strong>d th<strong>at</strong> young people play a central role <strong>in</strong> these<br />
ch<strong>an</strong>ges, but th<strong>at</strong> we c<strong>an</strong> still helpfully make genres explicit to children <strong>as</strong> they learn<br />
to write, <strong>an</strong>d th<strong>at</strong>, for pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g EAL, this may be particularly useful to ensure<br />
equal access to the huge amount of <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d knowledge carried <strong>in</strong> written<br />
texts.<br />
The two text types th<strong>at</strong> children sitt<strong>in</strong>g their <strong>English</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum test <strong>in</strong> 2003<br />
were <strong>as</strong>ked to write were a story <strong>an</strong>d a radio advertisement. In the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project<br />
GCSE <strong>English</strong> exam, pupils had to write a letter to the local newspaper, a set of road<br />
safety <strong>in</strong>structions, or <strong>an</strong> article for the school magaz<strong>in</strong>e. Each of these texts belong to<br />
a particular genre, <strong>an</strong>d, <strong>as</strong> liter<strong>at</strong>e adults, we have acquired knowledge of wh<strong>at</strong> each of<br />
these looks like. We would recognise a letter to a local newspaper or a story, even if<br />
we met them out of context, <strong>an</strong>d we could make a good <strong>at</strong>tempt <strong>at</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g them, just<br />
from our experience. Children though will vary <strong>in</strong> how familiar these genres are to<br />
them; if they never read a local newspaper, they may be completely unaware of wh<strong>at</strong><br />
style such a letter would use; if they don’t listen to local radio, they will not be<br />
familiar with the form<strong>at</strong> of the advertisements. Cultural <strong>an</strong>d l<strong>in</strong>guistic issues also arise<br />
around genre <strong>an</strong>d EAL learners. For example, advertisements on local m<strong>in</strong>ority<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage radio st<strong>at</strong>ions may form a slightly different genre from those on <strong>English</strong><br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage local radio (see Chapter 8).<br />
Genre knowledge c<strong>an</strong> be divided <strong>in</strong>to several types of knowledge, about<br />
• form<strong>at</strong><br />
• style<br />
• voice <strong>an</strong>d purpose<br />
• st<strong>an</strong>ce.
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The form<strong>at</strong> of a piece of writ<strong>in</strong>g is its org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion, <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>cludes formal fe<strong>at</strong>ures such<br />
<strong>as</strong> addresses, open<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d clos<strong>in</strong>gs of letters, <strong>an</strong>d traditional open<strong>in</strong>gs of fairy stories,<br />
such <strong>as</strong> Once upon a time … Different genres have different form<strong>at</strong>s, <strong>an</strong>d make<br />
different use of paragraphs <strong>an</strong>d other typological or graphical fe<strong>at</strong>ures, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g<br />
bullet po<strong>in</strong>ts <strong>an</strong>d diagrams.<br />
Style of writ<strong>in</strong>g varies with genre, with different genres requir<strong>in</strong>g different levels of<br />
formality, different types of sentences <strong>an</strong>d clauses, <strong>an</strong>d different k<strong>in</strong>ds of vocabulary.<br />
Voice refers to the way writers express themselves through their writ<strong>in</strong>g. The writer<br />
of a letter to the paper usually adopts a strong voice, writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> if they have someth<strong>in</strong>g<br />
to say th<strong>at</strong> is import<strong>an</strong>t to them. In a radio advertisement, there may be several<br />
different voices <strong>in</strong> one script, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g the enthusi<strong>as</strong>tic voice to grab audience<br />
<strong>at</strong>tention <strong>an</strong>d the more serious voice to tell people about the product <strong>an</strong>d how good it<br />
is. <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> t<strong>as</strong>ks may require pupils to adopt a voice th<strong>at</strong> is not their own; they have to<br />
pretend or imag<strong>in</strong>e themselves to be someone else. In th<strong>at</strong> role, they have to imag<strong>in</strong>e<br />
the <strong>in</strong>tended audience, because voice is always shaped to take account of who is<br />
read<strong>in</strong>g the written text. When writ<strong>in</strong>g, the writer h<strong>as</strong> to have clear <strong>in</strong> their m<strong>in</strong>d why<br />
the <strong>in</strong>tended <strong>an</strong>d imag<strong>in</strong>ed reader will read wh<strong>at</strong> they are writ<strong>in</strong>g. Sometimes this<br />
purpose needs to be made explicit to the reader, <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> a letter or advert to persuade the<br />
reader to take some action. Other times the purpose rema<strong>in</strong>s implicit, <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> a story<br />
where the reader’s purpose may be to f<strong>in</strong>d out wh<strong>at</strong> happens.<br />
St<strong>an</strong>ce is <strong>an</strong> <strong>as</strong>pect of voice th<strong>at</strong> refers to the viewpo<strong>in</strong>t or position th<strong>at</strong> the writer<br />
takes <strong>in</strong> respect of wh<strong>at</strong> is be<strong>in</strong>g written about. In letters to the newspaper, a writer<br />
often takes <strong>an</strong> imp<strong>as</strong>sioned st<strong>an</strong>ce, where<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the genre of the academic essay, it is<br />
necessary to take a more objective st<strong>an</strong>ce <strong>an</strong>d present both sides of <strong>an</strong> argument.<br />
2.7 Grammar<br />
The model of grammar used <strong>in</strong> the research project is described <strong>in</strong> this section. The<br />
outl<strong>in</strong>e of grammar follows closely th<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong> the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 report, but us<strong>in</strong>g examples<br />
from <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 writ<strong>in</strong>g where possible. We use <strong>an</strong> adapted form of Quirk’s<br />
sentence grammar, which takes the clause <strong>as</strong> its central unit.<br />
2.7.1 Clause structure<br />
The structure of a simple b<strong>as</strong>ic clause <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> c<strong>an</strong> be seen <strong>as</strong> four ‘slots’ to be filled<br />
by ‘constituents’: Subject, Verb, Object or Complement, <strong>an</strong>d Adverbial. The Verb 1 is<br />
central <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> every clause must have a verb <strong>in</strong> it, <strong>an</strong>d, unless the clause is a<br />
comm<strong>an</strong>d, the Verb h<strong>as</strong> a Subject. The Object / Complement 2 usually follow the<br />
Verb. Adverbials are the most flexible clause constituent; there c<strong>an</strong> be more th<strong>an</strong> one<br />
<strong>an</strong>d they c<strong>an</strong> be placed <strong>in</strong> several different positions. The example clauses below,<br />
from the sample scripts, show the four types of constituents:<br />
1 Capital letters <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>e th<strong>at</strong> we are talk<strong>in</strong>g about sentence constituents, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> ‘parts of speech’.<br />
2 Complements refer to the same entity <strong>as</strong> the Subject, <strong>an</strong>d occur ma<strong>in</strong>ly after the verb to be or similar<br />
verbs e.g. a photographer <strong>in</strong> the clause She is a photographer.
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{David } {saw } {the new game }<br />
S V O<br />
{his mum} {w<strong>as</strong>} { def<strong>in</strong>itely} {sick of the queue}<br />
S V A C<br />
{they } {were wait<strong>in</strong>g } {<strong>in</strong> the queue}<br />
S V A<br />
The b<strong>as</strong>ic order of <strong>an</strong> <strong>English</strong> clause is then S V O/C A (with the possibility of<br />
Adverbials be<strong>in</strong>g used <strong>at</strong> the beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g of the clause <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>side the Verb). A clause<br />
with a f<strong>in</strong>ite verb 3 is the simplest k<strong>in</strong>d of sentence.<br />
This clause structure is a resource for express<strong>in</strong>g ide<strong>as</strong>. At the simplest level, both<br />
developmentally <strong>an</strong>d gramm<strong>at</strong>ically, the Subject will be the ma<strong>in</strong> protagonist or actor<br />
<strong>in</strong> the action expressed by the Verb. The Object slot will <strong>in</strong>clude the ‘acted-on’ or<br />
wh<strong>at</strong> is affected by the Verb, while the Adverbials allow detail of time, place, re<strong>as</strong>on<br />
<strong>an</strong>d so on to be added to the st<strong>at</strong>ement of action. This b<strong>as</strong>ic structure for express<strong>in</strong>g<br />
b<strong>as</strong>ic me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>gs is capable of extensive <strong>an</strong>d delic<strong>at</strong>e adapt<strong>at</strong>ions, some of which are<br />
now described.<br />
Developmentally, young children learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> a first l<strong>an</strong>guage seem to make<br />
more use of slots <strong>at</strong> the end of clauses, particularly Objects, probably because of<br />
mental process<strong>in</strong>g constra<strong>in</strong>ts.<br />
2.7.2 Clause constituents<br />
Each of the slots c<strong>an</strong> be filled by s<strong>in</strong>gle words, or, <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the examples, by phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
conta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g more th<strong>an</strong> one word. In the above examples, the only noun th<strong>at</strong> is premodified<br />
<strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>y way is game; the other nouns mum, queue are used alone, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong><br />
with adjectives. In children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g across the school years, us<strong>in</strong>g more words <strong>in</strong> a<br />
slot is <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>ion of progress <strong>an</strong>d m<strong>at</strong>urity <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g (Perera, 1984). It is also the<br />
c<strong>as</strong>e th<strong>at</strong> Objects tend to be longer th<strong>an</strong> Subjects, <strong>an</strong>d long Subjects would be typical<br />
of more adv<strong>an</strong>ced writ<strong>in</strong>g. Research <strong>in</strong>to the development of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> h<strong>as</strong><br />
shown th<strong>at</strong> the length of the Verb (r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> the number of verbs) is a key <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>or<br />
of writ<strong>in</strong>g skills. Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es are made longer <strong>an</strong>d more complex by the addition of<br />
modal verbs, which <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>e how probable or possible <strong>an</strong> action is. The modal verbs<br />
<strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> are c<strong>an</strong>, could, shall, should, will, would, may, might, ought, used to (<strong>an</strong>d<br />
their neg<strong>at</strong>ives).<br />
2.7.3 Sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d co-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Sentences, <strong>an</strong>d the ide<strong>as</strong> they express, c<strong>an</strong> be made more complic<strong>at</strong>ed by putt<strong>in</strong>g two<br />
or more clauses together with co-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>an</strong>d, but or so, or by putt<strong>in</strong>g clauses <strong>in</strong> the<br />
Subject, Object / Complement or Adverbial slots. It is more difficult for a writer to<br />
embed clauses (sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion) th<strong>an</strong> to l<strong>in</strong>k them with co-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors. Children’s<br />
3 For further expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ions of gramm<strong>at</strong>ical terms, the reader is recommended to use a text such <strong>as</strong><br />
Crystal (2003).
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writ<strong>in</strong>g is characterised by the use of co-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion, <strong>an</strong>d<br />
the Technical Accuracy project found this still to be the c<strong>as</strong>e <strong>at</strong> age 16, with all writers<br />
tend<strong>in</strong>g to str<strong>in</strong>g together m<strong>an</strong>y clauses <strong>in</strong> one sentence us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d or but (QCA,<br />
1999).<br />
2.7.4 Types of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>volves the use of clauses <strong>in</strong>side the Subject, Object / Complement,<br />
or Adverbial slots. This c<strong>an</strong> be done <strong>in</strong> two ways: the Subject etc c<strong>an</strong> be a clause, or a<br />
clause c<strong>an</strong> be embedded with<strong>in</strong> the Subject etc.<br />
Let’s look first <strong>at</strong> when <strong>an</strong> entire slot is taken by a clause. If the Subject, Object or<br />
Complement is itself a clause, these are called Nom<strong>in</strong>al clauses (because they take the<br />
place of a noun). Clauses <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot are called Adverbial clauses.<br />
Nom<strong>in</strong>al clause <strong>in</strong> Subject slot:<br />
to see if {wh<strong>at</strong> he saw 5 seconds ago} {w<strong>as</strong>} {true}<br />
S V C<br />
Nom<strong>in</strong>al clause <strong>in</strong> Object slot:<br />
{I} {th<strong>in</strong>k} {this is enough to get people cycl<strong>in</strong>g}<br />
S V O<br />
Nom<strong>in</strong>al clauses used <strong>in</strong> the Object position have been found to be the most common<br />
type <strong>in</strong> children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g (Perera, 1984), especially, <strong>as</strong> above, after verbs like say,<br />
th<strong>in</strong>k, know. Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e Subject clauses are used less, <strong>an</strong>d develop l<strong>at</strong>er th<strong>an</strong> Object<br />
<strong>an</strong>d Adverbial clauses.<br />
Adverbial clauses c<strong>an</strong> be of different sorts – pupils <strong>in</strong> other studies have been found to<br />
put clauses on to the ends of sentences before they use them <strong>in</strong> other positions; <strong>in</strong> the<br />
next example, two Adverbial phr<strong>as</strong>es are followed by <strong>an</strong> Adverbial clause of time,<br />
l<strong>in</strong>ked to the ma<strong>in</strong> clause by the sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or when<br />
{John } {w<strong>as</strong> com<strong>in</strong>g} {back} {from school} {when he saw everybody queue up for this new game}<br />
S V A A A<br />
Adverbial clauses are a central resource for the development of ide<strong>as</strong> because they<br />
allow writers to show connections between people, objects, events <strong>an</strong>d actions. The<br />
connections th<strong>at</strong> c<strong>an</strong> be expressed are various, <strong>an</strong>d have been shown by other studies<br />
to develop <strong>at</strong> different r<strong>at</strong>es. Adverbial clauses th<strong>at</strong> show simple time rel<strong>at</strong>ions<br />
(clauses beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g when...), cause or re<strong>as</strong>on (because...) <strong>an</strong>d condition (if...) are found<br />
to be used <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g towards the end of primary school <strong>in</strong> previous studies, along<br />
with clauses th<strong>at</strong> expla<strong>in</strong> the purpose of <strong>an</strong> action (so th<strong>at</strong>...) or its results (so...)<br />
clauses. Clause of place (where...), more adv<strong>an</strong>ced time connections (before, after,<br />
until), m<strong>an</strong>ner (<strong>as</strong> if...) <strong>an</strong>d concession (although..., unless...) develop l<strong>at</strong>er,.<br />
The second way of do<strong>in</strong>g sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion, embedd<strong>in</strong>g clauses with<strong>in</strong> slots, makes use<br />
of Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses. Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses c<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>clude more <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion about a noun th<strong>at</strong><br />
is already mentioned, <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the example below, which h<strong>as</strong> a simple S + V
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construction, with a rel<strong>at</strong>ive clause (with absent rel<strong>at</strong>ive pronoun th<strong>at</strong>) everyone w<strong>as</strong><br />
wait<strong>in</strong>g for <strong>in</strong>side the Subject:<br />
{the big day (th<strong>at</strong>) everyone w<strong>as</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g for } {had arrived }<br />
S<br />
V<br />
Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses appear <strong>in</strong> children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> their mother tongue towards the end of<br />
primary school, first <strong>at</strong> the end of clauses, <strong>an</strong>d then <strong>in</strong> Subject slots. The most<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses, which first l<strong>an</strong>guage studies have found to be still<br />
develop<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> both talk <strong>an</strong>d writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> secondary level, are those <strong>in</strong>troduced by whose,<br />
which, <strong>an</strong>d prepositions + which. A feedback effect comes <strong>in</strong>to play with this fe<strong>at</strong>ure –<br />
because such clauses are ma<strong>in</strong>ly found <strong>in</strong> written discourse, children do not encounter<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y examples of them until literacy skills are quite well developed. This contributes<br />
to their l<strong>at</strong>e development, alongside the fact th<strong>at</strong> they express more complic<strong>at</strong>ed ide<strong>as</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d connections.<br />
2.7.5 Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite clauses<br />
The clauses discussed so far all have f<strong>in</strong>ite verbs, i.e. one th<strong>at</strong> conta<strong>in</strong>s <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
about the Subject <strong>an</strong>d the action by be<strong>in</strong>g marked for person, tense or number. Nonf<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
clauses have a verb, but it is not so marked. The verb c<strong>an</strong> be <strong>in</strong> the b<strong>as</strong>e form to<br />
get, <strong>in</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t participle (-ed) form or the present participle form (-<strong>in</strong>g), <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the<br />
follow<strong>in</strong>g examples:<br />
Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite clause <strong>as</strong> Adverbial<br />
{Lee <strong>an</strong>d his mum} {jo<strong>in</strong>ed } {to the end of the large queue } {to get <strong>in</strong>to the shop}<br />
S V A A<br />
Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite participial clause <strong>in</strong>side <strong>an</strong> Object<br />
{they } {saw} {a new game called C<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong>}<br />
S V O<br />
Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite participial clause <strong>as</strong> Subject:<br />
{Go<strong>in</strong>g shopp<strong>in</strong>g with your mum on a S<strong>at</strong>urday} {w<strong>as</strong>n’t} {the th<strong>in</strong>g a 13 year old did.}<br />
S V C<br />
The most complex type of non-f<strong>in</strong>ite clause uses a preposition followed by a participle<br />
verb form, <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> this example from the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project:<br />
Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite participial clause <strong>as</strong> Adverbial<br />
{By Burn<strong>in</strong>g body f<strong>at</strong> <strong>an</strong>d rais<strong>in</strong>g your metabolic r<strong>at</strong>e} {you} {c<strong>an</strong> loose} {weight}<br />
A S V O<br />
As a gramm<strong>at</strong>ical resource, these clauses are excellent for develop<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion th<strong>at</strong><br />
h<strong>as</strong> been already mentioned, while <strong>at</strong> the same time allow<strong>in</strong>g expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of re<strong>as</strong>on,<br />
result, time etc. In the Technical Accuracy project, the use of participial non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
clauses w<strong>as</strong> a fe<strong>at</strong>ure of A grade writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> age 16, add<strong>in</strong>g variety to writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d<br />
offer<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong> import<strong>an</strong>t way of l<strong>in</strong>k<strong>in</strong>g sentences.
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3 Project details<br />
3.1 The scripts <strong>an</strong>d the writers<br />
A total of 264 pupils from Year 6 of 13 primary schools particip<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> the project by<br />
contribut<strong>in</strong>g samples of their writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
3.1.1 The schools <strong>an</strong>d pupils<br />
The schools were loc<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> 8 LEAs across Engl<strong>an</strong>d. All were urb<strong>an</strong> schools but they<br />
varied <strong>in</strong> context. The proportions of children with a first l<strong>an</strong>guage other th<strong>an</strong> <strong>English</strong><br />
covered the full r<strong>an</strong>ge from 0.8% to 100%. The proportion of children eligible for free<br />
school meals (<strong>an</strong> approxim<strong>at</strong>e me<strong>as</strong>ure of socio-economic level) r<strong>an</strong>ged from 2% to<br />
63%. Details are given <strong>in</strong> Appendix 1.<br />
Schools provided <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion on each pupil about first l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d time <strong>in</strong> UK. We<br />
aimed for a bal<strong>an</strong>ce <strong>in</strong> the number of pupils us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
<strong>an</strong>d <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> mother tongue, across Levels 3, 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5 <strong>in</strong> the <strong>English</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional<br />
Curriculum Test (<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>), <strong>an</strong>d gender. Table 2 shows the actual numbers of pupils<br />
provid<strong>in</strong>g scripts.<br />
EAL (N = 138) EMT (N = 126)<br />
level 3 level 4 level 5 level 3 level 4 level 5<br />
34 70 34 43 49 34<br />
boys girls boys girls boys girls boys girls boys girls boys girls<br />
17 17 35 35 6 28 24 19 26 23 11 23<br />
Table 1 Pupils provid<strong>in</strong>g scripts for the project (Total number = 264)<br />
Tak<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> a pr<strong>in</strong>ciple th<strong>at</strong> <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t 30 scripts are needed to make valid comparisons, the<br />
follow<strong>in</strong>g types of comparisons could be made:<br />
• between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> comb<strong>in</strong>ed groups<br />
• <strong>at</strong> each of the levels, between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• with<strong>in</strong> each of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT l<strong>an</strong>guage backgrounds, between the writ<strong>in</strong>g of<br />
pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4, 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5, 3 <strong>an</strong>d 5.<br />
• between the writ<strong>in</strong>g of boys <strong>an</strong>d girls, for all pupils.<br />
3.1.2 Length of time <strong>in</strong> UK<br />
All pupils had been <strong>in</strong> the UK for <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t five years, with <strong>an</strong> average of 7 years <strong>an</strong>d 2<br />
months across the 86 pupils for whom this <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion w<strong>as</strong> provided.
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3.1.3 L<strong>an</strong>guage backgrounds<br />
The major first l<strong>an</strong>guages of the pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g EAL were Punjabi, Urdu, Bengali <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Gujer<strong>at</strong>i, with small numbers of pupils speak<strong>in</strong>g Somali, Turkish, Arabic <strong>an</strong>d other<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guages. Full details c<strong>an</strong> be found <strong>in</strong> the table <strong>in</strong> Appendix 1.<br />
First l<strong>an</strong>guage literacy<br />
Schools were <strong>as</strong>ked whether pupils were liter<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong> their first l<strong>an</strong>guage. 32 of the 138<br />
EAL learners were said to be liter<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong> their mother tongue, 85 not liter<strong>at</strong>e, <strong>an</strong>d the<br />
rest ‘unknown’.<br />
3.2 The scripts <strong>an</strong>d the writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks<br />
Schools provided two pieces of writ<strong>in</strong>g for each pupil from the <strong>English</strong> (<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>)<br />
N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum Test (NCT), taken <strong>in</strong> July 2003. The test paper c<strong>an</strong> be found <strong>in</strong><br />
Appendix 2.<br />
The first of the two writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks required pupils to write a local radio advertisement<br />
to persuade people to buy a new toy. The second, longer, writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>k required<br />
children to write a story, us<strong>in</strong>g a set of four pictures which presented the characters<br />
<strong>an</strong>d the sett<strong>in</strong>g, <strong>an</strong>d the start of the plot. The children had to write the story us<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
pictures <strong>as</strong> prompts, <strong>an</strong>d complete it <strong>in</strong> their own way.<br />
Appendix 3 <strong>in</strong>cludes sample stories <strong>an</strong>d radio advertisements written by six pupils,<br />
three of whom are learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d three of whom<br />
have <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> mother tongue. It is import<strong>an</strong>t to note th<strong>at</strong> the sample scripts are not<br />
<strong>in</strong>tended to be represent<strong>at</strong>ive of the grade levels. Pupils may achieve the same overall<br />
level with different profiles of strengths <strong>an</strong>d weaknesses. S<strong>in</strong>gle samples of work<br />
c<strong>an</strong>not therefore be taken <strong>as</strong> represent<strong>in</strong>g a particular level of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d may <strong>in</strong>clude<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ures th<strong>at</strong> are above or below the st<strong>an</strong>dard typical of a level.<br />
Extracts from these <strong>an</strong>d other scripts used <strong>in</strong> this report are labelled with the pupil’s<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage background (EAL or EMT) <strong>an</strong>d their overall <strong>English</strong> NCT <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> level (3,<br />
4 or 5).<br />
3.3 The project <strong>an</strong>alyses <strong>an</strong>d the N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum mark<br />
scheme<br />
The scripts were written for the 2003 N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum <strong>English</strong> tests <strong>an</strong>d had been<br />
marked accord<strong>in</strong>g to the QCA Mark scheme (2003). The overall level result for<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 is <strong>an</strong> aggreg<strong>at</strong>ion of four separ<strong>at</strong>e components: the marks from<br />
the two writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks described above, a mark for a spell<strong>in</strong>g test, <strong>an</strong>d a mark for<br />
h<strong>an</strong>dwrit<strong>in</strong>g. In each of the writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks, marks are awarded for <strong>as</strong>pects of writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
with<strong>in</strong> the three str<strong>an</strong>ds of ‘composition <strong>an</strong>d effect’, ‘text structure <strong>an</strong>d org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion’,<br />
<strong>an</strong>d ‘sentence structure <strong>an</strong>d punctu<strong>at</strong>ion’.<br />
The start<strong>in</strong>g po<strong>in</strong>t for the project w<strong>as</strong> the groups of scripts graded <strong>at</strong> each of the levels.<br />
We w<strong>an</strong>ted to f<strong>in</strong>d out how EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g differs with<strong>in</strong> these levels, <strong>an</strong>d
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whether wh<strong>at</strong> dist<strong>in</strong>guishes the writ<strong>in</strong>g of pupils work<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> different levels, e.g. <strong>at</strong><br />
level 3 <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> level 4, differs for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. This required <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>at</strong><br />
a very f<strong>in</strong>e level of detail. Aspects of writ<strong>in</strong>g which were comb<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>in</strong>to the<br />
‘<strong>as</strong>sessment str<strong>an</strong>ds’ of the mark<strong>in</strong>g scheme were often separ<strong>at</strong>ely counted or r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong><br />
our project. R<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> <strong>as</strong>sess<strong>in</strong>g writ<strong>in</strong>g by plac<strong>in</strong>g with<strong>in</strong> b<strong>an</strong>ds, we counted m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ures numerically.<br />
While the project <strong>an</strong>alyses <strong>in</strong>evitably overlap with the mark<strong>in</strong>g scheme, they are<br />
different <strong>in</strong> purpose <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> amount of detail. Researchers <strong>an</strong>d r<strong>at</strong>ers were not aware of<br />
the marks given to pieces of writ<strong>in</strong>g or of a pupil’s overall grad<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
3.4 The <strong>an</strong>alysis of the scripts<br />
The ma<strong>in</strong> focus of the <strong>an</strong>alysis w<strong>as</strong> the story produced from the longer t<strong>as</strong>k, which<br />
w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>alysed for genre <strong>an</strong>d for l<strong>an</strong>guage use (details <strong>in</strong> Chapter 4). The <strong>an</strong>alyses of<br />
the 264 story scripts produced both qualit<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d qu<strong>an</strong>tit<strong>at</strong>ive d<strong>at</strong>a about the writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
of the six groups of students. St<strong>at</strong>istical tests were carried out to compare the me<strong>an</strong><br />
scores on a r<strong>an</strong>ge of fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g across groups. The test results were then<br />
<strong>in</strong>terpreted along with the more qualit<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d holistic <strong>an</strong>alyses to underst<strong>an</strong>d how<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g comb<strong>in</strong>e to produce written texts, <strong>an</strong>d to develop a picture of<br />
typical writ<strong>in</strong>g styles <strong>an</strong>d writ<strong>in</strong>g problems of the groups <strong>at</strong> different levels <strong>an</strong>d of<br />
different l<strong>an</strong>guage backgrounds. Appendix 4 conta<strong>in</strong>s details of the methodology.<br />
The shorter t<strong>as</strong>k of writ<strong>in</strong>g a radio advertisement w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> a sample of 40<br />
scripts (reported <strong>in</strong> Chapter 8).
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4 <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> a story<br />
The longer writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>k required children to write a story. Narr<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>as</strong> a genre is<br />
fundamental <strong>in</strong> several ways. It is the genre most frequently encountered by children<br />
<strong>in</strong> their early experiences; it is the genre th<strong>at</strong> young writers develop first, although<br />
some <strong>as</strong>pects are l<strong>at</strong>e develop<strong>in</strong>g; it is one of the b<strong>as</strong>ic ways <strong>in</strong> which we underst<strong>an</strong>d<br />
our lives <strong>as</strong> hum<strong>an</strong>s.<br />
The story genre, which would <strong>in</strong>clude fairy tales, m<strong>an</strong>y novels <strong>an</strong>d television soap<br />
oper<strong>as</strong>, conventionally fe<strong>at</strong>ure a set of characters <strong>in</strong> a particular sett<strong>in</strong>g or context. The<br />
characters are <strong>in</strong>volved <strong>in</strong> a series of actions th<strong>at</strong> lead to a resolution or dénouement.<br />
Very often the actions are required to solve a problem th<strong>at</strong> characters are faced with or<br />
to reach a goal th<strong>at</strong> they are set. It is <strong>in</strong> the solv<strong>in</strong>g of the problem th<strong>at</strong> characters<br />
reveal their strengths <strong>an</strong>d weaknesses. The <strong>in</strong>terest of a story for a reader is <strong>in</strong> how the<br />
characters behave <strong>an</strong>d how they tackle the problems th<strong>at</strong> they encounter. The writer’s<br />
t<strong>as</strong>k is to make characters <strong>an</strong>d sett<strong>in</strong>g come alive for the reader, to keep the reader<br />
<strong>in</strong>terested <strong>in</strong> wh<strong>at</strong> the characters do, <strong>an</strong>d to provide a s<strong>at</strong>isfy<strong>in</strong>g – or <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
– resolution.<br />
4.1 The writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>k<br />
The t<strong>as</strong>k prompt w<strong>as</strong> a set of four pictures which presented <strong>as</strong>pects of the story:<br />
• Characters - a boy <strong>an</strong>d his mum, a girl<br />
• Sett<strong>in</strong>g - a games store<br />
• Problem - boy <strong>an</strong>d girl both w<strong>an</strong>t the l<strong>as</strong>t game <strong>in</strong> the store<br />
• The beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g of the plot – the boy eagerly show<strong>in</strong>g his mother a poster for<br />
the new game; queu<strong>in</strong>g to get <strong>in</strong>to the shop; rush<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>side the shop; boy <strong>an</strong>d<br />
girl hold<strong>in</strong>g a game.<br />
The children had to write the story us<strong>in</strong>g the pictures <strong>as</strong> prompts, complet<strong>in</strong>g it <strong>in</strong><br />
their own way. Completion required children to “decide how the story ends”, i.e.<br />
construct a Resolution to the problem.<br />
For pl<strong>an</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g, children were given six bubbles <strong>in</strong> which to write “useful words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es”. The head<strong>in</strong>gs of the bubbles represent <strong>as</strong>pects of the story: characters, <strong>in</strong><br />
the queue, <strong>in</strong>side the shop, when the boy sees the poster, <strong>as</strong> the shop opens, how the<br />
story ends.<br />
Pupils were given 45 m<strong>in</strong>utes writ<strong>in</strong>g time, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g up to 10 m<strong>in</strong>utes pl<strong>an</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g time,<br />
<strong>an</strong>d had <strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>swer booklet with two l<strong>in</strong>ed pages to write <strong>in</strong>. They could write more if<br />
they wished.<br />
4.2 The <strong>an</strong>alysis<br />
Follow<strong>in</strong>g the framework for writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> Figure 5, we looked both <strong>at</strong> how writers put<br />
together the story <strong>as</strong> a whole <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> how they used their l<strong>an</strong>guage resources to select<br />
words to compose the sentences <strong>an</strong>d clauses th<strong>at</strong> made up th<strong>at</strong> whole.<br />
We beg<strong>an</strong> by <strong>an</strong>alys<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> depth a subset of twenty stories across l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
background <strong>an</strong>d levels, <strong>an</strong>d used this process to decide how to <strong>an</strong>alyse the full set,
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wherever possible follow<strong>in</strong>g the methods of the earlier <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project. The<br />
follow<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>alyses were carried out on the full d<strong>at</strong>a set:<br />
1. Textual <strong>an</strong>alysis: narr<strong>at</strong>ive development <strong>an</strong>d use of l<strong>an</strong>guage resources<br />
2. Error <strong>an</strong>alysis: types of errors made<br />
3. Lexical <strong>an</strong>alysis: use of vocabulary<br />
4. Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>alysis: metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
5. Use of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es.<br />
The list of fe<strong>at</strong>ures <strong>an</strong>alysed is shown <strong>in</strong> Table 3, with technical details <strong>in</strong> Appendix 4.<br />
Level<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Construct<strong>in</strong>g a story<br />
Fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Content<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive Development<br />
• sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• character<br />
• problem<br />
• resolution<br />
Use of picture prompts.<br />
Cre<strong>at</strong>ivity <strong>in</strong> end<strong>in</strong>g the story.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage resources<br />
To develop sett<strong>in</strong>g, character, problem,<br />
resolution<br />
• description<br />
• figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
• direct speech<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Us<strong>in</strong>g l<strong>an</strong>guage to write the story<br />
sentence <strong>an</strong>d clause level<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d word level<br />
technical accuracy<br />
Content<br />
The detailed development of the sett<strong>in</strong>g,<br />
characters, plot.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage resources<br />
Use of Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Length <strong>an</strong>d number of<br />
• clause types<br />
• phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d words <strong>in</strong> clause<br />
slots<br />
Vocabulary<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage: metaphors <strong>an</strong>d<br />
similes<br />
Agreements:<br />
• Subject-Verb<br />
• Noun-Pronoun<br />
• Plurals<br />
Articles<br />
Verb use <strong>an</strong>d end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Prepositions<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion: comm<strong>as</strong>, full stops, <strong>in</strong>verted<br />
comm<strong>as</strong><br />
Table 2 Fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>alysed
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4.3 The overall construction of the story: Analysis<br />
In the rema<strong>in</strong>der of this chapter, we beg<strong>in</strong> the report<strong>in</strong>g of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs by focus<strong>in</strong>g on the<br />
whole text level - the stories th<strong>at</strong> constructed from the given picture prompts. At this<br />
overall level, we looked <strong>in</strong> detail <strong>at</strong> how the narr<strong>at</strong>ive w<strong>as</strong> developed. Each of the four<br />
components of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive – sett<strong>in</strong>g, characters, problem <strong>an</strong>d resolution – w<strong>as</strong> r<strong>at</strong>ed<br />
for how much it w<strong>as</strong> developed, <strong>an</strong>d how. In the prelim<strong>in</strong>ary detailed <strong>an</strong>alysis, it<br />
became clear th<strong>at</strong> the str<strong>at</strong>egies used to develop the story were of three ma<strong>in</strong> types:<br />
• description<br />
• figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
• direct speech.<br />
Writers varied <strong>in</strong> how m<strong>an</strong>y of these they used <strong>an</strong>d how much use they made of them.<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers also judged whether or not writers followed the picture prompts. Children’s<br />
cre<strong>at</strong>ivity <strong>in</strong> construct<strong>in</strong>g the story w<strong>as</strong> restricted by the t<strong>as</strong>k to the problem resolution<br />
stage, decid<strong>in</strong>g who got the game <strong>an</strong>d how, <strong>an</strong>d wh<strong>at</strong> happened to the characters<br />
afterwards. We <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ed three <strong>as</strong>pects of the resolution: whether it w<strong>as</strong> complete;<br />
whether it w<strong>as</strong> somehow cre<strong>at</strong>ive or orig<strong>in</strong>al; <strong>an</strong>d whether or not the writer <strong>in</strong>cluded a<br />
moral.<br />
F<strong>in</strong>ally, <strong>at</strong> this whole text level, we r<strong>at</strong>ed use of paragraphs by count<strong>in</strong>g how m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
were used.<br />
4.4 Overall construction of the story: F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
4.4.1 Overview of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Each of the ‘F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs’ sections of the report beg<strong>in</strong>s with <strong>an</strong> Overview section which<br />
br<strong>in</strong>gs together the ma<strong>in</strong> results from the rest of the chapter <strong>in</strong>to a shaded box. Where<br />
st<strong>at</strong>istical tests were carried out, signific<strong>an</strong>ce levels are reported <strong>in</strong> brackets (for more<br />
details on <strong>an</strong>alysis, see Appendix 4); absence of brackets implies st<strong>at</strong>istical tests were<br />
not applicable.<br />
The sub-sections th<strong>at</strong> follow present the f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>in</strong> more detail <strong>an</strong>d discuss possible<br />
expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ions <strong>an</strong>d implic<strong>at</strong>ions. Results are marked with bullet po<strong>in</strong>ts; implic<strong>at</strong>ions are<br />
placed <strong>in</strong> non-shaded boxes.<br />
Comparison between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories<br />
• There were no st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t differences <strong>in</strong> overall story construction<br />
between the two groups when taken across levels.<br />
• EMT stories were more likely to follow the picture prompts accur<strong>at</strong>ely, the higher<br />
the level achieved <strong>in</strong> NCT <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>. This w<strong>as</strong> not the c<strong>as</strong>e for EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g, where<br />
the number of stories not accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow<strong>in</strong>g the given pictures rema<strong>in</strong>ed<br />
between 30 <strong>an</strong>d 40%, even <strong>at</strong> level 5.
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Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> by pupils <strong>at</strong> level 3 showed similar (low) amounts of development <strong>in</strong> each<br />
component <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories, except for the Resolution where EAL did<br />
more development.<br />
• Mak<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs complete <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> a particular problem <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, <strong>in</strong> comparison with EMT pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g the same<br />
level, <strong>an</strong>d with other levels.<br />
• Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners <strong>at</strong> level 3 had similar problems with under-use of<br />
paragraph<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> their stories.<br />
• A gre<strong>at</strong>er proportion of the text of EAL stories w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> direct speech (approach<strong>in</strong>g<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
Comparisons between stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 <strong>an</strong>d level 3<br />
Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4:<br />
• were more likely to follow the pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
• <strong>in</strong>cluded more development of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
• had fewer <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• had more end<strong>in</strong>gs r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• showed better use of paragraph<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4<br />
• Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 have slightly less development of each<br />
component of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
• EAL stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 showed no clear differences with EMT<br />
<strong>in</strong> preferred str<strong>at</strong>egies, apart from gre<strong>at</strong>er use of description <strong>in</strong> the Resolution<br />
stage.<br />
Comparisons between stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>an</strong>d level 4<br />
Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5<br />
• were slightly less likely to follow the pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
• <strong>in</strong>cluded more development of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
• showed more use of description, direct speech <strong>an</strong>d figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage to develop<br />
components of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
• had fewer <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• had more end<strong>in</strong>gs r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• showed better use of paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5<br />
• Considerably more EAL th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories did not accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow the pictures.<br />
• EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong>ed more development of Sett<strong>in</strong>g, less development of<br />
Characters, <strong>an</strong>d of Problem <strong>an</strong>d Resolution, th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
• EAL stories made less use of description to develop Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Resolution.<br />
• EAL stories made more use of direct speech (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce)
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• EAL stories made considerably more use of direct speech to develop the Problem<br />
<strong>an</strong>d considerably less use of direct speech to develop the Resolution<br />
• EAL stories made more use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage to develop Characters.<br />
• EAL stories had more <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d fewer <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
4.4.2 Follow<strong>in</strong>g the pictures<br />
Did the writers use the storyboard to frame their narr<strong>at</strong>ive?<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers were <strong>as</strong>ked to note when pupils did not accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow the given pictures.<br />
For example, <strong>in</strong> one story the boy <strong>an</strong>d girl were fight<strong>in</strong>g over a poster, <strong>an</strong>d not, <strong>as</strong><br />
shown, over a game. In <strong>an</strong>other, the problem became th<strong>at</strong> the boy did not have enough<br />
money to buy the game, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong>, <strong>as</strong> shown <strong>in</strong> the picture, th<strong>at</strong> there w<strong>as</strong> only one<br />
game left.<br />
• 68% of pupils wrote <strong>as</strong> they were <strong>as</strong>ked to; 32% did not accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow the<br />
pictures <strong>in</strong> some way, with stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 more likely to<br />
<strong>in</strong>clude some <strong>in</strong>accuracy between picture <strong>an</strong>d text.<br />
• There w<strong>as</strong> no st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t difference overall between EMT <strong>an</strong>d EAL<br />
stories <strong>in</strong> how accur<strong>at</strong>ely pictures were written about, but differences emerged<br />
when we looked <strong>at</strong> the levels separ<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
Figure 6 shows how m<strong>an</strong>y stories were r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> produc<strong>in</strong>g a story which did not<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow the pictures.<br />
% of scripts th<strong>at</strong> did not<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow the pictures<br />
60<br />
50<br />
40<br />
30<br />
20<br />
10<br />
0<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
Figure 6 Percentage of stories th<strong>at</strong> did not accur<strong>at</strong>ely follow the pictures<br />
• Figure 6 shows a different p<strong>at</strong>tern across levels for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. The<br />
number of EMT stories stick<strong>in</strong>g closely to the pictures <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>es with level. At<br />
level 3, EMT stories were most likely to <strong>in</strong>clude <strong>in</strong>accuracies, but <strong>at</strong> levels 4 <strong>an</strong>d<br />
5, EAL stories were <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>gly more likely th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories to <strong>in</strong>clude<br />
<strong>in</strong>accuracies.<br />
• The proportion of stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 th<strong>at</strong> did not accur<strong>at</strong>ely<br />
follow the pictures w<strong>as</strong> surpris<strong>in</strong>gly high (35%), <strong>in</strong> comparison with both their<br />
EMT peers (9%) <strong>an</strong>d with stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 (33%).
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From look<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> the stories, we c<strong>an</strong>not know the re<strong>as</strong>ons for differences between the<br />
pictures <strong>an</strong>d the texts. It could be th<strong>at</strong> pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g EAL were more cre<strong>at</strong>ive, th<strong>at</strong><br />
they <strong>in</strong>terpreted the pictures differently, th<strong>at</strong> they did not th<strong>in</strong>k it import<strong>an</strong>t to stick<br />
accur<strong>at</strong>ely to the given pictures, or th<strong>at</strong> they had problems f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g the <strong>English</strong> to<br />
describe wh<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> happen<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the pictures <strong>an</strong>d so used the <strong>English</strong> they knew to tell<br />
a slightly different story. It would seem import<strong>an</strong>t to explore further how EAL<br />
learners <strong>in</strong>terpret <strong>an</strong>d use pictures <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks, s<strong>in</strong>ce achievement <strong>in</strong> some<br />
curriculum subjects other th<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> will require close <strong>an</strong>d accur<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong>terpret<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
of pictures used to support writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Teachers should be aware th<strong>at</strong> pictures may not convey the same me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>gs to all<br />
children. It would be useful to check how pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g EAL <strong>in</strong>terpret pictures used<br />
to present the plot of stories, or <strong>as</strong> stimulus for other types of t<strong>as</strong>ks. In cl<strong>as</strong>sroom<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g activities, altern<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>in</strong>terpret<strong>at</strong>ions of pictures could be discussed before<br />
pupils beg<strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g. Word activities could help ensure th<strong>at</strong> pupils learn or activ<strong>at</strong>e the<br />
vocabulary needed to tell the given story.<br />
In prepar<strong>in</strong>g for <strong>an</strong>y writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>k, pupils should be helped to underst<strong>an</strong>d clearly how<br />
closely they are expected to stick to the content <strong>an</strong>d requirements given.<br />
4.4.3 Development of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
How much development did the writers use <strong>in</strong> four components of the story: Sett<strong>in</strong>g,<br />
Characters, Problem, <strong>an</strong>d Resolution?<br />
To show wh<strong>at</strong> we me<strong>an</strong> by ‘narr<strong>at</strong>ive development’ <strong>in</strong> the story genre, it is helpful to<br />
look <strong>at</strong> the sample stories <strong>in</strong> Appendix 3. Story 4 (EMT 3) shows m<strong>in</strong>imal<br />
development of the characters, only giv<strong>in</strong>g their names:<br />
David <strong>an</strong>d his mum clare<br />
<strong>an</strong>d of sett<strong>in</strong>g:<br />
shopp<strong>in</strong>g … go<strong>in</strong>g back to the car<br />
In comparison, story 3 (EAL 5) h<strong>as</strong> extended development of the sett<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the first<br />
paragraph, <strong>in</strong>volv<strong>in</strong>g figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d description. The character Peter is<br />
developed <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>es 11, 22-24 by describ<strong>in</strong>g his appear<strong>an</strong>ce <strong>an</strong>d his background:<br />
Peter beg<strong>an</strong> to get imp<strong>at</strong>ient – his face w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g red.<br />
His family were not <strong>as</strong> wealthy, <strong>as</strong> the others on their street;…<br />
Story 6 (EMT 5) makes very good use of direct speech to tell the reader about the<br />
Characters <strong>an</strong>d other <strong>as</strong>pects of the story.<br />
• As we might expect, there w<strong>as</strong> a general picture of more narr<strong>at</strong>ive development<br />
from the lowest to the highest group.
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• The best stories did most development of Characters, followed by Sett<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Resolution, with le<strong>as</strong>t development of the Problem. The problem - one game <strong>an</strong>d<br />
two children w<strong>an</strong>t<strong>in</strong>g it - w<strong>as</strong> a turn<strong>in</strong>g po<strong>in</strong>t <strong>in</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y stories r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong><br />
extended episode.<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> by pupils <strong>at</strong> level 3 showed similar (low) amounts of development <strong>in</strong> each<br />
component <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories, except for the Resolution. Here EAL stories<br />
did more development, with 44% do<strong>in</strong>g ‘some’ or ‘a lot’ of development <strong>as</strong><br />
compared with 30% of EMT stories.<br />
• Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 have slightly less development of each<br />
component of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
• In writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5, EMT stories showed more development<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EAL stories <strong>in</strong> all components except the Sett<strong>in</strong>g. Figure 7 shows the<br />
percentage of stories th<strong>at</strong> were r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> do<strong>in</strong>g ‘some’ or ‘a lot’ of development of<br />
the four <strong>as</strong>pects. Apart from development of the Sett<strong>in</strong>g, the differences between<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT have widened <strong>an</strong>d are particularly noticeable (more th<strong>an</strong> 20%) <strong>in</strong><br />
the Problem <strong>an</strong>d Resolution. We will discuss this further <strong>as</strong> we proceed <strong>in</strong> the next<br />
section to see how development w<strong>as</strong> carried out.<br />
% of scripts<br />
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80<br />
60<br />
40<br />
20<br />
0<br />
sett<strong>in</strong>g characters problem resolution<br />
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EMT5<br />
Figure 7 Percentage of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories <strong>at</strong> level 5 <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g 'some' or 'a lot' of narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development<br />
EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 could be helped to do more development of<br />
Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d Resolution.<br />
All pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 could be helped to do more development of each <strong>as</strong>pect.<br />
Which of the str<strong>at</strong>egies - description, figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, <strong>an</strong>d direct speech - did<br />
writers use to develop the narr<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d how did this vary across components?<br />
• Description w<strong>as</strong> the most frequently used str<strong>at</strong>egy, followed by direct speech <strong>an</strong>d<br />
then figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.<br />
• Description w<strong>as</strong> used to develop Sett<strong>in</strong>g (<strong>in</strong> 85% of all stories), Characters (82%),<br />
Problem (71%), <strong>an</strong>d Resolution (67%).
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• Direct speech w<strong>as</strong> used to develop Resolution (<strong>in</strong> 28% of all stories), Problem<br />
(26%), <strong>an</strong>d Characters (24%). Only 6% of stories used Direct Speech to develop<br />
the Sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage w<strong>as</strong> used to develop Sett<strong>in</strong>g (<strong>in</strong> 15% of all stories), Characters<br />
(11%) - primarily <strong>in</strong> EAL stories r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> EMT - <strong>an</strong>d, to a small extent,<br />
Problem (5%) <strong>an</strong>d Resolution (3%).<br />
• Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage w<strong>as</strong> used more by higher levels th<strong>an</strong> lower levels.<br />
(See Chapter 6 for more detailed <strong>an</strong>alysis of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.)<br />
• EAL stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 used similar (small) amounts of<br />
description, direct speech <strong>an</strong>d figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> each component, except <strong>in</strong><br />
the Resolution stage, where they made gre<strong>at</strong>er use of direct speech <strong>an</strong>d less use of<br />
description.<br />
• EAL stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 showed no clear differences with EMT<br />
<strong>in</strong> preferred str<strong>at</strong>egies, apart from gre<strong>at</strong>er use of description <strong>in</strong> the Resolution<br />
stage.<br />
• Stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 made consistently more use of the three<br />
str<strong>at</strong>egies th<strong>an</strong> the other levels.<br />
• When we look <strong>at</strong> the components <strong>in</strong> which EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g differed most from EMT<br />
(Problem <strong>an</strong>d Resolution), we f<strong>in</strong>d differ<strong>in</strong>g use of str<strong>at</strong>egies:<br />
o Problem: EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g used more direct speech th<strong>an</strong> EMT, with the highest<br />
use of <strong>an</strong>y group <strong>at</strong> 47% of stories; slightly less description; similar r<strong>at</strong>es of<br />
use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.<br />
o Resolution: EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g used less description <strong>an</strong>d considerably less direct<br />
speech th<strong>an</strong> EMT.<br />
In the next section, f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs about the orig<strong>in</strong>ality of Resolutions <strong>in</strong> stories will lead to<br />
some recommend<strong>at</strong>ions for teach<strong>in</strong>g writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
All pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 could be helped to <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e the amount of<br />
development of Sett<strong>in</strong>g, Characters, <strong>an</strong>d Resolution by th<strong>in</strong>k<strong>in</strong>g about the imag<strong>in</strong>ed<br />
readers of their stories, wh<strong>at</strong> they might w<strong>an</strong>t to know, <strong>an</strong>d how this could be made<br />
<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g for them to read.<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g activities could <strong>in</strong>clude activities with stories th<strong>at</strong> are particularly<br />
rich <strong>in</strong> development, draw<strong>in</strong>g pupils’ <strong>at</strong>tention to how professional writers develop<br />
their characters, sett<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d plot <strong>at</strong> various po<strong>in</strong>ts <strong>in</strong> a story.
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4.4.4 Story end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the resolutions <strong>an</strong>d end<strong>in</strong>gs of their stories th<strong>at</strong> the young writers could show<br />
their orig<strong>in</strong>ality <strong>an</strong>d control of the genre. Our <strong>an</strong>alyses <strong>as</strong>ked the follow<strong>in</strong>g questions:<br />
W<strong>as</strong> the end<strong>in</strong>g complete? W<strong>as</strong> it <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g? Did it <strong>in</strong>clude a moral?<br />
Completeness of end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• Just over 20% of stories had end<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> were <strong>in</strong> some way <strong>in</strong>complete.<br />
• As we c<strong>an</strong> see <strong>in</strong> Figure 8, stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 showed the<br />
gre<strong>at</strong>est <strong>in</strong>cidence of <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs (41%).<br />
• Stories from pupils us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> mother tongue <strong>an</strong>d achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 showed<br />
a very low <strong>in</strong>cidence of <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
• In comparison, the number of stories with <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs from EAL learners<br />
also achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 w<strong>as</strong> surpris<strong>in</strong>gly high, <strong>at</strong> around 15%, <strong>an</strong>d the number from<br />
pupils us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> mother tongue <strong>an</strong>d achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4, <strong>at</strong> 27%.<br />
% of scripts with <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
45<br />
40<br />
35<br />
30<br />
25<br />
20<br />
15<br />
10<br />
5<br />
0<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
Figure 8 Percentage of stories with <strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Morals <strong>in</strong> end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• Morals occurred <strong>in</strong> just over 40% of stories. Whether or not there w<strong>as</strong> a moral <strong>in</strong><br />
the end<strong>in</strong>g varied widely <strong>an</strong>d seemed to be unconnected with level or l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
background.<br />
Interest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers were <strong>as</strong>ked to note if a story had <strong>an</strong> end<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> “especially <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g or<br />
cre<strong>at</strong>ive”. An <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g or cre<strong>at</strong>ive end<strong>in</strong>g would present the reader with a well<br />
written <strong>an</strong>d / or surpris<strong>in</strong>g resolution to the problem of who should have the game.<br />
Story 5 (EMT 4) for example h<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g, r<strong>at</strong>her poetic, end<strong>in</strong>g, with a moral:<br />
Even though he didn’t leave the shop with the game, he left with some pride.<br />
• Just over 10% of the stories were r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> hav<strong>in</strong>g “especially <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g or<br />
cre<strong>at</strong>ive” resolutions.<br />
• Figure 9 shows a steady <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e <strong>in</strong> these <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs across the levels for<br />
both groups, with EMT stories show<strong>in</strong>g a consistently higher percentage th<strong>an</strong><br />
EAL stories.
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• EAL learners writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> level 3 have a very low number of <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs,<br />
<strong>an</strong>d yet (Section 4.4.3) did more development of the Resolution th<strong>an</strong> their EMT<br />
peers. Direct speech w<strong>as</strong> their preferred development str<strong>at</strong>egy <strong>at</strong> this narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
stage. Story 1 illustr<strong>at</strong>es a story with <strong>an</strong> end<strong>in</strong>g developed through direct speech<br />
(l<strong>in</strong>es 22 - 24); the Resolution (l<strong>in</strong>e 20) is short <strong>an</strong>d not very dram<strong>at</strong>ic - the girl<br />
just gives the boy the game. The end<strong>in</strong>g is not particularly effective <strong>in</strong> clos<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
story <strong>an</strong>d w<strong>as</strong> not r<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• The gap between the number of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories with “especially <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
or cre<strong>at</strong>ive” end<strong>in</strong>gs widens <strong>at</strong> level 5.<br />
% of stories with <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
25<br />
20<br />
15<br />
10<br />
5<br />
0<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
Figure 9 Percentage of stories with “especially <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g or cre<strong>at</strong>ive” end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
We c<strong>an</strong> recall here the differences reported <strong>in</strong> the previous section between EAL <strong>an</strong>d<br />
EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the use of direct speech <strong>an</strong>d, to a lesser extent, description <strong>in</strong> the<br />
Resolution ph<strong>as</strong>e. It may be th<strong>at</strong> direct speech, when done well, adds to the cre<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
effect th<strong>at</strong> the resolution h<strong>as</strong> on the reader. Story 6, for example, makes effective use<br />
of direct speech to br<strong>in</strong>g the story to a close.<br />
Exposure to different types of end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d discussion of wh<strong>at</strong> makes <strong>an</strong> end<strong>in</strong>g<br />
complete <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g to a reader might help all writers.<br />
Activities to raise awareness of story end<strong>in</strong>gs might <strong>in</strong>clude:<br />
• Listen<strong>in</strong>g to <strong>an</strong>d read<strong>in</strong>g stories with different types of end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
• Notic<strong>in</strong>g how writers end their stories <strong>an</strong>d the effect on the reader of a s<strong>at</strong>isfy<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Work<strong>in</strong>g out <strong>at</strong> the pl<strong>an</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g stage how a story will end, before start<strong>in</strong>g to write.<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> t<strong>as</strong>ks th<strong>at</strong> give children the end<strong>in</strong>g of a story <strong>an</strong>d require them to get there.<br />
The writ<strong>in</strong>g of the high achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners might benefit from read<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d<br />
notic<strong>in</strong>g story end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>at</strong> their more adv<strong>an</strong>ced level, particularly the effect of us<strong>in</strong>g<br />
direct speech to resolve the plot.<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 could benefit from read<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d<br />
notic<strong>in</strong>g the end<strong>in</strong>gs of accessible stories <strong>at</strong> their level.
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4.4.5 Use of paragraphs<br />
We noted how m<strong>an</strong>y paragraphs the writers used. The c<strong>at</strong>egories were: none, m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
short, 2-3 paragraphs, <strong>an</strong>d 4-5 paragraphs. Stories with lots of direct speech would use<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y paragraphs, if used correctly. Stories which used little speech could be expected<br />
to have 4 or 5 paragraphs.<br />
• The use of paragraphs varied more by level th<strong>an</strong> by l<strong>an</strong>guage, with the higher<br />
levels us<strong>in</strong>g more paragraphs.<br />
• 14.0% of stories had no paragraph<strong>in</strong>g, 31.1% had m<strong>an</strong>y short paragraphs, 20.8%<br />
had 2-3 paragraphs, <strong>an</strong>d 34.1% had 4-5 paragraphs.<br />
• More th<strong>an</strong> half of the stories were us<strong>in</strong>g paragraph<strong>in</strong>g to reflect the development<br />
of the story.<br />
• More stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 (around 20%) had no paragraphs th<strong>an</strong><br />
stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5.<br />
• Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 either used m<strong>an</strong>y short paragraphs or 4-5<br />
paragraphs, depend<strong>in</strong>g on whether they used m<strong>an</strong>y or few <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of direct<br />
speech.<br />
There may be some concern th<strong>at</strong> 20% of stories <strong>at</strong> level 3 showed no use of<br />
paragraphs. Otherwise, the use of paragraphs seemed to be quite appropri<strong>at</strong>e for this<br />
age of writer, <strong>an</strong>d certa<strong>in</strong>ly better th<strong>an</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y of the stories written by 16 year olds <strong>in</strong><br />
the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project. It seems th<strong>at</strong> explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g h<strong>as</strong> had <strong>an</strong> impact on<br />
children’s skills.<br />
4.5 Direct speech<br />
4.5.1 Analys<strong>in</strong>g the use of direct speech<br />
In <strong>an</strong>alys<strong>in</strong>g stories, where writers <strong>in</strong>clude convers<strong>at</strong>ion between characters <strong>in</strong> direct<br />
speech, we faced a methodological decision <strong>as</strong> to whether to <strong>in</strong>clude direct speech <strong>in</strong><br />
the 100 word blocks. It w<strong>as</strong> import<strong>an</strong>t th<strong>at</strong> the decision did not skew the description of<br />
grammar th<strong>at</strong> came out of the <strong>an</strong>alysis. To make the decision, we exam<strong>in</strong>ed closely<br />
the n<strong>at</strong>ure <strong>an</strong>d use of direct speech <strong>in</strong> twenty stories. Much of the direct speech<br />
consisted of ‘fragments’ r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> full clauses, e.g. “OK, but only three more<br />
m<strong>in</strong>utes” or “wh<strong>at</strong>?”. Furthermore, we found th<strong>at</strong> where there w<strong>as</strong> subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong><br />
direct speech, it w<strong>as</strong> not different from subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion used elsewhere <strong>in</strong> the story <strong>an</strong>d<br />
th<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong> fact it w<strong>as</strong> often simpler th<strong>an</strong> elsewhere so th<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g it would have<br />
reduced the ‘subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex’ which me<strong>as</strong>ures the proportion of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e to<br />
ma<strong>in</strong> clauses.
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On this b<strong>as</strong>is, we did not <strong>in</strong>clude direct speech <strong>in</strong> the 100 words counted from the<br />
beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g of stories. We did, <strong>in</strong> addition, do some <strong>an</strong>alysis of direct speech, count<strong>in</strong>g<br />
how m<strong>an</strong>y <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of direct speech occurred <strong>in</strong> each 100 word block; how m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
words of direct speech were used, <strong>an</strong>d how direct speech w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>troduced, e.g. He said.<br />
We also looked <strong>at</strong> the accuracy of direct speech punctu<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
4.5.2 F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• On average, between 15 <strong>an</strong>d 21% of text w<strong>as</strong> talk between characters. The writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
t<strong>as</strong>k pictures show people talk<strong>in</strong>g to each other, <strong>an</strong>d this may be one re<strong>as</strong>on why<br />
the stories <strong>in</strong>cluded large amounts of direct speech.<br />
• As we saw <strong>in</strong> Section 4.4.3, direct speech w<strong>as</strong> the ma<strong>in</strong> str<strong>at</strong>egy used <strong>in</strong> narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development around Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d Resolution.<br />
• Overall, EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g used similar numbers of <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of direct<br />
speech. EAL: me<strong>an</strong> of 3.4 <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces per 100 words; EMT: me<strong>an</strong> of 3.0 <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces<br />
per 100 words.<br />
• There w<strong>as</strong> a difference approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories <strong>in</strong><br />
the me<strong>an</strong> number of words of direct speech over the 100 word block. EAL: 25.4<br />
words over 100 word block, EMT: 19.5 words over 100 word block.<br />
• In other words, <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of direct speech tended to be longer <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
(me<strong>an</strong> of 7.5 aga<strong>in</strong>st 6.5 words).<br />
• The stories of pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 showed little difference <strong>in</strong> the<br />
amount of direct speech between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g, other th<strong>an</strong> a difference <strong>at</strong><br />
level 3 <strong>in</strong> the proportion of text th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> direct speech (me<strong>an</strong>s of 18.3% <strong>an</strong>d 12.5%<br />
respectively). The difference <strong>in</strong> me<strong>an</strong>s w<strong>as</strong> approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce.<br />
• Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 used more direct speech – a me<strong>an</strong> of<br />
18% of words over the 100 word sample, compared with a me<strong>an</strong> of 13% for EMT<br />
stories. The difference <strong>in</strong> me<strong>an</strong>s w<strong>as</strong> approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce.<br />
There is not a s<strong>in</strong>gle correct or ‘best’ way to use direct speech <strong>in</strong> a story. Good stories<br />
could <strong>in</strong>clude a lot of direct speech or a little. Conversely, the <strong>in</strong>clusion of a lot of<br />
direct speech did not by itself make for a conv<strong>in</strong>c<strong>in</strong>g or <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g story. The sample<br />
stories illustr<strong>at</strong>e how writers used direct speech with different levels of skill. Stories 1,<br />
2 <strong>an</strong>d 4 <strong>in</strong>corpor<strong>at</strong>e talk <strong>in</strong>to paragraphs of narr<strong>at</strong>ive. The argument between the boy<br />
<strong>an</strong>d the girl <strong>in</strong> Story 1 takes place <strong>in</strong> the second paragraph. The l<strong>an</strong>guage used by the<br />
boy very vividly tells us about his personality, but the effect is muted by the<br />
<strong>in</strong>accur<strong>at</strong>e paragraph<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d punctu<strong>at</strong>ion. Story 5 uses very little direct speech,<br />
contr<strong>as</strong>t<strong>in</strong>g with the two stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 (3 <strong>an</strong>d 6) which use direct<br />
speech all the way through the story. Story 6 <strong>in</strong> particular makes skilful use of varied<br />
<strong>an</strong>d realistic direct speech, to build characters <strong>an</strong>d sett<strong>in</strong>g, to drive the story along <strong>an</strong>d<br />
to close it. The dialogue is also well constructed from a reader’s perspective; it c<strong>an</strong> be<br />
quite e<strong>as</strong>y for a writer to lose the reader <strong>in</strong> long stretches of direct speech, but story 6<br />
ensures th<strong>at</strong> the reader knows wh<strong>at</strong> is needed to follow the plot.
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The differences <strong>in</strong> the use of direct speech between pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 <strong>an</strong>d level<br />
5 illustr<strong>at</strong>e the difference between writ<strong>in</strong>g how one speaks <strong>an</strong>d us<strong>in</strong>g direct speech for<br />
literary effect <strong>at</strong> key po<strong>in</strong>ts <strong>in</strong> a narr<strong>at</strong>ive. Be<strong>in</strong>g able to do the l<strong>at</strong>ter probably requires<br />
extensive exposure to good writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong>cludes dialogue.
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5 Use of l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g a story<br />
Look<strong>in</strong>g with<strong>in</strong> the story, we exam<strong>in</strong>ed how writers used the grammar <strong>an</strong>d lexis<br />
(vocabulary) of <strong>English</strong> <strong>in</strong> their writ<strong>in</strong>g, <strong>an</strong>d their technical accuracy. This detailed<br />
<strong>an</strong>alysis w<strong>as</strong> carried out on a 100 word section of all the stories, with a supplementary<br />
<strong>an</strong>alysis of errors <strong>in</strong> a smaller number of full stories (see Appendix 4 for details). The<br />
use of a 100 word block follows the method of the Technical Accuracy Project (QCA,<br />
1999) <strong>an</strong>d the <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 <strong>an</strong>d post-16 project. It offers <strong>an</strong><br />
acceptable compromise between practicality <strong>an</strong>d validity, <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> detailed <strong>an</strong>alysis is<br />
very time-consum<strong>in</strong>g but we need a re<strong>as</strong>onable chunk of text to f<strong>in</strong>d p<strong>at</strong>terns of<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage use.<br />
The full r<strong>an</strong>ge of <strong>as</strong>pects th<strong>at</strong> were <strong>an</strong>alysed is listed <strong>in</strong> Table 3. We beg<strong>an</strong> with<br />
<strong>an</strong>alysis of sentence <strong>an</strong>d clause grammar. R<strong>at</strong>ers <strong>an</strong>alysed the grammar of the first 100<br />
words by plac<strong>in</strong>g clause constituents <strong>in</strong>to columns <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the sample column <strong>an</strong>alyses<br />
<strong>in</strong> Appendix 3. Once the text w<strong>as</strong> sorted <strong>in</strong>to clauses, we counted the number of each<br />
type of clause, <strong>an</strong>d the number <strong>an</strong>d length of Subject, Verb, Object /Complement,<br />
Adverbial constituents. These me<strong>as</strong>ures enabled us to <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>e how writers put<br />
words together <strong>in</strong>to phr<strong>as</strong>es, clauses <strong>an</strong>d sentences.<br />
We collected the type <strong>an</strong>d number of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors used to jo<strong>in</strong> clauses, such <strong>as</strong><br />
because, so, <strong>an</strong>d the type <strong>an</strong>d number of modal verbs, such <strong>as</strong> may, might. Both of<br />
these are signific<strong>an</strong>t markers of m<strong>at</strong>urity <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>.<br />
We then <strong>an</strong>alysed the accuracy with which l<strong>an</strong>guage w<strong>as</strong> used, by count<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
number of errors made with phr<strong>as</strong>es, with word end<strong>in</strong>gs, <strong>an</strong>d with articles (a, <strong>an</strong>, the).<br />
Qu<strong>an</strong>tit<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>alysis w<strong>as</strong> complemented by a more <strong>in</strong>-depth, qualit<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>alysis of<br />
the types of phr<strong>as</strong>e-level errors <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Errors <strong>in</strong> punctu<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the 100 word blocks of text were counted <strong>an</strong>d<br />
compared.<br />
The results of the <strong>an</strong>alyses were compared <strong>in</strong> several ways:<br />
- overall differences between the whole set of EAL stories were compared<br />
with the whole set of EMT stories<br />
- EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories were compared <strong>at</strong> each of levels 3, 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5<br />
- EAL stories were compared across levels of pupils’ writ<strong>in</strong>g, i.e. level 3<br />
with level 4, level 4 with level 5, <strong>an</strong>d level 3 with level 5<br />
- EMT stories were compared across level, <strong>as</strong> above
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5.1 Overview of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
(Note: Where st<strong>at</strong>istical tests were carried out on results, the level of signific<strong>an</strong>ce is<br />
shown <strong>in</strong> brackets. The absence of brackets implies th<strong>at</strong> the results were not tested<br />
st<strong>at</strong>istically. Full details <strong>in</strong> Appendix 4.)<br />
Comparisons between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories:<br />
• No st<strong>at</strong>istical difference <strong>in</strong><br />
- numbers of types of clauses<br />
- how words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es were used <strong>in</strong> clause slots<br />
- numbers of agreement errors<br />
- numbers of verb errors<br />
- numbers of punctu<strong>at</strong>ion errors<br />
- numbers of <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of direct speech.<br />
• Higher number of miss<strong>in</strong>g prepositions <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex gre<strong>at</strong>er for EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
• EAL stories use fewer adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
• EAL stories use shorter Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
• EAL stories use more Subject Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses.<br />
• Different types of errors <strong>in</strong> verb forms <strong>an</strong>d agreements.<br />
• EAL stories were better spelt (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
• EAL stories use more words of direct speech (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3:<br />
• EAL stories use fewer words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• Errors with prepositions <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g were equally likely to be omissions <strong>an</strong>d<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct uses.<br />
• More omitted prepositions <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• More pronoun <strong>as</strong> Subjects <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
• No difference between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> errors with articles.<br />
• Similar problems for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> punctu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g direct speech.<br />
Comparisons between stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 <strong>an</strong>d level 3<br />
Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 <strong>in</strong>cluded:<br />
• a higher subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• a gre<strong>at</strong>er number of words <strong>in</strong> Object /Complement slot (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• a gre<strong>at</strong>er number of words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer verb errors (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of miss<strong>in</strong>g punctu<strong>at</strong>ion: comm<strong>as</strong>, full stops <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong><br />
(signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
Differences between stories by EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4:<br />
• EAL stories use more s<strong>in</strong>gle word Subjects th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• EAL stories use more, but shorter, Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• EAL stories use fewer words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• EAL stories use more <strong>an</strong>d longer Objects/ Complements (signific<strong>an</strong>t).
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• EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong> more errors with <strong>in</strong>correct articles (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• Errors with prepositions <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g were more likely to be <strong>in</strong>correct uses th<strong>an</strong><br />
omissions.<br />
• More errors with <strong>in</strong>correctly used prepositions (signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong> fewer spell<strong>in</strong>g errors th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories (approach<strong>in</strong>g<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
• EAL stories omit fewer comm<strong>as</strong> th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
Comparisons between EAL stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>an</strong>d level 4<br />
Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>in</strong>cluded:<br />
• more of the adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors;<br />
• fewer Objects / Complements (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer verb errors (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer errors <strong>in</strong> choice of prepositions (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer errors <strong>in</strong> Noun-Pronoun agreements (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer errors <strong>in</strong> Subject-Verb agreements (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce);<br />
• fewer <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of comm<strong>as</strong> used <strong>in</strong> wrong places (signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer errors <strong>in</strong> other punctu<strong>at</strong>ion (apostrophes etc) (highly signific<strong>an</strong>t);<br />
• fewer spell<strong>in</strong>g errors (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
Differences between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5:<br />
• Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g this level use around twice <strong>as</strong><br />
m<strong>an</strong>y adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>as</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4.<br />
• Stories by all pupils writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> this level <strong>in</strong>clude a wider r<strong>an</strong>ge of modals,<br />
<strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g full forms.<br />
• EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g makes less use of adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
• EAL stories cont<strong>in</strong>ue to <strong>in</strong>clude some errors with articles, very few, but more th<strong>an</strong><br />
EMT (approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce).<br />
• EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>s some errors <strong>in</strong> adv<strong>an</strong>ced verb tenses e.g. p<strong>as</strong>t perfect tense,<br />
had arrived.<br />
Between <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 <strong>an</strong>d <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Similar number of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses.<br />
• Different p<strong>at</strong>tern <strong>in</strong> clause variety, with high KS4 EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g us<strong>in</strong>g less<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion th<strong>an</strong> lower EAL <strong>as</strong> a result of more variety. At KS2, stories by<br />
pupils writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> all levels use similar amounts of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
• Use of adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors is similar <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> higher graded writ<strong>in</strong>g uses twice<br />
<strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y <strong>as</strong> lower levels, but different <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> all groups of EAL learners <strong>at</strong> KS2<br />
use fewer th<strong>an</strong> their EMT peers, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> similar numbers <strong>at</strong> the different levels<br />
<strong>at</strong> KS4.<br />
• Fewer errors with agreements <strong>an</strong>d articles <strong>at</strong> KS2.<br />
• Similar use of s<strong>in</strong>gle word Subjects.<br />
• Fewer <strong>an</strong>d shorter Objects / Complements <strong>at</strong> KS 2.<br />
• Similar use of Adverbials.<br />
• KS2 EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 make fewer errors with comm<strong>as</strong> th<strong>an</strong> high<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners <strong>at</strong> KS 4.
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The above results are now reported more fully, with discussion of possible<br />
implic<strong>at</strong>ions.<br />
5.2 Sentences <strong>an</strong>d clauses<br />
5.2.1 Ma<strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>d subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses<br />
On average, the 100 word block of writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>cluded between 10 <strong>an</strong>d 11 ma<strong>in</strong> clauses<br />
with 4-5 subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses.<br />
• When we compare the EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g overall, there are no st<strong>at</strong>istically<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t differences <strong>in</strong> the numbers of types of clauses used.<br />
The subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex of a piece of writ<strong>in</strong>g is the number of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses<br />
divided by the number of ma<strong>in</strong> clauses; it serves <strong>as</strong> a me<strong>as</strong>ure of how much<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion is done. The me<strong>an</strong> subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex for each group c<strong>an</strong> be seen <strong>in</strong><br />
Figure 10, <strong>an</strong>d r<strong>an</strong>ged from 0.45 (EAL 3) to 0.76 (EMT 5).<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex<br />
0.8<br />
0.7<br />
0.6<br />
0.5<br />
0.4<br />
0.3<br />
0.2<br />
0.1<br />
0<br />
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EAL<br />
4<br />
EAL<br />
5<br />
EMT<br />
3<br />
EMT<br />
4<br />
EMT<br />
5<br />
Figure 10 Me<strong>an</strong> Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dices for 100 word blocks<br />
• There w<strong>as</strong> a difference ‘approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce’ (i.e. th<strong>at</strong> might reach<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>ce with a larger number of scripts) <strong>in</strong> the me<strong>an</strong> subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex.<br />
The subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex is higher <strong>in</strong> the EMT stories, both overall <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> each<br />
level (Figure 10).<br />
• The difference <strong>in</strong> subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex between stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 is st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t (me<strong>an</strong> level 3 = 0.45 <strong>an</strong>d me<strong>an</strong> level 4 =<br />
0.57). This arises from a signific<strong>an</strong>t difference <strong>in</strong> the number of ma<strong>in</strong> clauses, i.e.<br />
stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 conta<strong>in</strong> more ma<strong>in</strong> clauses.<br />
Differences with <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4<br />
At <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4, the number of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses w<strong>as</strong> also between 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5 <strong>in</strong> a 100<br />
word sample but the higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g bil<strong>in</strong>gual writers used signific<strong>an</strong>tly fewer th<strong>an</strong><br />
the lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g bil<strong>in</strong>gual writers, so th<strong>at</strong> the ris<strong>in</strong>g p<strong>at</strong>tern across levels <strong>in</strong> Figure<br />
10 would be reversed. As w<strong>as</strong> also found <strong>in</strong> the earlier Technical Accuracy project,<br />
better writers use fewer subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses because they mix a variety of clause <strong>an</strong>d<br />
sentence types to cre<strong>at</strong>e impact <strong>in</strong> their writ<strong>in</strong>g.
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It seems th<strong>at</strong> the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 writers have not yet reached the po<strong>in</strong>t where their<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g is differenti<strong>at</strong>ed by the variety of clause types used. It may also be th<strong>at</strong><br />
vari<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong> length of clauses does happen, but th<strong>at</strong> this occurs through the use of<br />
direct speech (which w<strong>as</strong> not me<strong>as</strong>ured through the 100 word sample).<br />
Types of clauses<br />
As expected, the most frequent type of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clause w<strong>as</strong> Adverbial, account<strong>in</strong>g<br />
for nearly half of all subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses. In the follow<strong>in</strong>g example, the Adverbial<br />
clauses are underl<strong>in</strong>ed:<br />
John w<strong>as</strong> com<strong>in</strong>g back from school when he saw everybody queue up for this new<br />
game (Story 1: EAL 3)<br />
The second most frequent were simple non-f<strong>in</strong>ite clauses start<strong>in</strong>g with a p<strong>as</strong>t<br />
participle or <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>f<strong>in</strong>itive verb:<br />
a new game called “c<strong>at</strong>ch the r<strong>at</strong>… (Story 2: EAL 4)<br />
Lee looked up to the poster <strong>in</strong> the game shop w<strong>in</strong>dow to see if …<br />
(Story 5: EMT 4)<br />
Other sorts of clauses were quite rarely used.<br />
5.2.2 Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses<br />
Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses occurred rarely but show a p<strong>at</strong>tern th<strong>at</strong> is <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g because it seems<br />
to contradict wh<strong>at</strong> is known to happen <strong>in</strong> first l<strong>an</strong>guage development. As c<strong>an</strong> be seen<br />
<strong>in</strong> Figure 11, rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses are more frequent <strong>in</strong> Object slots th<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong> Subject position<br />
for EMT writers. This replic<strong>at</strong>es wh<strong>at</strong> other studies of first l<strong>an</strong>guage development<br />
have shown. However, the EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g shows a different p<strong>at</strong>tern, with more or less<br />
equal numbers of Subject <strong>an</strong>d Object rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses <strong>at</strong> levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 5. A possible<br />
contribut<strong>in</strong>g factor may be the use of Subject Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses <strong>in</strong> South Asi<strong>an</strong><br />
l<strong>an</strong>guages. If the different p<strong>at</strong>h of development for Subject Rel<strong>at</strong>ives <strong>in</strong> EAL<br />
suggested by these figures is <strong>in</strong> fact the c<strong>as</strong>e, this would be <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>trigu<strong>in</strong>g f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
The differences across levels between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT <strong>in</strong> use of Subject rel<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
clauses writers is also suggestive, although not st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t.
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0.6<br />
me<strong>an</strong> no of rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses<br />
per 100 words<br />
0.5<br />
0.4<br />
0.3<br />
0.2<br />
0.1<br />
0<br />
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EMT<br />
4<br />
EMT<br />
5<br />
Subject rel<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
clauses<br />
Object rel<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
clauses<br />
Figure 11 Number of Rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks<br />
5.2.3 Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors<br />
Further <strong>an</strong>alysis of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion w<strong>as</strong> carried out us<strong>in</strong>g the Wordsmith Tools<br />
concord<strong>an</strong>c<strong>in</strong>g program on 34 stories from each group for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT. The most<br />
frequently used subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors are shown <strong>in</strong> Table 4. The subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors reflect the<br />
story genre <strong>an</strong>d how it org<strong>an</strong>ises ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>to a time-ordered narr<strong>at</strong>ive (more <strong>in</strong> Chapter<br />
8).<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
1 when when <strong>as</strong> when when <strong>as</strong><br />
2 so <strong>as</strong> when <strong>as</strong> <strong>as</strong> when<br />
3 if so so so so th<strong>at</strong><br />
4 <strong>as</strong> th<strong>at</strong> th<strong>at</strong> th<strong>at</strong> th<strong>at</strong> until<br />
5 because because until if because so<br />
6 while if because until <strong>as</strong> soon <strong>as</strong> before<br />
7 th<strong>at</strong> until if <strong>as</strong> soon <strong>as</strong> wh<strong>at</strong> even though<br />
8 <strong>as</strong> soon <strong>as</strong> <strong>as</strong> soon <strong>as</strong> after because if where<br />
9 while for while while while<br />
10 after whilst before<br />
Table 3 Top ten subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors for each group (used <strong>in</strong> more th<strong>an</strong> one story)<br />
We c<strong>an</strong> see <strong>in</strong> Table 4 th<strong>at</strong> stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 use fewer <strong>an</strong>d more<br />
simple subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors, where<strong>as</strong> stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 use a slightly<br />
different set. In the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project, we differenti<strong>at</strong>ed between the more<br />
cognitively ‘b<strong>as</strong>ic’ subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>an</strong>d ‘adv<strong>an</strong>ced’ ones which express more complex<br />
logical rel<strong>at</strong>ions between ide<strong>as</strong>:<br />
B<strong>as</strong>ic subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors: th<strong>at</strong>, because, if, so, <strong>as</strong>, when, who<br />
Adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors: while, <strong>as</strong> soon <strong>as</strong>, until, after, for, whilst, wh<strong>at</strong>, before etc<br />
Table 5 <strong>an</strong>d Figure 12 show the proportions of b<strong>as</strong>ic to adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors used<br />
<strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g.
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EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
9% 8% 17% 14% 13% 26%<br />
Table 4 Percentage of stories us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t one adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
% of scripts<br />
30<br />
25<br />
20<br />
15<br />
10<br />
5<br />
0<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT<br />
3<br />
EMT<br />
4<br />
EMT<br />
5<br />
Figure 12 Percentage of stories us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t one adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
• EMT stories use more of the adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors th<strong>an</strong> EAL stories <strong>at</strong> all<br />
levels.<br />
• For both l<strong>an</strong>guage backgrounds, stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 use around<br />
twice <strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>as</strong> pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4.<br />
These results are slightly different from those <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4, where lower level EMT<br />
<strong>an</strong>d EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g showed similar <strong>in</strong>frequent use of adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors. This could<br />
imply th<strong>at</strong> underst<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d use of these subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors develops l<strong>at</strong>er, between <strong>Key</strong><br />
<strong>Stage</strong>s 2 <strong>an</strong>d 4, for EAL learners. However, the figures <strong>in</strong> Table 5 suggest th<strong>at</strong> EAL<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> all levels could make gre<strong>at</strong>er use of the more adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
5.3 Words <strong>an</strong>d Phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> the clause slots<br />
5.3.1 Subject <strong>an</strong>d Object Phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
There w<strong>as</strong> vari<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong> how much writers elabor<strong>at</strong>ed the Subjects <strong>an</strong>d Objects <strong>in</strong><br />
clauses, but with no clear differences due to l<strong>an</strong>guage. The column <strong>an</strong>alyses <strong>in</strong><br />
Appendix 3 illustr<strong>at</strong>e the differences among writers. Story 3 h<strong>as</strong> long phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> all the<br />
slots, with adjectives <strong>an</strong>d adverbs modify<strong>in</strong>g nouns:<br />
the golden chariot<br />
swiftly side to side<br />
their br<strong>an</strong>d new game<br />
the lush green gr<strong>as</strong>s<br />
Story 6, which is also by a pupil achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5, h<strong>as</strong> much shorter noun phr<strong>as</strong>es,<br />
particularly <strong>in</strong> the Subject slot:<br />
John<br />
his mum<br />
the doors
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In this c<strong>as</strong>e, the direct speech moves the action of the story along <strong>an</strong>d tells us about<br />
the characters without the need for descriptive adjectives. Stories 1 <strong>an</strong>d 4 (by pupils<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3) both demonstr<strong>at</strong>e very little elabor<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>y clause slot. The<br />
comb<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of s<strong>in</strong>gle word Subjects <strong>an</strong>d use of Adverbials <strong>at</strong> the end of clauses leads<br />
to the phenomenon of ‘end-weight<strong>in</strong>g’, where most of the <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion comes <strong>at</strong> the<br />
end of sentences <strong>an</strong>d clauses, <strong>as</strong> it does <strong>in</strong> talk.<br />
• There were no st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t differences between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories<br />
overall <strong>in</strong> how words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es were used <strong>as</strong> Subjects, Objects or Complements<br />
<strong>in</strong> clauses. Between <strong>an</strong>d with<strong>in</strong> levels, there were some signific<strong>an</strong>t differences <strong>an</strong>d<br />
some differences approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce.<br />
• Subject slots were filled with s<strong>in</strong>gle words <strong>in</strong> about two thirds of clauses. The only<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t difference between groups occurred <strong>at</strong> level 4, where EAL stories used<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>tly more s<strong>in</strong>gle words th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories. These nouns were either proper<br />
names or the existential pronoun “there”.<br />
• EAL stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 used more s<strong>in</strong>gle pronouns <strong>as</strong> Subjects.<br />
The difference <strong>in</strong> me<strong>an</strong>s w<strong>as</strong> approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce (me<strong>an</strong> number per 100<br />
words were 6.2 for EAL <strong>an</strong>d 4.8 for EMT).<br />
• Objects or Complements occurred <strong>in</strong> around half of all clauses, with between 7<br />
<strong>an</strong>d 8 <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces <strong>in</strong> 100 words on average. The average length of Objects /<br />
Complements w<strong>as</strong> between 2 <strong>an</strong>d 2.5 words, reflect<strong>in</strong>g the use of ‘bare’ noun<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es without m<strong>an</strong>y adjectives.<br />
• The number of words used <strong>in</strong> Object / Complements w<strong>as</strong> signific<strong>an</strong>tly different<br />
between stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 <strong>an</strong>d level 4.<br />
• In addition, stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 used signific<strong>an</strong>tly more <strong>an</strong>d<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>tly longer Object/ Complements th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
5.3.2 Adverbials<br />
The Adverbial slot <strong>in</strong> a clause c<strong>an</strong> be filled with adverbs, adverb phr<strong>as</strong>es or with<br />
prepositional phr<strong>as</strong>es.<br />
• There were no st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t differences between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories<br />
overall <strong>in</strong> how words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es were used <strong>in</strong> Adverbials.<br />
• Adverbials occurred slightly more often th<strong>an</strong> Objects / Complements, with <strong>an</strong><br />
average number of around 9 per 100 words. The average length of Adverbials w<strong>as</strong><br />
between 2.3 <strong>an</strong>d 3.9 words.<br />
• The difference between the me<strong>an</strong> number of words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot <strong>in</strong> stories<br />
by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 (2.34) <strong>an</strong>d level 4 w<strong>as</strong> signific<strong>an</strong>t (2.66).
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• The difference between the me<strong>an</strong> number of words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot <strong>in</strong> stories<br />
by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 (2.34) <strong>an</strong>d the me<strong>an</strong> for EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> the<br />
same level is highly signific<strong>an</strong>t (2.78).<br />
• The difference between the me<strong>an</strong> number of words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot <strong>in</strong> stories<br />
by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 (2.66) <strong>an</strong>d the me<strong>an</strong> for EMT achiev<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
same level is signific<strong>an</strong>t (2.82).<br />
Note: Due to low levels of <strong>in</strong>ter-r<strong>at</strong>er reliability <strong>in</strong> identify<strong>in</strong>g Adverbial phr<strong>as</strong>es, these l<strong>as</strong>t three results<br />
should be tre<strong>at</strong>ed with caution (see Appendix 4 for details).<br />
S<strong>in</strong>ce Adverbials are used to add <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion to clauses about place, time, re<strong>as</strong>ons <strong>an</strong>d<br />
so on, this suggests th<strong>at</strong> the Adverbial phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d clauses <strong>in</strong> the stories of EAL<br />
learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 <strong>in</strong>clude less <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion th<strong>an</strong> the phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d clauses<br />
<strong>in</strong> stories by their EMT peers.<br />
The follow<strong>in</strong>g extracts show examples of more <strong>an</strong>d less developed Adverbials<br />
(underl<strong>in</strong>ed):<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> one sunny day <strong>in</strong> London <strong>an</strong>d a boy called Jack w<strong>as</strong> walk<strong>in</strong>g down the road<br />
with his mum <strong>in</strong> the city. (EMT 3)<br />
But Nazim went under his bed <strong>an</strong>d got some pocket money out. (EAL 3)<br />
Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 show opposite effects, with EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g us<strong>in</strong>g<br />
longer Adverbials th<strong>an</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Me<strong>an</strong> no of words<br />
<strong>in</strong> Adverbial slot<br />
4.5<br />
4<br />
3.5<br />
3<br />
2.5<br />
2<br />
1.5<br />
1<br />
0.5<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Figure 13 Average number of words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot<br />
More use could be made of the Adverbial slots <strong>in</strong> clauses to add <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion about<br />
time, place, re<strong>as</strong>on, consequence etc, particularly by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3<br />
<strong>an</strong>d 4.<br />
5.3.3 Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es were counted <strong>as</strong> ma<strong>in</strong> verb <strong>an</strong>d accomp<strong>an</strong>y<strong>in</strong>g modals <strong>an</strong>d auxiliaries, <strong>as</strong><br />
underl<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> the examples below. The length of the verb phr<strong>as</strong>e is commonly<br />
recognised <strong>as</strong> a me<strong>as</strong>ure of m<strong>at</strong>urity <strong>in</strong> the writ<strong>in</strong>g of first l<strong>an</strong>guage children.
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• There w<strong>as</strong> a slight difference <strong>in</strong> the number of words per Verb Phr<strong>as</strong>e between the<br />
groups. The EAL stories had slightly fewer words per VP, with <strong>an</strong> average of 1.42<br />
words per VP. The EMT stories had <strong>an</strong> average of 1.5 words per VP. This<br />
difference w<strong>as</strong> approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce.<br />
Beyond count<strong>in</strong>g numbers of verbs, differences between stories arise from choices of<br />
more unusual verbs <strong>an</strong>d from the r<strong>an</strong>ge of modal verbs used, <strong>as</strong> we c<strong>an</strong> see <strong>in</strong> the<br />
follow<strong>in</strong>g examples:<br />
(1)<br />
One day Billy Bobk<strong>in</strong>g went with his mother shopp<strong>in</strong>g on the way back he saw a<br />
poster of the new toy. he w<strong>as</strong> shout<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> his mum if he could have the new toy,<br />
his mum replied <strong>an</strong>d said yes. He r<strong>an</strong> to the end of the queue <strong>an</strong>d w<strong>as</strong> talk<strong>in</strong>g to<br />
his so f<strong>as</strong>t he became bre<strong>at</strong>hless.The shopkeeper w<strong>as</strong> knockdown by a big rush<br />
every one r<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>to his store look<strong>in</strong>g for the br<strong>an</strong>d new toy. (EMT 3)<br />
(Average number of words <strong>in</strong> Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e = 2.08)<br />
(2)<br />
Rob w<strong>as</strong> 13 years old when he walked down New forest Road with his mum. He<br />
w<strong>as</strong> walk<strong>in</strong>g p<strong>as</strong>t Toy <strong>an</strong>d Game exch<strong>an</strong>ge when Rob Saw a huge poster with a<br />
game called ‘Magic Magici<strong>an</strong>’, he had been wait<strong>in</strong>g for this game to come out for 1<br />
whole year. Rob <strong>an</strong>d his mum exitedly jogged <strong>in</strong>to l<strong>in</strong>e to wait. Rob coulden’t wait<br />
to get a game. He w<strong>as</strong> really, really exited now. (EMT 4)<br />
(Average number of words <strong>in</strong> Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e = 2.00)<br />
(3)<br />
When walked P<strong>as</strong>t a toy shop I had black hair brown eyes short ears <strong>an</strong>d small<br />
lips Girls calls me beuty. By the way my name is Mick. Today I saw A New Game<br />
com<strong>in</strong>g out on March 22 nd <strong>in</strong> the Gift shop I coulden’t believe my eyes. I c<strong>an</strong>’t<br />
wait tommorow I will wait here until tommorow. Yes! is today! hey hews shout<strong>in</strong>g?<br />
me mum. oh is my mum she doesen’t like people scream<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d shout<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
when I went to the shop I w<strong>as</strong> the l<strong>as</strong>t one <strong>in</strong> the queue I c<strong>an</strong> here people<br />
shout<strong>in</strong>g scream<strong>in</strong>g talk<strong>in</strong>g PusH<strong>in</strong>g try to (EAL 3)<br />
(Average number of words <strong>in</strong> Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e = 1.45)<br />
(4)<br />
Jimmy w<strong>as</strong> with his mum <strong>in</strong> town when all hove a sudden he saw a poster for a<br />
new game out now there w<strong>as</strong> a queue for 45 m<strong>in</strong>utes <strong>an</strong>d then the shop opened all<br />
the children screamed <strong>an</strong>d bellowd went all around the shop <strong>an</strong>d all the children<br />
scrambled for the game <strong>an</strong>d <strong>as</strong> the children go to there parents for some money<br />
all the children rush to the checkout <strong>an</strong>d pay for there br<strong>an</strong>d new game there<br />
w<strong>as</strong> two children left Jimmy <strong>an</strong>d a girl sarah. (EAL 3)<br />
(Average number of words <strong>in</strong> Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e = 1.05)<br />
- (1) h<strong>as</strong> highest number of words per Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e, achieved ma<strong>in</strong>ly through<br />
repe<strong>at</strong>ed use of the p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous tense, e.g., w<strong>as</strong> walk<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- (2) h<strong>as</strong> a slightly lower number of words per Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e yet conta<strong>in</strong>s more<br />
sophistic<strong>at</strong>ed verbal constructions such <strong>as</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t perfect cont<strong>in</strong>uous tense,<br />
e.g. had been wait<strong>in</strong>g
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- (3) uses m<strong>an</strong>y modal auxiliaries, such <strong>as</strong> couldn’t, <strong>as</strong> well <strong>as</strong> lexical verbs,<br />
such <strong>as</strong> shout<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d scream<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- (4) h<strong>as</strong> the lowest average number of words per Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e, yet uses vivid<br />
lexical verbs, such <strong>as</strong> bellowed, scrambled, <strong>an</strong>d rush<br />
We c<strong>an</strong> see, therefore, th<strong>at</strong> the average number of words per Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e is not<br />
sufficient <strong>as</strong> a me<strong>as</strong>ure of m<strong>at</strong>urity or sophistic<strong>at</strong>ion, <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t <strong>in</strong> the narr<strong>at</strong>ive writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
used <strong>in</strong> this study. We need <strong>in</strong> addition to consider use of tense (Section 5.4.2 below),<br />
modal verbs (Section 5.3.4 below), <strong>an</strong>d richness of vocabulary (Chapter 6).<br />
5.3.4 Modal verbs<br />
Modal verbs <strong>in</strong>clude c<strong>an</strong>, could, will, would, may, might, must, shall, should, ought to<br />
<strong>an</strong>d their neg<strong>at</strong>ive forms.<br />
Modal verbs are used <strong>in</strong> addition to lexical verbs to add shades of me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g, such <strong>as</strong><br />
how probable or possible <strong>an</strong> action is. The modal verb must <strong>in</strong> this sentence from<br />
Story 6 <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>es the writer’s st<strong>an</strong>ce towards the st<strong>at</strong>ement:<br />
There must have been more th<strong>an</strong> forty people queu<strong>in</strong>g up (EMT 5)<br />
Conditional sentences, which concern hypothetical or imag<strong>in</strong>ed situ<strong>at</strong>ions, require<br />
modal verbs:<br />
David <strong>as</strong>ked if they could go <strong>an</strong>d wait <strong>in</strong> the queue (Story 4, EMT 3)<br />
For each modal verb, we counted the number of stories <strong>in</strong> which <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t one use<br />
occurred <strong>in</strong> the first 100 words. We also used the WordSmith Tools concord<strong>an</strong>c<strong>in</strong>g<br />
program to count all uses of modals across all texts.<br />
• c<strong>an</strong> w<strong>as</strong> by far the most common modal verb for all groups, be<strong>in</strong>g used<br />
around twice <strong>as</strong> much <strong>as</strong> the next most frequent modal.<br />
• Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 conta<strong>in</strong>ed a wider r<strong>an</strong>ge of modals, with<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories very similar.<br />
• EMT stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 make very heavy use of c<strong>an</strong>,<br />
could <strong>an</strong>d couldn’t.<br />
• Full forms e.g. could not r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> couldn’t, only appear <strong>in</strong> stories by pupils<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.<br />
• In stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4, EAL stories, but not EMT<br />
stories, make frequent use of would.<br />
• There is very little use of might <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>y writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 do not use may, must, will,<br />
which EMT stories do. EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g uses should <strong>an</strong>d shall which EMT stories<br />
do not. This replic<strong>at</strong>es the frequent use of should <strong>in</strong> lower level <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4 c<strong>an</strong> enrich their texts by be<strong>in</strong>g helped to underst<strong>an</strong>d<br />
<strong>an</strong>d use a wider r<strong>an</strong>ge of modal verbs to express a gre<strong>at</strong>er r<strong>an</strong>ge of degrees of<br />
probability <strong>an</strong>d possibility.
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5.4 Accuracy <strong>in</strong> use of l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
The above me<strong>as</strong>ures give us <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion about the r<strong>an</strong>ge of l<strong>an</strong>guage resources th<strong>at</strong><br />
pupils are us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> their writ<strong>in</strong>g. We also w<strong>an</strong>ted to know how accur<strong>at</strong>e pupils are<br />
when they employ these resources. The follow<strong>in</strong>g accuracy errors were counted <strong>in</strong> the<br />
100 word blocks:<br />
- Agreements: Subject-Verb, Noun-Pronoun, Plurals<br />
- Verb forms: end<strong>in</strong>gs, tense etc<br />
- Articles: used wrongly or miss<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- Prepositions: used wrongly or miss<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion: omission or <strong>in</strong>correct use of comm<strong>as</strong>, full stops, <strong>in</strong>verted<br />
comm<strong>as</strong><br />
- Spell<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
The results of the <strong>an</strong>alysis of the 100 word blocks were put <strong>in</strong>to a d<strong>at</strong>ab<strong>as</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d<br />
st<strong>at</strong>istical tests carried out to compare the results across the various groups (see<br />
Appendix 4).<br />
An additional, more detailed <strong>an</strong>alysis of errors w<strong>as</strong> carried out through full<br />
exam<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of a sample of twenty stories from EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3. The<br />
sample w<strong>as</strong> chosen to be represent<strong>at</strong>ive of the major l<strong>an</strong>guage groups <strong>an</strong>d LEAs. All<br />
gramm<strong>at</strong>ical errors were extracted <strong>an</strong>d c<strong>at</strong>egorised. We tried to exclude ‘errors’ th<strong>at</strong><br />
could be regional dialectal vari<strong>at</strong>ions.<br />
5.4.1 Agreements<br />
• There were no st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t differences between agreement errors <strong>in</strong><br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. In fact, the EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g scored higher numbers of errors<br />
<strong>in</strong> Subject-Verb agreements <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> Noun-Pronoun agreements th<strong>an</strong> did EAL<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
From our detailed exam<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of stories, EMT errors seem to be largely due to the<br />
<strong>in</strong>fluence of spoken <strong>English</strong>:<br />
<strong>in</strong>’t they<br />
he hurt his self<br />
When we focussed on errors <strong>in</strong> agreements identified <strong>in</strong> the sample of twenty EAL<br />
stories by pupils <strong>at</strong> level 3, we found th<strong>at</strong> they accounted for 20% of the total errors:<br />
• Noun-Pronoun agreements (9%)<br />
Mickle saw it (his) reflection … it (he) had blonde hair<br />
They w<strong>as</strong> a huge l<strong>in</strong>e<br />
• Subject-Verb agreements (8%)<br />
Everyone else are (is) look<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Plurals (3%)<br />
Next times he is go<strong>in</strong>g to<br />
We should note too th<strong>at</strong> the EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils <strong>at</strong> level 3 conta<strong>in</strong>ed fewer errors<br />
th<strong>an</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g 16 year olds <strong>in</strong> the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project. EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g
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by pupils <strong>at</strong> level 5 conta<strong>in</strong>ed very few errors <strong>at</strong> all, <strong>an</strong>d fewer th<strong>an</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by the<br />
high achiev<strong>in</strong>g 16 year olds. This result is unlikely to be due to the difference <strong>in</strong> genre<br />
<strong>an</strong>d more likely reflects the gre<strong>at</strong>er <strong>at</strong>tention to form experienced by the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2<br />
children through literacy hour activities.<br />
Attention to agreement errors is especially import<strong>an</strong>t for lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL<br />
learners, who seem less likely to notice the gramm<strong>at</strong>ical p<strong>at</strong>terns by themselves th<strong>an</strong><br />
higher achiev<strong>in</strong>g bil<strong>in</strong>gual writers.<br />
5.4.2 Verb form errors<br />
• The numbers of errors <strong>in</strong> verb forms made <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g overall w<strong>as</strong><br />
very similar, although, <strong>as</strong> before, the n<strong>at</strong>ure of the errors seems to be different.<br />
EMT verb form errors often seem to derive from colloquial forms:<br />
it h<strong>as</strong> got a new poster<br />
why not we play heads or tails for it<br />
• Verb errors are a particular problem for EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, with<br />
st<strong>at</strong>istically signific<strong>an</strong>t reductions <strong>in</strong> errors <strong>as</strong> we move from stories by pupils<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 (me<strong>an</strong> number of errors <strong>in</strong> 100 word block = 1.38) to stories by<br />
pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 (0.54), <strong>an</strong>d aga<strong>in</strong> from level 4 to 5 (0.24).<br />
Verb errors accounted for 26% of all errors <strong>in</strong> the twenty EAL stories by pupils<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 th<strong>at</strong> were exam<strong>in</strong>ed closely. End<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d tenses were by far the<br />
biggest problem:<br />
the shop is close (closed)<br />
the girl knewed (knew)<br />
A new video game w<strong>as</strong> be<strong>in</strong>g selled (sold)<br />
It is (w<strong>as</strong>) a Wednesday afternoon. The school bell r<strong>an</strong>g. I w<strong>as</strong> excited..<br />
Modal verbs caused problems for some writers:<br />
I wish if someone f<strong>in</strong>d me th<strong>at</strong> game (th<strong>at</strong> someone would f<strong>in</strong>d)<br />
His mum then told me I c<strong>an</strong> (could) have the game<br />
Attention to verb forms is especially import<strong>an</strong>t for lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners, who<br />
seem less likely to discover the gramm<strong>at</strong>ical p<strong>at</strong>terns by themselves th<strong>an</strong> higher<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g bil<strong>in</strong>gual writers.<br />
P<strong>as</strong>t perfect tense errors<br />
A more adv<strong>an</strong>ced type of error c<strong>an</strong> be seen <strong>in</strong> the use of p<strong>as</strong>t tenses <strong>in</strong> Story 3 (EAL<br />
5). In several places <strong>in</strong> the story, a simple p<strong>as</strong>t tense is used where a p<strong>as</strong>t perfect had<br />
form is needed:<br />
In l<strong>in</strong>e 3, the writer shows considerable sophistic<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong> comb<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g a p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous<br />
form w<strong>as</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g with a p<strong>as</strong>t perfect form had arrived.
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The big day everyone w<strong>as</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g for had f<strong>in</strong>ally arrived.<br />
Through the p<strong>as</strong>t perfect tense, the writer captures the idea of the narr<strong>at</strong>or, writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
about a time <strong>in</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t, reach<strong>in</strong>g even further back <strong>in</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t to describe <strong>an</strong> event -<br />
the arrival of the big day.<br />
Similar p<strong>as</strong>t perfect tense forms are needed l<strong>at</strong>er <strong>in</strong> the text <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>es 5, 7 <strong>an</strong>d 24, to<br />
describe events th<strong>at</strong> occurred or beg<strong>an</strong> further back <strong>in</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t th<strong>an</strong> the event <strong>in</strong> the<br />
other part of the same sentence:<br />
it w<strong>as</strong> the magnificent game everyone w<strong>as</strong> (had been) long<strong>in</strong>g for ever s<strong>in</strong>ce l<strong>as</strong>t<br />
month!<br />
Peter w<strong>as</strong> becom<strong>in</strong>g extremely tired wait<strong>in</strong>g there; s<strong>in</strong>ce he queued (had jo<strong>in</strong>ed<br />
the queue) there <strong>at</strong> seven <strong>in</strong> the morn<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
His family were not <strong>as</strong> wealthy <strong>as</strong> others… Nevertheless, he saved (had saved /<br />
had been sav<strong>in</strong>g) up his birthday money ever s<strong>in</strong>ce he w<strong>as</strong> seven.<br />
High achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners c<strong>an</strong> be helped to extend their l<strong>an</strong>guage resources still<br />
further, for example through the use of more adv<strong>an</strong>ced tenses th<strong>at</strong> show the rel<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
times of events.<br />
5.4.3 Articles<br />
We counted the errors with miss<strong>in</strong>g or <strong>in</strong>correctly used articles <strong>in</strong> the 100 word blocks<br />
of texts <strong>an</strong>d tested the results st<strong>at</strong>istically.<br />
• A signific<strong>an</strong>t difference w<strong>as</strong> found <strong>in</strong> the number of articles (a, <strong>an</strong>, the) used<br />
<strong>in</strong>correctly between writ<strong>in</strong>g by EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 (me<strong>an</strong><br />
number <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks = 0.09 <strong>an</strong>d 0.00 respectively).<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 conta<strong>in</strong>s more errors with articles, with<br />
a difference <strong>in</strong> me<strong>an</strong>s approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce. In writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
level 3, there w<strong>as</strong> no signific<strong>an</strong>t difference between EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d EAL<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• However, the total number of errors is very small. In the detailed study of twenty<br />
EAL stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, <strong>in</strong>correctly used articles accounted for<br />
only 2% of errors, <strong>an</strong>d there were no miss<strong>in</strong>g articles.<br />
• The KS2 writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>ed fewer errors with articles th<strong>an</strong> the high EAL achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
KS4.<br />
We conclude th<strong>at</strong> children’s <strong>at</strong>tention should be drawn to errors with articles to help<br />
them correct them over time, but th<strong>at</strong> this is not a major problem.
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5.4.4 Prepositions<br />
We counted the numbers of prepositions miss<strong>in</strong>g or used <strong>in</strong>correctly <strong>in</strong> the 100 word<br />
blocks, <strong>an</strong>d tested the results st<strong>at</strong>istically. We also exam<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> depth a sample of<br />
twenty EAL stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3.<br />
• There were not huge numbers of errors with prepositions but there were<br />
<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g p<strong>at</strong>terns across l<strong>an</strong>guage backgrounds <strong>an</strong>d levels.<br />
• As c<strong>an</strong> be seen <strong>in</strong> Figure 14, errors with prepositions showed different p<strong>at</strong>terns for<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
No. per 100 word block<br />
0.2<br />
0.15<br />
0.1<br />
0.05<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Omitted prepositions<br />
Incorrect preposition<br />
Figure 14 Me<strong>an</strong> numbers of omitted <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>correct prepositions <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks<br />
• Omitt<strong>in</strong>g prepositions where they were needed w<strong>as</strong> characteristic of EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4, but not of EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Us<strong>in</strong>g the wrong preposition w<strong>as</strong> characteristic of EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g by<br />
pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, <strong>an</strong>d EAL, but not EMT, writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level<br />
4.<br />
• The number of omitted prepositions <strong>in</strong> the 100 word blocks w<strong>as</strong> found to be<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>tly higher <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g overall (me<strong>an</strong> = 0.11) th<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
(me<strong>an</strong> = 0.04).<br />
• Broken down by levels, there w<strong>as</strong>:<br />
• a signific<strong>an</strong>t difference between the me<strong>an</strong> number of omitted prepositions <strong>in</strong><br />
the 100 word blocks of EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 (0.18) <strong>an</strong>d the<br />
me<strong>an</strong> for EMT achiev<strong>in</strong>g the same level (me<strong>an</strong> = 0.02)<br />
• a signific<strong>an</strong>t difference between the me<strong>an</strong> number of <strong>in</strong>correctly used<br />
prepositions <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 (me<strong>an</strong> = 0.17) <strong>an</strong>d the<br />
me<strong>an</strong> for EMT achiev<strong>in</strong>g the same level (me<strong>an</strong> = 0.04)<br />
• no signific<strong>an</strong>t differences <strong>in</strong> the use of prepositions <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.<br />
• There w<strong>as</strong> a signific<strong>an</strong>t difference <strong>in</strong> the me<strong>an</strong> numbers of <strong>in</strong>correct prepositions<br />
<strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g between pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 4 (me<strong>an</strong> = 0.17) <strong>an</strong>d those<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 (me<strong>an</strong> = 0.03).
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• Very m<strong>an</strong>y of the preposition errors occurred <strong>in</strong> so-called formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es (see<br />
Section 6.4), <strong>an</strong>d these accounted for 18% of the errors <strong>in</strong> the close <strong>an</strong>alysis of<br />
twenty EAL stories from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3. Examples <strong>in</strong>clude:<br />
I’m very <strong>as</strong>hamed <strong>at</strong> (of) it.<br />
by (on) purpose<br />
Sam went (to) bed<br />
he got <strong>in</strong> trouble by (from) his mother<br />
Difficulty with prepositions appears early <strong>an</strong>d persists <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g. Learn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
probably requires repe<strong>at</strong>ed exposure <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g of the correct preposition <strong>in</strong> the<br />
context of the neighbour<strong>in</strong>g words e.g. a child needs to encounter <strong>an</strong>d learn a phr<strong>as</strong>e<br />
such <strong>as</strong> on purpose <strong>as</strong> a s<strong>in</strong>gle unit.<br />
5.5 Technical accuracy<br />
In this <strong>as</strong>pect of writ<strong>in</strong>g, we counted spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d punctu<strong>at</strong>ion errors <strong>in</strong> the first 100<br />
word block of each story, <strong>an</strong>d tested the results st<strong>at</strong>istically.<br />
5.5.1 Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• The spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> EAL stories w<strong>as</strong> better th<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong> the EMT stories, with a difference<br />
approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce. While the EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>an</strong> average of just<br />
over 3 mistakes <strong>in</strong> 100 words, EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>ed 4 mistakes.<br />
• The number of mistakes varied from 6, <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, to<br />
under 2, <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.<br />
• The largest difference between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT spell<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils<br />
achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4, aga<strong>in</strong> approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce.<br />
As with m<strong>an</strong>y other <strong>as</strong>pects of <strong>English</strong> th<strong>at</strong> are explicitly taught, spell<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> be<strong>in</strong>g<br />
learnt by EAL learners <strong>as</strong> well <strong>as</strong> or better th<strong>an</strong> by their EMT peers.<br />
5.5.2 Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion w<strong>as</strong> a problem <strong>in</strong> the stories, particularly those from writers achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
level 3. We counted the numbers of omitted or wrongly used full stops, comm<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>d<br />
<strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the 100 word blocks, <strong>an</strong>d tested the results st<strong>at</strong>istically.
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Note: Inter-r<strong>at</strong>er reliability checks showed low levels of agreement about errors with comm<strong>as</strong><br />
(Appendix 4) so caution is needed <strong>in</strong> <strong>in</strong>terpret<strong>in</strong>g the follow<strong>in</strong>g results. Gre<strong>at</strong>er agreement would have<br />
<strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>ed the number of errors identified <strong>an</strong>d therefore the follow<strong>in</strong>g results would still hold.<br />
• There w<strong>as</strong> very little difference between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories.<br />
• Compar<strong>in</strong>g KS2 <strong>an</strong>d KS4 writ<strong>in</strong>g shows similar frequencies for the omission <strong>an</strong>d<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct use of punctu<strong>at</strong>ion. EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 did <strong>as</strong> well or better<br />
th<strong>an</strong> the high achiev<strong>in</strong>g EAL learners <strong>at</strong> KS4.<br />
• Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion of direct speech w<strong>as</strong> a particular problem for all pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
level 3.<br />
There were signific<strong>an</strong>t differences between groups by level:<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 writ<strong>in</strong>g, when compared with writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
by those graded <strong>as</strong> achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4, w<strong>as</strong> characterised by miss<strong>in</strong>g punctu<strong>at</strong>ion:<br />
comm<strong>as</strong>, full stops <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong>.<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> by those graded <strong>as</strong> achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4 tended to conta<strong>in</strong> fewer miss<strong>in</strong>g<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion marks, but to use comm<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the wrong places signific<strong>an</strong>tly more<br />
often th<strong>an</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.<br />
If we add together errors with full stops <strong>an</strong>d comm<strong>as</strong>, we have a me<strong>as</strong>ure of sentence<br />
control through punctu<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
• Stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 had around 7 miss<strong>in</strong>g full stops or<br />
comm<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the 10 or 11 ‘sentences’ <strong>in</strong> their first 100 words. This very high figure<br />
is <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>ed by the number of errors made <strong>in</strong>side direct speech.<br />
The very complex punctu<strong>at</strong>ion of direct speech perhaps adds to the confusion of these<br />
writers. In the follow<strong>in</strong>g extract from <strong>an</strong> EAL story by a pupil achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, we<br />
see how missed punctu<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d sentence grammar comb<strong>in</strong>e to produce a series of<br />
run-on sentences.<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> on a sunny, bright day When John <strong>an</strong>d his mother Where walk<strong>in</strong>g on the<br />
croudy street. John <strong>an</strong>d his mother are very helpful, gentle also k<strong>in</strong>d. John saw a<br />
poster on the W<strong>in</strong>dow which said new game Here today John thought Would it be<br />
gre<strong>at</strong> if I could buy this game so John r<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>d r<strong>an</strong> <strong>as</strong> f<strong>as</strong>t <strong>as</strong> he could <strong>an</strong>d said<br />
“mom ple<strong>as</strong>e could I buy a new game? replied John” Well OK lets go before they<br />
are all sold out. So John waited <strong>in</strong> the queue for a lot of time. (EAL 3)<br />
To some extent, punctu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g sentences <strong>in</strong> written <strong>English</strong> is a m<strong>at</strong>ter of m<strong>at</strong>urity, but,<br />
for the EAL learner, the usual advice to f<strong>in</strong>d the places where punctu<strong>at</strong>ion is needed<br />
by listen<strong>in</strong>g for pauses <strong>in</strong> the spoken version is less likely to be effective.<br />
Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion is actually part of sentence <strong>an</strong>d clause grammar, <strong>an</strong>d needs explicit<br />
<strong>in</strong>struction to show pupils wh<strong>at</strong> full stops <strong>an</strong>d comm<strong>as</strong> do <strong>in</strong> written text <strong>an</strong>d where<br />
they need them <strong>in</strong> their own writ<strong>in</strong>g. Comm<strong>as</strong> c<strong>an</strong> be taught <strong>as</strong> part of learn<strong>in</strong>g about<br />
complex sentences with embedded clauses.
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The punctu<strong>at</strong>ion t<strong>as</strong>k <strong>in</strong> a story conta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g direct speech seems overwhelm<strong>in</strong>gly<br />
complex for the level 3 writers, who still need to stabilise their use of the full stop<br />
before deal<strong>in</strong>g with complexities of <strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong>.
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6 The use of vocabulary<br />
This chapter br<strong>in</strong>gs together f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs about the words children used <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g their<br />
stories. We exam<strong>in</strong>ed how far children were us<strong>in</strong>g adv<strong>an</strong>ced <strong>an</strong>d more unusual<br />
vocabulary, their use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, <strong>an</strong>d the most common types of<br />
vocabulary errors.<br />
6.1 Overview of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• Overall, there were differences between levels, but not between l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
backgrounds, <strong>in</strong> overall richness of vocabulary.<br />
• There w<strong>as</strong> a very highly signific<strong>an</strong>t difference <strong>in</strong> the number of errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es, with EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g m<strong>an</strong>y more th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories. This<br />
difference w<strong>as</strong> found <strong>at</strong> all levels.<br />
• The widest difference w<strong>as</strong> <strong>at</strong> level 4, where EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong> more errors <strong>in</strong><br />
formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories (very highly signific<strong>an</strong>t).<br />
• There were signific<strong>an</strong>tly fewer formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e errors <strong>at</strong> level 5 compared to<br />
level 4 EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• The difference <strong>in</strong> errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
replic<strong>at</strong>es th<strong>at</strong> found <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4, with EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g hav<strong>in</strong>g a gre<strong>at</strong>er number of<br />
errors.<br />
• Interest<strong>in</strong>g differences emerged <strong>in</strong> the use of metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes, with EAL<br />
stories us<strong>in</strong>g more th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories, by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g both level 4 <strong>an</strong>d level 5.<br />
• Pupils us<strong>in</strong>g figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage were often be<strong>in</strong>g cre<strong>at</strong>ive r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> just<br />
repe<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g similes they had learnt <strong>in</strong> cl<strong>as</strong>s.<br />
• Errors <strong>in</strong> word use show pupils <strong>in</strong> the process of learn<strong>in</strong>g how to use vocabulary<br />
th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> probably fairly new to them.<br />
6.2 Richness of vocabulary<br />
We exam<strong>in</strong>ed the r<strong>an</strong>ge of different words used by the writers <strong>in</strong> each group, <strong>an</strong>d wh<strong>at</strong><br />
k<strong>in</strong>ds of words were used i.e. very common or less common words. The <strong>an</strong>alysis w<strong>as</strong><br />
carried out us<strong>in</strong>g a computer program (Lexical Frequency Profile). S<strong>in</strong>ce <strong>in</strong>dividual<br />
texts were too short for <strong>an</strong>alysis of lexical frequency, we comb<strong>in</strong>ed equal numbers of<br />
stories from each group for this comparison. We took 34 stories from each of the six<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage / level groups (total N=204) for <strong>an</strong>alysis. Misspell<strong>in</strong>gs were corrected before
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<strong>an</strong>alysis where possible; the rema<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g small number of unrecognisable words w<strong>as</strong><br />
removed.<br />
It is import<strong>an</strong>t to note th<strong>at</strong> the <strong>an</strong>alysis w<strong>as</strong> done on the comb<strong>in</strong>ed word sets of 34<br />
writers, not on me<strong>an</strong>s across <strong>in</strong>dividuals.<br />
The computer program sorts the words <strong>in</strong> the stories <strong>in</strong>to four c<strong>at</strong>egories of word type<br />
(<strong>in</strong> the list below, the term <strong>in</strong> brackets is the label given to the c<strong>at</strong>egory):<br />
- The most common one thous<strong>an</strong>d words <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>. These are used very frequently <strong>in</strong> all<br />
sorts of texts <strong>an</strong>d likely to be known by children <strong>at</strong> this stage of educ<strong>at</strong>ion. (1K)<br />
- The second most common thous<strong>an</strong>d words <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>. (2K)<br />
- A special list of ‘academic’ words, around 800 word types used across the curriculum <strong>in</strong><br />
secondary school <strong>an</strong>d university. We would not expect <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 children to know or<br />
use m<strong>an</strong>y of these. (Academic)<br />
- All the other word types found <strong>in</strong> the stories, which will <strong>in</strong>clude more unusual <strong>an</strong>d<br />
‘<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g’ words. We removed proper names from this set. (Not <strong>in</strong> list)<br />
-<br />
We then compared the percentage of word types <strong>in</strong> each c<strong>at</strong>egory used <strong>in</strong> the 34<br />
stories of each group.<br />
6.2.1 Richness of vocabulary: overall f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• No major differences <strong>in</strong> the length of stories or richness of vocabulary between<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Clear differences across levels <strong>in</strong>:<br />
• length of stories (level 5 longest)<br />
• r<strong>an</strong>ge of word types used (level 5 gre<strong>at</strong>est)<br />
• numbers of misspell<strong>in</strong>gs (level 5 fewest)<br />
• Stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 <strong>an</strong>d level 4 were similar <strong>in</strong> their use of more<br />
unusual words<br />
• EMT stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 used a much gre<strong>at</strong>er r<strong>an</strong>ge of proper<br />
names th<strong>an</strong> EAL stories.<br />
6.2.2 Length of stories<br />
Table 6 <strong>an</strong>d Figure 15 show the average length of the stories. The length of the<br />
children’s stories <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>ed across the levels, with similar lengths for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT.<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
294 315 348 252 305 363<br />
Table 5 Me<strong>an</strong> length of stories <strong>in</strong> words
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No of words<br />
400<br />
350<br />
300<br />
250<br />
200<br />
150<br />
100<br />
50<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Figure 15 Me<strong>an</strong> length of stories <strong>in</strong> words<br />
The writers seemed to have fewer problems with writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> the length required by the<br />
t<strong>as</strong>k th<strong>an</strong> did the <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 writers.<br />
6.2.3 R<strong>an</strong>ge of word types used<br />
When we <strong>an</strong>alysed the proportion of most common <strong>an</strong>d less common words used <strong>in</strong><br />
stories, we found th<strong>at</strong> comb<strong>in</strong>ed word sets for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT groups show similar<br />
profiles of vocabulary use, <strong>as</strong> is clear from the numbers <strong>in</strong> Table 7. The exception w<strong>as</strong><br />
the c<strong>at</strong>egory of words ‘not <strong>in</strong> lists’, those th<strong>at</strong> are less commonly used <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>,<br />
where EMT pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 used slightly more th<strong>an</strong> EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
level 5.<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
1K 61% 58% 48% 61% 56% 45%<br />
2K 18% 21% 22% 18% 19% 19%<br />
Academic 2% 2% 2% 2% 3% 3%<br />
Not <strong>in</strong> lists 19% 20% 28% 19% 22% 32%<br />
Table 6 Richness of vocabulary: Percentage use of each c<strong>at</strong>egory<br />
Figure 16 shows the use of each c<strong>at</strong>egory of words, from the most common <strong>in</strong> the left<br />
h<strong>an</strong>d bar of each set, to the more unusual ones <strong>in</strong> the right h<strong>an</strong>d bar. The differences<br />
across the levels are wh<strong>at</strong> we might expect to see - stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g higher<br />
levels use more unusual words.
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 67<br />
% of words from each c<strong>at</strong>egory<br />
70<br />
60<br />
50<br />
40<br />
30<br />
20<br />
10<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
1K<br />
2K<br />
Academic<br />
Not <strong>in</strong> list<br />
Figure 16 Types of words used <strong>in</strong> stories<br />
The table below shows a few of the wide r<strong>an</strong>ge of less common words used <strong>in</strong> the<br />
stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.<br />
Academic word types<br />
Less common words<br />
(words beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g with A <strong>an</strong>d<br />
some Bs only)<br />
used by both<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d<br />
EMT<br />
adult<br />
approach<br />
<strong>as</strong>sist<br />
enormous<br />
eventual<br />
f<strong>in</strong>al<br />
normal<br />
odd<br />
section<br />
secure<br />
alley<br />
alright<br />
amazed<br />
amazement<br />
amaz<strong>in</strong>g<br />
beads<br />
barg<strong>in</strong>g<br />
bellowed<br />
blond<br />
blonde<br />
bored<br />
bor<strong>in</strong>g<br />
br<strong>an</strong>d<br />
brilli<strong>an</strong>t<br />
bully<br />
bumped<br />
used by EAL only<br />
apparent<br />
<strong>as</strong>sure<br />
conv<strong>in</strong>ce<br />
def<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
demonstr<strong>at</strong>e<br />
depress<br />
despite<br />
evident<br />
furthermore<br />
identify<br />
label<br />
nevertheless<br />
obvious<br />
purch<strong>as</strong>e<br />
resolve<br />
restrict<br />
virtual<br />
accessories<br />
adorable<br />
aisle<br />
alarm<br />
<strong>an</strong>yways<br />
apprehensive<br />
awful<br />
b<strong>at</strong>hroom<br />
bee<br />
bees<br />
beige<br />
belly<br />
bike<br />
bl<strong>in</strong>k<strong>in</strong>g<br />
bombs<br />
buffalos<br />
used by EMT only<br />
area<br />
challenge<br />
couple<br />
device<br />
exclude<br />
goal<br />
item<br />
l<strong>in</strong>k<br />
military<br />
publish<br />
rele<strong>as</strong>e<br />
reluct<strong>an</strong>ce<br />
rely<br />
require<br />
source<br />
tense<br />
ultim<strong>at</strong>e<br />
version<br />
abruptly<br />
accent<br />
adam<strong>an</strong>t<br />
advert<br />
ales<br />
aliens<br />
arcade<br />
<strong>at</strong>omic<br />
bakery<br />
b<strong>an</strong>g<br />
b<strong>an</strong>g<strong>in</strong>g<br />
b<strong>an</strong>ner<br />
barged<br />
barker<br />
belle<br />
bet<br />
Table 7 Academic words <strong>an</strong>d some of the less common words used <strong>in</strong> level 5 stories
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The words <strong>in</strong> the second part of Table 8 are just a small subset of the wide r<strong>an</strong>ge of<br />
more unusual words used by the best writers. There were m<strong>an</strong>y more words <strong>in</strong> the<br />
separ<strong>at</strong>e lists from EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong> the list of words used <strong>in</strong> both,<br />
reflect<strong>in</strong>g the <strong>in</strong>dividual n<strong>at</strong>ure of vocabulary beyond the most common words.<br />
Pupils’ <strong>in</strong>dividual vocabularies offer a rich resource for cl<strong>as</strong>sroom activities, s<strong>in</strong>ce<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y of the less common words known by each pupil may not be known or used by<br />
others.<br />
6.3 Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers noted which stories used figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage. All <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces were then extracted<br />
from the stories <strong>an</strong>d <strong>an</strong>alysed. A total of 271 <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage were<br />
found <strong>in</strong> 70 stories.<br />
6.3.1 Types of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Most of the figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage used <strong>in</strong> the stories w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> the form of similes, <strong>an</strong>d w<strong>as</strong><br />
used for two ma<strong>in</strong> purposes <strong>in</strong> the narr<strong>at</strong>ive: to describe characters <strong>an</strong>d to describe the<br />
rush <strong>in</strong>to the shop shown <strong>in</strong> picture 3 (Appendix 2):<br />
N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha had gloom<strong>in</strong>g eyes like ovale pebbles (EAL 3)<br />
he r<strong>an</strong> like a bullet towards the game (EAL 5)<br />
the children … scrambled <strong>in</strong> like a herd of gazzel be<strong>in</strong>g ch<strong>as</strong>ed by a tiger (EMT 4)<br />
There were some <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of metaphor, both novel <strong>an</strong>d more conventional:<br />
the crowd barged through the door (EAL 4)<br />
<strong>in</strong> the wicked w<strong>in</strong>d (EAL 4)<br />
the shop w<strong>as</strong> burst<strong>in</strong>g with people (EMT 4)<br />
There were also m<strong>an</strong>y <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of hyperbole or figur<strong>at</strong>ive exagger<strong>at</strong>ion:<br />
it w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> eleph<strong>an</strong>t stapeed (stampede) <strong>in</strong>to the shop (EMT 3)<br />
Paul w<strong>as</strong> bored to de<strong>at</strong>h (EAL 5)<br />
A couple of pupils concluded their stories with examples of zeugma, a figure which<br />
uses one verb with two Objects, one of them literally <strong>an</strong>d the other figur<strong>at</strong>ively.<br />
Even though he didn’t leave the shop with the game, he left with some pride.<br />
(EMT 4, Story 5)<br />
I had the rest of the levels to face <strong>an</strong>d also the filthy dishes. (EAL 4)<br />
6.3.2 Extended <strong>an</strong>d s<strong>in</strong>gle uses of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Most of the metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes were one-off comparisons th<strong>at</strong> were not further<br />
connected <strong>in</strong>to the story. Some descriptions of the boy <strong>an</strong>d girl characters used<br />
parallel pairs of metaphors or similes:
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her beady small golden brown eyes<br />
his brown puppy dog eyes (EMT 4)<br />
his spikey-brown hair sh<strong>in</strong>ed like a star<br />
M<strong>an</strong>dy’s funky fair hair w<strong>as</strong> blow<strong>in</strong>g wildly <strong>in</strong> the w<strong>in</strong>d. (EMT 5)<br />
One or two stories used extended metaphor for rhetorical effect. In one EAL story by<br />
a pupil achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4, a simile w<strong>as</strong> l<strong>at</strong>er developed <strong>in</strong>to <strong>an</strong> extended metaphor:<br />
So all the customers barged <strong>in</strong>. It w<strong>as</strong> like the whole of new york city.<br />
…<br />
So let the new yorkers prepare for the b<strong>at</strong>tle of the door-men not just a m<strong>an</strong>, a<br />
whole army of d<strong>an</strong>gerous men.<br />
6.3.3 Amount of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Table 9 shows how much figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage w<strong>as</strong> used by each group, <strong>in</strong> the first row<br />
<strong>as</strong> raw numbers <strong>an</strong>d then <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> average number of metaphors per story over the total<br />
stories. This l<strong>at</strong>ter is also shown <strong>in</strong> Figure 17, <strong>an</strong>d emph<strong>as</strong>ises the much gre<strong>at</strong>er<br />
frequency <strong>in</strong> stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5, <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> particular <strong>in</strong> the EAL stories.<br />
Inst<strong>an</strong>ces of<br />
figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Average no of<br />
<strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces per story<br />
(N = 264)<br />
Table 8 Amount of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage used<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
3 56 91 19 32 70<br />
0.9 0.8 2.7 0.4 0.7 1.6<br />
Me<strong>an</strong> no of <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces per<br />
script<br />
3<br />
2<br />
1<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Figure 17 The me<strong>an</strong> number of <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage per story, over all stories.<br />
Writers made very unequal use of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, with only 70 out of 264 stories<br />
be<strong>in</strong>g identified by r<strong>at</strong>ers <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g it. When we look <strong>in</strong>side these 70 stories, we<br />
f<strong>in</strong>d th<strong>at</strong> the user of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage is further differenti<strong>at</strong>ed, with some writers<br />
us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y <strong>as</strong> 9 metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes, <strong>an</strong>d others just us<strong>in</strong>g one or two. Use of<br />
metaphor <strong>an</strong>d simile thus seems to be a very personal tendency.<br />
The stories with figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 tended to <strong>in</strong>clude a<br />
higher number of metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes th<strong>an</strong> stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d<br />
4, with stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 aga<strong>in</strong> show<strong>in</strong>g the highest
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frequency. Table 10 <strong>an</strong>d Figure 18 show how m<strong>an</strong>y metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes were used,<br />
on average, by those writers who used figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.<br />
Average no of<br />
<strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces per story<br />
(N=70)<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
1.5 3.0 5.4 2.4 3.5 4.4<br />
Table 9 The me<strong>an</strong> number of metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes per story (N=70)<br />
6<br />
5<br />
4<br />
3<br />
2<br />
1<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Figure 18 The me<strong>an</strong> number of <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces per story <strong>in</strong> which figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage w<strong>as</strong> used<br />
(N=70)<br />
6.3.4 Animal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> noticeable th<strong>at</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage (14%) <strong>in</strong>volved <strong>an</strong>imals,<br />
used to describe Characters, e.g. eyes like a c<strong>at</strong>’s, <strong>an</strong>d to describe the queue rush<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>in</strong>to the shop shown <strong>in</strong> the third storyboard picture:<br />
the children rushed <strong>in</strong> like if loads of eleph<strong>an</strong>ts saw one little r<strong>at</strong> (EMT 3)<br />
the children r<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>to the entr<strong>an</strong>ce like a group of cheetahs (EAL 4)<br />
The proportion of <strong>an</strong>imal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes to the total numbers varied by level.<br />
EAL use of <strong>an</strong>imal metaphor <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>ed with level, where<strong>as</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g showed the<br />
opposite trend, with level 3 us<strong>in</strong>g much more th<strong>an</strong> levels 4 <strong>an</strong>d 5 (Table 11)<br />
Animal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d<br />
similes <strong>as</strong> percentage<br />
of all figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
0 10.7 19.7 26.3 12.5 7.1<br />
Table 10 Animal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes <strong>as</strong> % of all figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
When we look <strong>at</strong> the use of <strong>an</strong>imal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes per story (Figure 19), the<br />
highest frequency is <strong>in</strong> stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.
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me<strong>an</strong> no of <strong>an</strong>imal<br />
figures per script<br />
1.2<br />
1<br />
0.8<br />
0.6<br />
0.4<br />
0.2<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Figure 19 The me<strong>an</strong> number of <strong>an</strong>imal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes per story (N=70)<br />
A list of the vocabulary of the metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes (Table 12) shows the gre<strong>at</strong>er<br />
r<strong>an</strong>ge of <strong>an</strong>imals used <strong>in</strong> the stories by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5.<br />
Animal<br />
vocabulary<br />
EAL 3 EAL 4 EAL 5 EMT 3 EMT 4 EMT 5<br />
stampede (2) stampede (2)<br />
stampede (3)<br />
…galloped galloped<br />
budgies<br />
butterflies<br />
cheetahs<br />
dogs<br />
gorilla<br />
lions<br />
owl<br />
<strong>an</strong>imals<br />
bee (2)<br />
butterflies<br />
c<strong>at</strong> …<br />
cheetah (2)<br />
dogs<br />
eleph<strong>an</strong>ts<br />
horse (2)<br />
k<strong>an</strong>garoo<br />
lion<br />
monkey<br />
pigeons<br />
rh<strong>in</strong>os<br />
snake<br />
eleph<strong>an</strong>ts (4)<br />
gorilla<br />
parrot<br />
r<strong>at</strong><br />
eagle<br />
eleph<strong>an</strong>ts<br />
gazelle<br />
puppy dog<br />
rh<strong>in</strong>os<br />
tiger<br />
cheetah<br />
chick<br />
fox..<br />
hare<br />
lions<br />
squirrel<br />
Table 11 Animal vocabulary used <strong>in</strong> figur<strong>at</strong>ivel<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
A wide r<strong>an</strong>ge of other sem<strong>an</strong>tic fields were used <strong>in</strong> figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, but only<br />
<strong>an</strong>imals were used <strong>in</strong> such numbers by so m<strong>an</strong>y children.<br />
6.3.5 Errors with metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
Metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes quite often appeared ‘odd’ <strong>in</strong> some way to <strong>an</strong> adult reader.<br />
Around 18% of all uses of figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage could be said to conta<strong>in</strong> errors, which<br />
c<strong>an</strong> be cl<strong>as</strong>sed <strong>as</strong> either errors of appropriacy or of accuracy.<br />
Errors of appropriacy<br />
There were several ways <strong>in</strong> which metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes might be deemed<br />
<strong>in</strong>appropri<strong>at</strong>e, the most common be<strong>in</strong>g a comparison th<strong>at</strong> had neg<strong>at</strong>ive connot<strong>at</strong>ions.<br />
For example:<br />
hair <strong>as</strong> brown <strong>as</strong> soil (EAL 4)<br />
his f<strong>in</strong>e blonde hair became <strong>as</strong> stiff <strong>as</strong> le<strong>at</strong>her (EMT 5)
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how come my mum is tight like <strong>as</strong>k<strong>in</strong>g a monkey is you c<strong>an</strong> have a b<strong>an</strong><strong>an</strong>a (EAL 5)<br />
jump<strong>in</strong>g up <strong>an</strong>d down like he w<strong>an</strong>ted to toilet (EAL 4)<br />
Sometimes the comparison just didn’t quite work. In the next example, fireworks<br />
don’t sparkle <strong>in</strong> the same way <strong>as</strong> eyes <strong>an</strong>d they also explode, which eyes don’t:<br />
her sky blue eyes sparkled like a firework (EMT 5)<br />
Similarly, hungry dogs might be a good <strong>an</strong>alogy for the queue of customers but the<br />
simile needs rush<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> to be mapped to e<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g the meal r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g for it:<br />
everyone came rush<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> like dogs wait<strong>in</strong>g to e<strong>at</strong> their meal (EAL 5)<br />
There were also a couple of <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces of mixed metaphors:<br />
the children rushed <strong>in</strong> <strong>as</strong> f<strong>as</strong>t <strong>as</strong> lighten<strong>in</strong>g, tak<strong>in</strong>g hold of their tre<strong>as</strong>ure (EAL 5)<br />
Errors of accuracy<br />
Errors of accuracy were usually m<strong>at</strong>ters of word order or choice, or of prepositions (<strong>as</strong><br />
<strong>in</strong> section 4.7.3):<br />
mum w<strong>as</strong> try<strong>in</strong>g to stable her legs (stabilise) (EMT 4)<br />
so loud th<strong>at</strong> a foghorn would be called a fog whisper (EAL 5)<br />
pour<strong>in</strong>g with tears down their faces (EAL 4)<br />
brown chocol<strong>at</strong>e eyes (EAL 4)<br />
he w<strong>as</strong> driv<strong>in</strong>g his mum crazy for (about) it (EMT 4)<br />
I went fly<strong>in</strong>g on (to) the floor (EAL 5)<br />
I w<strong>as</strong> about to burst <strong>in</strong>to (with) happ<strong>in</strong>ess (EMT 3)<br />
The errors mirror those found <strong>in</strong> more general l<strong>an</strong>guage use, but are more frequent,<br />
perhaps because colloc<strong>at</strong>ional restrictions - which words are allowed to occur together<br />
- are often even tighter <strong>in</strong> metaphorical idioms.<br />
The distribution of errors w<strong>as</strong> uneven:<br />
• Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> more likely to show some k<strong>in</strong>d of error;<br />
23% of metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes <strong>in</strong> EAL stories conta<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>an</strong> error <strong>in</strong> contr<strong>as</strong>t with<br />
14% <strong>in</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Errors <strong>in</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g accounted for two thirds of the total errors with metaphors<br />
<strong>an</strong>d similes.<br />
• Individual writers accounted for m<strong>an</strong>y of the errors, with multiple errors <strong>in</strong> some<br />
stories.<br />
• For both groups, there were more or less the same proportions of appropriacy <strong>an</strong>d<br />
accuracy errors.<br />
Errors <strong>an</strong>d cre<strong>at</strong>ivity<br />
The errors <strong>in</strong> formul<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes are not just <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g - they also<br />
provide evidence of how children learn to use figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d of the cre<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
processes of the children who were try<strong>in</strong>g to do so. Some of the le<strong>as</strong>t successful<br />
similes from <strong>an</strong> adult’s viewpo<strong>in</strong>t were also the most cre<strong>at</strong>ive:<br />
the game split <strong>in</strong> half like a chick com<strong>in</strong>g out of its egg (EMT 5)<br />
time flew by like pigeons <strong>an</strong>d I w<strong>as</strong> a rock lay<strong>in</strong>g under a tree (EAL 5)
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Although the occurrence of metaphor <strong>an</strong>d simile might be greeted cynically <strong>as</strong> a result<br />
of ‘teach<strong>in</strong>g to the test’, our f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs show th<strong>at</strong> it is not th<strong>at</strong> simple. If all 264 children<br />
had been taught to use figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, then it w<strong>as</strong> not particularly successful,<br />
s<strong>in</strong>ce only 70 writers did so. In addition, those children had not simply learnt figures<br />
of speech by heart to reproduce <strong>in</strong> the tests, but had, <strong>in</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y c<strong>as</strong>es, composed them to<br />
suit the particular story context.<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage allows some children particular opportunities to cre<strong>at</strong>e vivid<br />
images <strong>in</strong> their stories. While all children should be exposed to good writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong><br />
<strong>in</strong>cludes metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes, the use of metaphor <strong>an</strong>d simile is quite personal <strong>an</strong>d<br />
should not be forced on every child; <strong>in</strong>deed these results suggest th<strong>at</strong> it c<strong>an</strong>not be.<br />
Those children with figur<strong>at</strong>ive imag<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ions should be encouraged to experiment with<br />
images, but should also be helped to <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e the accuracy of the l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> their<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes. Discussion of connot<strong>at</strong>ions of various images might also help<br />
with appropriacy, although this is likely to improve with m<strong>at</strong>urity.<br />
Animal metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes may be a useful <strong>in</strong>troduction to figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage for<br />
young writers.<br />
Children achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 should be encouraged to extend the r<strong>an</strong>ge of sem<strong>an</strong>tic<br />
fields they use to construct metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes.<br />
6.4 Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
The term formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e is used here to me<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>y group of words th<strong>at</strong> are ‘bound’<br />
together <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>, <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> certa<strong>in</strong> words must, or tend to be, accomp<strong>an</strong>ied by certa<strong>in</strong><br />
other words. There are m<strong>an</strong>y other ways to refer to this phenomenon, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g multiword<br />
units, lexical str<strong>in</strong>gs, fixed phr<strong>as</strong>es, <strong>an</strong>d formulaic sequences.<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es c<strong>an</strong> be entirely fixed <strong>in</strong> their <strong>in</strong>ternal grammar or allow some<br />
gramm<strong>at</strong>ical vari<strong>at</strong>ion. They c<strong>an</strong> be sem<strong>an</strong>tically opaque, with their me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> a unit<br />
quite different <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>accessible from the me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g of the parts, <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> face the music or<br />
a makeover, or the me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g may be accessible from the words th<strong>at</strong> make up the<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e. We c<strong>an</strong> also see a cont<strong>in</strong>uum from very fixed expressions, like idioms, to<br />
colloc<strong>at</strong>ions, which reflect tendencies for words to occur with each other. The amount<br />
<strong>an</strong>d type of formulaicity th<strong>at</strong> a phr<strong>as</strong>e comes to have <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> is reached through<br />
use, <strong>an</strong>d is quite arbitrary.<br />
The role of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage learn<strong>in</strong>g is currently excit<strong>in</strong>g much <strong>in</strong>terest<br />
(Wray, 2002). It seems th<strong>at</strong> children acquire formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es, learnt <strong>as</strong> wholes, <strong>as</strong><br />
part of learn<strong>in</strong>g their first l<strong>an</strong>guage. In learn<strong>in</strong>g a second or additional l<strong>an</strong>guage, the<br />
role of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es is more complic<strong>at</strong>ed. Learn<strong>in</strong>g phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>as</strong> whole units c<strong>an</strong><br />
help <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong>e fluency. On the other h<strong>an</strong>d, if phr<strong>as</strong>es are not known <strong>as</strong> wholes <strong>an</strong>d have<br />
to be constructed, their arbitrary <strong>an</strong>d unpredictable formulaicity may lead to errors.
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When we read a phr<strong>as</strong>e <strong>in</strong> children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g, it is difficult to know if it h<strong>as</strong> been<br />
produced <strong>as</strong> a formula or constructed on the spot from <strong>in</strong>dividual words. In either<br />
c<strong>as</strong>e, the phr<strong>as</strong>e may look correct to a n<strong>at</strong>ive speaker or may seem odd if <strong>an</strong>y of the<br />
words are not used accord<strong>in</strong>g to the unwritten <strong>an</strong>d arbitrary ‘rules’ for th<strong>at</strong> phr<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
We have seen <strong>in</strong> the previous section th<strong>at</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y metaphorical idioms are formulaic<br />
<strong>an</strong>d how small errors of word choice st<strong>an</strong>d out. The same happens <strong>in</strong> nonmetaphorical<br />
formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es. Consider the example:<br />
they waited for a lot of time<br />
There is noth<strong>in</strong>g ungramm<strong>at</strong>ical about a lot of time, <strong>an</strong>d it might be used <strong>in</strong> other<br />
contexts, such <strong>as</strong>: I spent a lot of time <strong>in</strong> the queue. With the word wait, we need the<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e for a long time.<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers identified <strong>an</strong>d counted errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> the 100 word blocks of<br />
the stories.<br />
• After verb errors, these errors were the most common <strong>an</strong>d marked out EAL<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> different from EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Figure 20 shows the me<strong>an</strong> number of errors counted <strong>in</strong> the 100 word blocks of stories<br />
from each group.<br />
Me<strong>an</strong> no of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e errors<br />
per 100 words<br />
1<br />
0.8<br />
0.6<br />
0.4<br />
0.2<br />
0<br />
EAL3 EAL4 EAL5 EMT3 EMT4 EMT5<br />
Figure 20 Me<strong>an</strong> numbers of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e errors <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks<br />
• The results show a very highly signific<strong>an</strong>t difference between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g, with EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g show<strong>in</strong>g more th<strong>an</strong> twice <strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es. (The me<strong>an</strong> number of errors <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks w<strong>as</strong> 0.8 compared with<br />
0.4 <strong>in</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.)<br />
• The widest difference is found <strong>in</strong> stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 4, which have<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>tly more errors (0.9 per 100 word block) th<strong>an</strong> stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g<br />
level 5 (0.5). The difference <strong>in</strong> the me<strong>an</strong> numbers of errors between EAL <strong>an</strong>d<br />
EMT stories by pupils <strong>at</strong> this level is very highly signific<strong>an</strong>t (0.9 <strong>an</strong>d 0.3<br />
respectively).<br />
• Even <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5, EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g h<strong>as</strong> nearly twice <strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>as</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g (0.5 compared with 0.3 per 100 word<br />
block).
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In the close <strong>an</strong>alysis of twenty EAL stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e error accounted for 14% of the total. The errors found here were put together<br />
with errors noted by r<strong>at</strong>ers across all stories, produc<strong>in</strong>g a corpus of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e<br />
errors across levels. This corpus w<strong>as</strong> then c<strong>at</strong>egorised <strong>in</strong> terms of l<strong>an</strong>guage use <strong>an</strong>d<br />
content to f<strong>in</strong>d out wh<strong>at</strong> sorts of errors were be<strong>in</strong>g made. As well <strong>as</strong> prepositional<br />
errors <strong>as</strong> described <strong>in</strong> section 4.3.7, we found errors <strong>in</strong> word order, <strong>in</strong> word choice <strong>an</strong>d<br />
<strong>in</strong> word use:<br />
<strong>in</strong> word order<br />
C<strong>an</strong> I go with you shopp<strong>in</strong>g<br />
he thought they should go or stay<br />
his best of all friend<br />
(go shopp<strong>in</strong>g with you)<br />
(stay or go)<br />
(his best friend of all)<br />
<strong>in</strong> word choice<br />
he quickly wore (put on) his shoes<br />
it costs (is) expensive<br />
a bundle (bunch) of people<br />
people were d<strong>an</strong>gl<strong>in</strong>g (l<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g up?) on the street<br />
The l<strong>as</strong>t two are from stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>an</strong>d might be <strong>at</strong>tempts <strong>at</strong><br />
figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage, but <strong>as</strong> with metaphor, there are acceptable <strong>an</strong>d non-acceptable<br />
comb<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ions of words <strong>in</strong> phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>at</strong> are to some degree formulaic.<br />
<strong>in</strong> word use<br />
When children learn a new word, <strong>as</strong> they are do<strong>in</strong>g const<strong>an</strong>tly <strong>in</strong> primary school, they<br />
have to learn the me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g of the word but also the use of it, <strong>an</strong>d how the use of one<br />
word differs from the use of <strong>an</strong>other. For example, the word barge is a strik<strong>in</strong>g way of<br />
express<strong>in</strong>g how the boy <strong>in</strong> the story pushes his way through the crowd, but barge is<br />
used differently from push. The child who wrote:<br />
I barged everyone out of the way<br />
seems to have understood the me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g of barge, but still needs to learn th<strong>at</strong> barge<br />
does not work <strong>as</strong> a straight replacement for push.<br />
We c<strong>an</strong> say<br />
I pushed everyone out of the way <strong>an</strong>d I pushed through everyone<br />
but barge c<strong>an</strong>not be used with <strong>an</strong> Object, <strong>an</strong>d only<br />
I barged through everyone<br />
sounds correct.<br />
These errors of word use show vocabulary learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> progress. It takes time <strong>an</strong>d<br />
repe<strong>at</strong>ed exposure to words <strong>in</strong> use to learn exactly which expressions are acceptable <strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>English</strong> <strong>an</strong>d which are not. Other examples of over or under-extension of word use<br />
<strong>in</strong>clude:<br />
they both mo<strong>an</strong>ed (begged) for the game<br />
the shop w<strong>as</strong> closed yet (still closed)
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The content of the story produced sets of non-acceptable phr<strong>as</strong>es around shopp<strong>in</strong>g,<br />
crowds <strong>an</strong>d queu<strong>in</strong>g, suggest<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> prepar<strong>at</strong>ion for writ<strong>in</strong>g might <strong>in</strong>clude close<br />
<strong>at</strong>tention to particular k<strong>in</strong>ds of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es. The content area of time produced<br />
quite a number of errors, <strong>as</strong> did words for describ<strong>in</strong>g direct speech:<br />
length of time<br />
after some (a) couple of weeks<br />
the clock stricket to 9 am (the clock struck n<strong>in</strong>e)<br />
l<strong>at</strong>er th<strong>at</strong> m<strong>in</strong>ute… (l<strong>at</strong>er)<br />
One long hard five m<strong>in</strong>utes (five long hard m<strong>in</strong>utes)<br />
direct speech<br />
“OK I will” told (said) Mary<br />
Begged Micheal to his mum (Michael begged his mum)<br />
“Could I have th<strong>at</strong> game,” ple<strong>as</strong>ed Alice (“Could I have th<strong>at</strong> game, ple<strong>as</strong>e” <strong>as</strong>ked<br />
/ pleaded Alice)<br />
Time phr<strong>as</strong>es are considered <strong>in</strong> the next chapter <strong>as</strong> one resource for cre<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g the<br />
timel<strong>in</strong>e of a story.<br />
Pupils learn<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage should be helped to notice<br />
colloc<strong>at</strong>ions, i.e. which words tend to be used together. They should meet <strong>an</strong>d learn<br />
words, especially prepositions, <strong>as</strong> part of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es, <strong>as</strong> well <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>dividual<br />
words.<br />
We should expect the learn<strong>in</strong>g of new vocabulary to be a long term process, especially<br />
of more unusual content words.<br />
Pupils need to meet words <strong>in</strong> a r<strong>an</strong>ge of texts <strong>an</strong>d contexts <strong>in</strong> order to fully underst<strong>an</strong>d<br />
how to use them.<br />
Errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es should be corrected, <strong>in</strong> speech <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g, <strong>in</strong> sensitive<br />
but consistent ways through all <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong>s.<br />
Explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g of them<strong>at</strong>ic sets of formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es, e.g. to use with direct speech<br />
or time phr<strong>as</strong>es, might help with correct<strong>in</strong>g errors <strong>an</strong>d with learn<strong>in</strong>g new vocabulary.
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7 Us<strong>in</strong>g l<strong>an</strong>guage resources to construct time <strong>in</strong> a<br />
story<br />
In this chapter we see how several of the fe<strong>at</strong>ures discussed earlier are brought<br />
together <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g a story. As the <strong>in</strong>tegr<strong>at</strong>ed framework for writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> Chapter 2<br />
shows, <strong>an</strong> effective story needs clear org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>at</strong> whole text level comb<strong>in</strong>ed with<br />
appropri<strong>at</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d accur<strong>at</strong>e use of l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> sentence, clause, phr<strong>as</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d word levels.<br />
In narr<strong>at</strong>ive genre, a writer h<strong>as</strong> to construct a story th<strong>at</strong> takes place over time, with<br />
characters tak<strong>in</strong>g part <strong>in</strong> events th<strong>at</strong> happen <strong>in</strong> a connected sequence <strong>an</strong>d lead to a<br />
resolution. The writer needs to use the resources of the <strong>English</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage to sequence<br />
<strong>an</strong>d connect events, <strong>an</strong>d to show the actions of characters.<br />
If we focus on how a writer builds the timel<strong>in</strong>e of a story, we f<strong>in</strong>d th<strong>at</strong> stories often<br />
beg<strong>in</strong> by plac<strong>in</strong>g the characters <strong>in</strong> a particular time sett<strong>in</strong>g:<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> a summer’s day (Story 3, EAL 5)<br />
In the summer holidays (Story 4, EMT 3)<br />
As the story moves on <strong>an</strong>d the plot unfolds, tim<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d ch<strong>an</strong>ges <strong>in</strong> time are marked by<br />
words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es such <strong>as</strong> l<strong>at</strong>er, f<strong>in</strong>ally or from th<strong>at</strong> day on, <strong>an</strong>d by the use of the<br />
<strong>English</strong> tense system. The follow<strong>in</strong>g l<strong>an</strong>guage resources play a key role <strong>in</strong> build<strong>in</strong>g<br />
time <strong>in</strong>to a story:<br />
• Time phr<strong>as</strong>es, <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slots of clauses<br />
• Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e Adverbial clauses<br />
• Verb tenses.<br />
In this chapter, we use the project f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs to show how teachers c<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>e<br />
children’s use of these l<strong>an</strong>guage resources <strong>an</strong>d how all pupils, but particularly EAL<br />
learners, might be helped to construct time <strong>in</strong> stories more effectively.<br />
7.1 Use of time phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Time phr<strong>as</strong>es are those phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong>clude some <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>ion of time or tim<strong>in</strong>g. They<br />
are often formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>at</strong> beg<strong>in</strong> with a preposition such <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> or <strong>at</strong>, <strong>an</strong>d they are<br />
placed <strong>in</strong> Adverbial slots <strong>in</strong> clauses. Phr<strong>as</strong>es c<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>clude s<strong>in</strong>gle words like l<strong>at</strong>er, but<br />
are different from full clauses.<br />
7.1.1 Types of time phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Extract<strong>in</strong>g all the time phr<strong>as</strong>es from Story 4 (EMT 3) gives us a list th<strong>at</strong> c<strong>an</strong> be<br />
divided <strong>in</strong>to three groups: those th<strong>at</strong> place <strong>an</strong> event <strong>at</strong> a specific po<strong>in</strong>t <strong>in</strong> time; those<br />
th<strong>at</strong> give the dur<strong>at</strong>ion of <strong>an</strong> event; <strong>an</strong>d those th<strong>at</strong> place two or more events <strong>at</strong> times<br />
rel<strong>at</strong>ive to each other.<br />
A specific po<strong>in</strong>t <strong>in</strong> time<br />
<strong>in</strong> the summer holidays<br />
Dur<strong>at</strong>ion of time<br />
for <strong>an</strong> hour <strong>an</strong>d a half<br />
for about 10 m<strong>in</strong>utes
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Rel<strong>at</strong>ive time<br />
After th<strong>at</strong>,<br />
then<br />
about 20 m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er<br />
The time phr<strong>as</strong>es used <strong>in</strong> the sample scripts by EAL level 3, EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT level 5<br />
writers are shown <strong>in</strong> Table 12.<br />
Specific po<strong>in</strong>t <strong>in</strong><br />
time<br />
Dur<strong>at</strong>ion of time<br />
Rel<strong>at</strong>ive time<br />
Story 1 EAL 3 Story 3 EAL 5 Story 6 EMT 5<br />
com<strong>in</strong>g back from school<br />
nearly clos<strong>in</strong>g time<br />
never<br />
never<br />
<strong>an</strong>y more<br />
first<br />
first<br />
first<br />
f<strong>in</strong>ally<br />
Table 12 Time phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
a summer’s day<br />
suddenly<br />
ever s<strong>in</strong>ce l<strong>as</strong>t month<br />
<strong>at</strong> (from) seven <strong>in</strong> the morn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
not for <strong>an</strong>other hour or so<br />
ever s<strong>in</strong>ce he w<strong>as</strong> seven<br />
f<strong>in</strong>ally<br />
f<strong>in</strong>ally<br />
first<br />
From th<strong>at</strong> day on<br />
By this time<br />
One time<br />
Never<br />
a long time<br />
never<br />
a long time<br />
ten m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er<br />
f<strong>in</strong>ally<br />
first<br />
One week l<strong>at</strong>er<br />
We c<strong>an</strong> see th<strong>at</strong> the stories by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 use a gre<strong>at</strong>er r<strong>an</strong>ge of time<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>an</strong> the level 3 story, which uses its more limited r<strong>an</strong>ge several times. Both<br />
level 5 writers also repe<strong>at</strong> phr<strong>as</strong>es, seem<strong>in</strong>g to prefer particular ways of express<strong>in</strong>g<br />
time - ever s<strong>in</strong>ce, l<strong>at</strong>er, <strong>an</strong>d a long time - <strong>an</strong>d could also benefit by <strong>in</strong>cre<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>g the<br />
variety of phr<strong>as</strong>es they use.<br />
Pupils could be helped to extend the variety of time phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>at</strong> they use by look<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>at</strong> wh<strong>at</strong> other pupils do <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> phr<strong>as</strong>es used <strong>in</strong> good texts th<strong>at</strong> they read.<br />
7.1.2 Accur<strong>at</strong>e use of time phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
In chapters 5 <strong>an</strong>d 6, we saw th<strong>at</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>s errors with prepositions <strong>an</strong>d<br />
with formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es. Time phr<strong>as</strong>es often comb<strong>in</strong>e these <strong>an</strong>d are thus prone to<br />
errors:<br />
they waited for long (for a long time)<br />
for a lot of time<br />
(for a long time)<br />
after some (a) couple of weeks<br />
one long hard 5 m<strong>in</strong>utes (five long m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er)<br />
a longtime of argu<strong>in</strong>g (a long time argu<strong>in</strong>g)<br />
the shop w<strong>as</strong> closed yet (still closed)<br />
L<strong>at</strong>er th<strong>at</strong> m<strong>in</strong>ute<br />
(A m<strong>in</strong>ute l<strong>at</strong>er)
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Draw<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong>tention to formulaic time phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d the words <strong>in</strong>side them, <strong>an</strong>d collect<strong>in</strong>g<br />
various types to use <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g might help EAL learners avoid this type of error.<br />
7.2 Adverbial clauses of time<br />
Time clauses beg<strong>in</strong> with subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors such <strong>as</strong> while, when, <strong>as</strong>, s<strong>in</strong>ce. Although they<br />
are the most frequent type of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clause <strong>in</strong> the stories, we saw <strong>in</strong> chapter 6<br />
th<strong>at</strong>, <strong>at</strong> levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 4, EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g uses signific<strong>an</strong>tly fewer words <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial<br />
slots th<strong>an</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g also use a more restricted r<strong>an</strong>ge of b<strong>as</strong>ic time<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors: so, <strong>as</strong>, when, <strong>an</strong>d use fewer of the adv<strong>an</strong>ced time subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors: while,<br />
<strong>as</strong> soon <strong>as</strong>, until, after, whilst, before.<br />
The column <strong>an</strong>alyses for the sample stories show <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g profile of Adverbial<br />
time clause subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors:<br />
Story 1 EAL 3 when when when<br />
Story 3 EAL 5 whilst s<strong>in</strong>ce<br />
Story 6 EMT 5 when<br />
Story 1 shows no variety, with three clauses start<strong>in</strong>g with when, while the EAL<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g by a pupil achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>in</strong>cludes two adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>in</strong> the first<br />
100 words. The EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g by a pupil achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 (story 6), however, only<br />
uses one Adverbial clause, beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g with when. To underst<strong>an</strong>d how this writer<br />
constructs time, we need to look <strong>at</strong> the third l<strong>an</strong>guage resource, verbs <strong>an</strong>d their tenses.<br />
7.3 Verb tenses<br />
The verb is the pivot of the clause <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>. It is the only compulsory element of a<br />
clause, <strong>an</strong>d comes between Subject <strong>an</strong>d Object <strong>in</strong> the simple declar<strong>at</strong>ive clause. A<br />
Verb c<strong>an</strong> be a s<strong>in</strong>gle word, like st<strong>an</strong>ds, or a longer phr<strong>as</strong>e with several words, might<br />
have been st<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g. Each word <strong>in</strong> a verb phr<strong>as</strong>e adds some extra me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g. In first<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage development, the length <strong>an</strong>d complexity of the verb are good <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>ors of<br />
m<strong>at</strong>urity <strong>an</strong>d development.<br />
7.3.1 Wh<strong>at</strong> verbs c<strong>an</strong> do<br />
Verb phr<strong>as</strong>es show the tim<strong>in</strong>g of actions through the writer’s choice of tense. So, he is<br />
wait<strong>in</strong>g refers to <strong>an</strong> action th<strong>at</strong> is on-go<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> the time, while he w<strong>as</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>es<br />
<strong>an</strong> action th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> on-go<strong>in</strong>g for some period <strong>in</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t. He waited <strong>in</strong>dic<strong>at</strong>es <strong>an</strong> action<br />
th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> completed <strong>at</strong> some po<strong>in</strong>t <strong>in</strong> time <strong>in</strong> the p<strong>as</strong>t, while he had waited suggests<br />
th<strong>at</strong> the completion of the action took place before some other p<strong>as</strong>t action.<br />
The probability <strong>an</strong>d possibility of <strong>an</strong> event or action is shown through the use of<br />
modal verbs such <strong>as</strong> might, would.<br />
Verbs c<strong>an</strong> also show agency through the use of the active or p<strong>as</strong>sive voice. Compare<br />
he opened the doors <strong>an</strong>d the doors were opened. The l<strong>at</strong>ter emph<strong>as</strong>ises wh<strong>at</strong> happened<br />
to the doors, r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> the action carried out by the m<strong>an</strong>.
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7.3.2 Accur<strong>at</strong>e use of verbs<br />
The research h<strong>as</strong> shown th<strong>at</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g, particularly <strong>at</strong> level 3, conta<strong>in</strong>s errors <strong>in</strong> the<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d tenses of verbs th<strong>at</strong> may affect how well the writ<strong>in</strong>g conveys the sense of<br />
tim<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> a story.<br />
Modal verbs <strong>in</strong> conditional sentences c<strong>an</strong> cause problems for writers:<br />
I wish if someone f<strong>in</strong>d me th<strong>at</strong> game (th<strong>at</strong> someone would f<strong>in</strong>d me th<strong>at</strong> game)<br />
His mum then told me I c<strong>an</strong> have the game (could)<br />
We saw <strong>in</strong> section 5.3.2 th<strong>at</strong> Story 3, even though written by a pupil achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5,<br />
conta<strong>in</strong>s errors <strong>in</strong> the use of the more adv<strong>an</strong>ced tense, the p<strong>as</strong>t perfect.<br />
The EMT writer of Story 6 h<strong>an</strong>dles verbs particularly well, both <strong>in</strong> the direct speech<br />
<strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> the narr<strong>at</strong>ive. In the follow<strong>in</strong>g extracts, he uses the p<strong>as</strong>t perfect, <strong>an</strong>d also<br />
comb<strong>in</strong>es simple p<strong>as</strong>t tense forms with the p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous tense, <strong>an</strong>d active with<br />
p<strong>as</strong>sive verbs:<br />
Ten m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>e, the queue hadn’t budged, but John hadn’t noticed.<br />
John saw it. He tried runn<strong>in</strong>g through the crowd but it w<strong>as</strong> hard. Now most of<br />
the crowd w<strong>as</strong> head<strong>in</strong>g towards the till. …”It’s taken me a long time,” he thought.<br />
Then he w<strong>as</strong> stopped. Someone else w<strong>as</strong> pull<strong>in</strong>g it. He looked up <strong>an</strong>d saw a girl.<br />
Through this r<strong>an</strong>ge of verb forms, he cre<strong>at</strong>es a story th<strong>at</strong> moves along through time,<br />
<strong>an</strong>d the reader knows exactly wh<strong>at</strong> is happen<strong>in</strong>g when. Longer actions are contr<strong>as</strong>ted<br />
with short sharp actions to cre<strong>at</strong>e tension <strong>an</strong>d excitement.<br />
As with genres, clause types <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary, skilful writers need to develop a r<strong>an</strong>ge<br />
of verb forms th<strong>at</strong> c<strong>an</strong> be used flexibly <strong>an</strong>d accur<strong>at</strong>ely to express subtle shades of<br />
me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g.<br />
7.4 Br<strong>in</strong>g<strong>in</strong>g it all together<br />
Wh<strong>at</strong> makes for good writ<strong>in</strong>g will not be loc<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> just one area of l<strong>an</strong>guage use. As<br />
we see with construct<strong>in</strong>g the timel<strong>in</strong>e <strong>in</strong> a story, writers have several l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
resources <strong>at</strong> their disposal. Any of these might cause problems <strong>an</strong>d c<strong>an</strong> be <strong>at</strong>tended to<br />
through awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d teach<strong>in</strong>g. However, it is br<strong>in</strong>g<strong>in</strong>g them together to tell<br />
the story th<strong>at</strong> will make the difference. Good writ<strong>in</strong>g is a complex skill th<strong>at</strong> requires<br />
the flexible selection <strong>an</strong>d adapt<strong>at</strong>ion of l<strong>an</strong>guage fe<strong>at</strong>ures to cre<strong>at</strong>e a text <strong>in</strong> a<br />
particular genre.
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8 <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> a radio advertisement<br />
In this chapter, we report on the writ<strong>in</strong>g of radio advertisements <strong>as</strong> required by the<br />
shorter t<strong>as</strong>k (Appendix 2). Forty scripts by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g levels 3 <strong>an</strong>d 5 were<br />
r<strong>an</strong>domly selected from the full set for detailed <strong>an</strong>alysis. We were particularly<br />
<strong>in</strong>terested <strong>in</strong> how pupils tackled the genre requirements of this t<strong>as</strong>k (see expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of<br />
genre <strong>in</strong> section 2.6) . How far c<strong>an</strong> young writers, particularly those us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage, capture the form<strong>at</strong>, style <strong>an</strong>d voice typical of radio adverts?<br />
8.1 The writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>k<br />
The overall t<strong>as</strong>k is to write <strong>an</strong> advert th<strong>at</strong> will persuade people to buy a new toy. In the<br />
prepar<strong>at</strong>ion ph<strong>as</strong>e of the t<strong>as</strong>k, pupils were <strong>as</strong>ked to make notes on wh<strong>at</strong> the toy w<strong>as</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d who it w<strong>as</strong> for, <strong>an</strong>d to list three ma<strong>in</strong> fe<strong>at</strong>ures. They had to choose a name for the<br />
toy. They were then given a s<strong>in</strong>gle page with 23 l<strong>in</strong>es on which to write the<br />
advertisement, <strong>an</strong>d a time of 20 m<strong>in</strong>utes.<br />
Us<strong>in</strong>g the Framework for <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> (Figure 5), <strong>at</strong> the whole text level, the child h<strong>as</strong> the<br />
t<strong>as</strong>k of convey<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion about the toy <strong>an</strong>d persuad<strong>in</strong>g the reader / listener to buy<br />
one. The form of the whole text is expected to follow the (sub) genre of the local radio<br />
advertisement. With<strong>in</strong> the text, the writer h<strong>as</strong> to make use of l<strong>an</strong>guage to describe<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ures of the toy, <strong>an</strong>d to appeal to the reader / listener.<br />
8.2 The genre of the local radio advertisement<br />
Listen<strong>in</strong>g to radio adverts suggests th<strong>at</strong> they work <strong>as</strong> conventionalised genres <strong>in</strong> the<br />
follow<strong>in</strong>g ways:<br />
• they follow a predictable 3 or 4 stage form<strong>at</strong>, each with a specific purpose<br />
• they <strong>in</strong>clude certa<strong>in</strong> types of <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
• the l<strong>an</strong>guage style <strong>an</strong>d voice vary with the stage <strong>in</strong> the form<strong>at</strong>.<br />
Table 14 shows these stages <strong>an</strong>d wh<strong>at</strong> a full t<strong>as</strong>k response might <strong>in</strong>clude.<br />
Sample scripts are <strong>in</strong>cluded <strong>in</strong> Appendix 3 for each of the children whose stories have<br />
been used <strong>as</strong> examples <strong>in</strong> previous chapters.<br />
We should note th<strong>at</strong> the NC test t<strong>as</strong>k <strong>in</strong>structions <strong>as</strong>k the children to “write the words<br />
… to persuade”, <strong>an</strong>d the mark<strong>in</strong>g scheme r<strong>at</strong>es for use of a spoken, <strong>in</strong>formal style,<br />
r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> the <strong>in</strong>-depth genre knowledge th<strong>at</strong> we have looked <strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong> our <strong>an</strong>alysis. We<br />
<strong>as</strong>sume, however, th<strong>at</strong> if writers had th<strong>at</strong> knowledge they would have used it <strong>in</strong> their<br />
test <strong>an</strong>swers.
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Form<strong>at</strong><br />
Purpose<br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 1 Attract Attention<br />
The purpose of this stage is to ‘hook’ the<br />
listener <strong>in</strong>to pay<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong>tention to the<br />
advert.<br />
Could be<br />
• a little drama<br />
• a story<br />
• a problem <strong>in</strong> need of a solution<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion Style – l<strong>an</strong>guage use Voice<br />
<strong>Key</strong> po<strong>in</strong>t<br />
e.g. there is <strong>an</strong> amaz<strong>in</strong>g new toy<br />
If dram<strong>at</strong>ised, varies to make characters<br />
seem realistic.<br />
Could be a direct question th<strong>at</strong> identifies<br />
the problem:<br />
e.g. “Hav<strong>in</strong>g a bor<strong>in</strong>g journey?”<br />
People the listener might<br />
identify with.<br />
Often direct address to<br />
listener.<br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 2 The Inform<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
This is the longest stage <strong>an</strong>d gives the<br />
listener all the key <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion about the<br />
product.<br />
Name<br />
Market: Who it is designed for<br />
Description: colour, texture<br />
Fe<strong>at</strong>ures: components, wh<strong>at</strong> it does<br />
Purch<strong>as</strong><strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>fo: where, how much<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ional + Persu<strong>as</strong>ive.<br />
Spoken<br />
Relev<strong>an</strong>t detail e.g.<br />
• adjectives<br />
• adverbs<br />
• sub-ord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
A person to be trusted –<br />
serious<br />
Rhetorical fe<strong>at</strong>ures:<br />
• parallelism<br />
• 3-part phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
• varied sentence types<br />
• hyperbole<br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 3 The Slog<strong>an</strong><br />
Very short stage th<strong>at</strong> l<strong>in</strong>ks back to stage<br />
1 with a phr<strong>as</strong>e for the listener to<br />
remember<br />
M<strong>in</strong>imal<br />
Punchy<br />
memorable<br />
Excit<strong>in</strong>g, excited<br />
(Optional)<br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 4 The Small Pr<strong>in</strong>t<br />
Further <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion to protect the seller<br />
from claims of mislead<strong>in</strong>g listeners.<br />
Technical, legal, precise<br />
Precise<br />
Full sentences<br />
Use of p<strong>as</strong>sives <strong>an</strong>d other dist<strong>an</strong>c<strong>in</strong>g<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ures.<br />
Very f<strong>as</strong>t.<br />
Calm, fl<strong>at</strong> <strong>in</strong>ton<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
Table 13 Genre fe<strong>at</strong>ures of a local radio advertisement
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8.3 F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
There were differences between levels <strong>an</strong>d between EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g. S<strong>in</strong>ce the<br />
sample w<strong>as</strong> too small for st<strong>at</strong>istical tests, these f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs are not necessarily<br />
generalisable, but they do suggest tendencies.<br />
8.3.1 Overview of f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• EAL learners seem to h<strong>an</strong>dle the genre of the radio advertisements less<br />
confidently th<strong>an</strong> EMT pupils, particularly <strong>at</strong> level 3.<br />
• Open<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d slog<strong>an</strong>s <strong>in</strong> adverts written by EAL learners were less varied <strong>an</strong>d<br />
‘c<strong>at</strong>chy’.<br />
• Adverts by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>in</strong>cluded sufficient <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d not too<br />
much of <strong>an</strong>y one k<strong>in</strong>d, suggest<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> they had a clear overview of content.<br />
However, EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> this level conta<strong>in</strong>ed less variety of sentences <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary th<strong>an</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Us<strong>in</strong>g sentence grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary to show ch<strong>an</strong>ges <strong>in</strong> voice <strong>as</strong> the<br />
advert proceeded w<strong>as</strong> only seen <strong>in</strong> level 5 writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 often omitted key <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion, repe<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion or<br />
did not org<strong>an</strong>ise the details <strong>in</strong> a logical way.<br />
• EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 did not vary sentence structure, <strong>an</strong>d did not use<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y adjectives or adverbs.<br />
• EMT pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 sometimes had limited content, but some were<br />
very lively.<br />
• Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 often <strong>in</strong>cluded too m<strong>an</strong>y details<br />
on price <strong>an</strong>d purch<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
8.3.2 Form<strong>at</strong><br />
The use <strong>an</strong>d n<strong>at</strong>ure of <strong>Stage</strong> 1 seems to be different for EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT texts, <strong>an</strong>d for<br />
levels. <strong>Stage</strong> 1 is the ‘hook’, a sentence or phr<strong>as</strong>e th<strong>at</strong> aims to capture the audience’s<br />
<strong>at</strong>tention <strong>an</strong>d lure them <strong>in</strong>to listen<strong>in</strong>g to the rest of the advert. The EMT sample scripts<br />
open with a question <strong>an</strong>d a c<strong>at</strong>chy phr<strong>as</strong>e, both clearly targeted <strong>at</strong> the listen<strong>in</strong>g<br />
audience:<br />
Move over rubix cube <strong>an</strong>d yo-yos. (Script 6, EMT 5)<br />
Are you bored of toys? Well, there is a new toy.<br />
(Script 4, EMT 3, punctu<strong>at</strong>ion corrected)<br />
The EAL scripts tended to use less c<strong>at</strong>chy l<strong>an</strong>guage, often a st<strong>at</strong>ement <strong>in</strong> a full<br />
sentence such <strong>as</strong> the long one th<strong>at</strong> opens script 1:
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This amaz<strong>in</strong>g New toy h<strong>as</strong> come out for parent th<strong>at</strong> need help look<strong>in</strong>g after<br />
there baby when they go to give there other children to school<br />
(Script 1, EAL 3)<br />
• Adverts written by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 rarely use a ‘hook’ <strong>an</strong>d more<br />
often beg<strong>in</strong> with a st<strong>at</strong>ement. About half of EMT scripts written by pupils <strong>at</strong> the<br />
same level open appropri<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
• Adverts written by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 have open<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> are<br />
sometimes not very c<strong>at</strong>chy or excit<strong>in</strong>g. All EMT scripts written by pupils <strong>at</strong> this<br />
level had good open<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 3 <strong>in</strong> a typical radio advert is a slog<strong>an</strong>, th<strong>at</strong> summarises the <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion given <strong>in</strong><br />
the previous stage <strong>in</strong> a memorable way <strong>an</strong>d is <strong>in</strong>tended <strong>as</strong> a ‘take home’ message for<br />
the listeners.<br />
Th<strong>in</strong>k of your children - put a smile on their face. (Script 3, EAL 5)<br />
The use of this stage w<strong>as</strong> aga<strong>in</strong> different <strong>in</strong> EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT scripts <strong>at</strong> level 3:<br />
• Adverts written by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3, had miss<strong>in</strong>g or <strong>in</strong>effective<br />
slog<strong>an</strong>s. Around half of the EMT scripts written by pupils <strong>at</strong> this level <strong>in</strong>cluded<br />
slog<strong>an</strong>s.<br />
• Adverts written by EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 were more likely to <strong>in</strong>clude<br />
slog<strong>an</strong>s th<strong>an</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• The differences <strong>in</strong> open<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d slog<strong>an</strong>s suggest th<strong>at</strong> EAL learners h<strong>an</strong>dle the<br />
genre of the radio advertisements less confidently th<strong>an</strong> EMT pupils, particularly<br />
those achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3.<br />
<strong>Stage</strong> 4 is the ‘small pr<strong>in</strong>t’, often spoken very rapidly <strong>in</strong> real radio adverts, these are<br />
technical <strong>an</strong>d legal details th<strong>at</strong> the advertiser is required to <strong>in</strong>clude but which add little<br />
to the persu<strong>as</strong>ive content of the advert. Only scripts from pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5<br />
<strong>in</strong>cluded this stage, <strong>an</strong>d then only rarely. This <strong>as</strong>pect of the genre is probably le<strong>as</strong>t<br />
noticed even by those pupils who regularly listen to local radio.<br />
8.3.2 Inform<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d Style<br />
The second stage of a typical radio advert is where the advertiser <strong>in</strong>forms the audience<br />
about the product. S<strong>in</strong>ce time is limited, the <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion needs to be precise <strong>an</strong>d<br />
relev<strong>an</strong>t, but <strong>at</strong> the same time <strong>at</strong>tractive to listeners. In good scripts, this w<strong>as</strong> done<br />
us<strong>in</strong>g a variety of sentence <strong>an</strong>d clause types to keep the listener <strong>in</strong>terested.<br />
Adjective phr<strong>as</strong>es were used <strong>in</strong> front of nouns to condense <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion:<br />
the first walk<strong>in</strong>g talk<strong>in</strong>g toy<br />
its cool, specially enh<strong>an</strong>ced arm (Script 6, EMT 5)<br />
Adverbs might be used <strong>in</strong> front of verbs <strong>an</strong>d adjectives to add persu<strong>as</strong>ive emph<strong>as</strong>is:<br />
especially designed for young children<br />
extremely colourful (Script 3, EAL 5)
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There w<strong>as</strong> a clear difference <strong>in</strong> how pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 <strong>an</strong>d level 5 h<strong>an</strong>dled this<br />
stage.<br />
• Pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 often omitted key <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion, repe<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion or<br />
did not org<strong>an</strong>ise the details <strong>in</strong> a logical way.<br />
• EAL learners achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 did not vary sentence structure, <strong>an</strong>d did not use<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y adjectives or adverbs.<br />
• EMT pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 sometimes had limited content, but some were very<br />
lively.<br />
• Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT achiev<strong>in</strong>g this level often <strong>in</strong>cluded too m<strong>an</strong>y details on price<br />
<strong>an</strong>d purch<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 5 <strong>in</strong>cluded sufficient <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d not too<br />
much of <strong>an</strong>y one k<strong>in</strong>d, suggest<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> they had a clear overview of content.<br />
• However, EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> this level conta<strong>in</strong>ed less variety of sentences <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary th<strong>an</strong> EMT writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
8.3.3 Voice<br />
Real radio adverts (literally) ch<strong>an</strong>ge voices from one stage to the next. In a written<br />
advert, ch<strong>an</strong>ges <strong>in</strong> voice would need to be shown through the sentence grammar <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary. This is a difficult t<strong>as</strong>k <strong>an</strong>d w<strong>as</strong> only seen <strong>in</strong> level 5 writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
8.4 Conclusions<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> a radio advertisement requires genre knowledge <strong>an</strong>d flexibility <strong>in</strong> the use of<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage resources to capture the genre <strong>in</strong> written text. This particular genre requires<br />
variety <strong>in</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage use for the different purposes of the stages <strong>in</strong> the text.<br />
EAL learners seem less successful <strong>in</strong> adjust<strong>in</strong>g their l<strong>an</strong>guage to cre<strong>at</strong>e the genre th<strong>an</strong><br />
their EMT peers, <strong>as</strong> shown by the miss<strong>in</strong>g hooks <strong>an</strong>d slog<strong>an</strong>s <strong>an</strong>d by more uniform<br />
sentence structure. This w<strong>as</strong> particularly true for writ<strong>in</strong>g by pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3,<br />
but also seen <strong>at</strong> level 5. This may be due to be<strong>in</strong>g less familiar with the genre <strong>an</strong>d its<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage. Altern<strong>at</strong>ively, EAL learners may be familiar with the genre, e.g. through<br />
community l<strong>an</strong>guage radio, but not be able to use their <strong>English</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage resources to<br />
write <strong>in</strong> th<strong>at</strong> way.<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> t<strong>as</strong>ks th<strong>at</strong> offer adv<strong>an</strong>tages to pupils who are familiar with specific genres<br />
should be used with caution <strong>in</strong> <strong>as</strong>sessment.<br />
EAL learners should encounter <strong>an</strong> extensive r<strong>an</strong>ge of spoken <strong>an</strong>d written genres <strong>in</strong><br />
school, <strong>an</strong>d be helped to notice how they use l<strong>an</strong>guage for different purposes, readers<br />
<strong>an</strong>d form<strong>at</strong>s.<br />
EAL learners should practise mov<strong>in</strong>g between different levels of formality <strong>in</strong> spoken<br />
<strong>an</strong>d written <strong>English</strong>.<br />
All pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3 need practice <strong>in</strong> us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d adapt<strong>in</strong>g sentence grammar<br />
<strong>an</strong>d vocabulary for different genres.
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9 Implic<strong>at</strong>ions for the teach<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
This chapter sets out implic<strong>at</strong>ions for teach<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d learn<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> arise from the<br />
research project, br<strong>in</strong>g<strong>in</strong>g together some of the po<strong>in</strong>ts made <strong>in</strong> earlier chapters. Ofsted<br />
is currently undertak<strong>in</strong>g a them<strong>at</strong>ic <strong>in</strong>spection of the teach<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g to bil<strong>in</strong>gual<br />
learners <strong>at</strong> KS2 <strong>an</strong>d pl<strong>an</strong>s to publish its f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>in</strong> 2005 (see <strong>in</strong>troduction page 5).<br />
Their report will conta<strong>in</strong> further implic<strong>at</strong>ions for the teach<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
The first section considers the various ways <strong>in</strong> which teachers c<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>tervene <strong>in</strong><br />
children’s learn<strong>in</strong>g to support their writ<strong>in</strong>g development. The second section offers a<br />
tool for explor<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d evalu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g story writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
9.1 Types of <strong>in</strong>tervention <strong>in</strong> children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
The development of <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> primary level is complex,<br />
<strong>in</strong>fluenced by the type <strong>an</strong>d amount of exposure to <strong>English</strong>, by level of cognitive<br />
development, <strong>an</strong>d by m<strong>at</strong>urity. However, a clear <strong>an</strong>d consistent f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of this<br />
research project <strong>an</strong>d of the earlier <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 4 project h<strong>as</strong> been th<strong>at</strong> EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
shows pupils benefit<strong>in</strong>g from the teach<strong>in</strong>g they receive, sometimes scor<strong>in</strong>g higher<br />
th<strong>an</strong> their EMT peers <strong>in</strong> are<strong>as</strong> where explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g is likely to have been given.<br />
Furthermore, m<strong>an</strong>y of the l<strong>an</strong>guage are<strong>as</strong> th<strong>at</strong> emerge <strong>as</strong> problem<strong>at</strong>ic for EAL writers<br />
appear to be amenable to some k<strong>in</strong>d of <strong>in</strong>tervention <strong>in</strong> cl<strong>as</strong>srooms.<br />
In order to consider implic<strong>at</strong>ions, we c<strong>an</strong> separ<strong>at</strong>e out a r<strong>an</strong>ge of types of <strong>in</strong>tervention<br />
<strong>an</strong>d teach<strong>in</strong>g approaches, which vary <strong>in</strong> how explicitly they focus on l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
resources:<br />
• awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• develop<strong>in</strong>g str<strong>at</strong>egies for writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• practice<br />
• explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• feedback b<strong>as</strong>ed on <strong>as</strong>sessment for learn<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Each type of <strong>in</strong>tervention will suit some <strong>as</strong>pects of EAL learn<strong>in</strong>g better th<strong>an</strong> others. In<br />
the follow<strong>in</strong>g sub-sections, we take each type <strong>an</strong>d suggest how it might be used.<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g is the le<strong>as</strong>t explicit type of <strong>in</strong>tervention, depend<strong>in</strong>g for its<br />
effectiveness on cont<strong>in</strong>ued exposure to l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> use <strong>an</strong>d on activities th<strong>at</strong> draw<br />
pupils’ <strong>at</strong>tention to how writ<strong>in</strong>g works. It is import<strong>an</strong>t to note th<strong>at</strong>, while exposure is<br />
necessary for the development of good writ<strong>in</strong>g, it is not sufficient, <strong>an</strong>d some cognitive<br />
engagement is needed, i.e. pupils need to notice or work with the l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> use, <strong>in</strong><br />
order for it to be <strong>in</strong>ternalised.<br />
• Exposure to good writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
EAL learners may be particularly reli<strong>an</strong>t on school for encounter<strong>in</strong>g a r<strong>an</strong>ge of genres<br />
<strong>an</strong>d text types. Through listen<strong>in</strong>g to, <strong>as</strong> well <strong>as</strong> read<strong>in</strong>g, multiple examples of whole<br />
texts <strong>in</strong> specific genres, supported by explicit <strong>an</strong>alysis of the text, learners will be
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 87<br />
exposed to how l<strong>an</strong>guage is used <strong>in</strong> different ways for different purposes <strong>an</strong>d<br />
audiences.<br />
Pupils need to meet words, phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d sentences <strong>in</strong> a r<strong>an</strong>ge of texts <strong>an</strong>d contexts <strong>in</strong><br />
order to fully underst<strong>an</strong>d how to use them. Exposure to rich writ<strong>in</strong>g contributes to<br />
vocabulary development <strong>an</strong>d r<strong>an</strong>ge, <strong>as</strong> well <strong>as</strong> to complexity of sentence structure.<br />
The <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ion of the use of direct speech <strong>in</strong> stories showed the difference between<br />
a child writ<strong>in</strong>g how s/he speaks <strong>an</strong>d a child who uses direct speech for literary effect.<br />
Be<strong>in</strong>g able to do the l<strong>at</strong>ter probably requires extensive exposure to good writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong><br />
<strong>in</strong>cludes dialogue.<br />
• Notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Pupils should work with accessible stories th<strong>at</strong> challenge <strong>an</strong>d motiv<strong>at</strong>e them to write<br />
differently. In the texts th<strong>at</strong> pupils hear <strong>an</strong>d read, they should have their <strong>at</strong>tention<br />
drawn to particular fe<strong>at</strong>ures, through explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g, collabor<strong>at</strong>ive discussion <strong>an</strong>d<br />
activities:<br />
- how writers construct texts th<strong>at</strong> are s<strong>at</strong>isfy<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d effective for readers <strong>an</strong>d<br />
purpose<br />
- how writers end their stories.<br />
- how writers express <strong>an</strong>d extend their ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> narr<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> non-fiction<br />
writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- how paragraphs are signposted<br />
- how verbs show the tim<strong>in</strong>g of events<br />
EAL learners should be helped to notice which words go with which i.e. colloc<strong>at</strong>ions.<br />
They should meet <strong>an</strong>d learn words, especially prepositions, <strong>as</strong> part of phr<strong>as</strong>es r<strong>at</strong>her<br />
th<strong>an</strong> just on their own.<br />
• Activities to raise awareness of story end<strong>in</strong>gs might <strong>in</strong>clude:<br />
- listen<strong>in</strong>g to <strong>an</strong>d read<strong>in</strong>g stories with different types of end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
- notic<strong>in</strong>g how writers end their stories <strong>an</strong>d the effect on the reader of a<br />
s<strong>at</strong>isfy<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
- work<strong>in</strong>g out <strong>at</strong> the pl<strong>an</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g stage how a story will end, before start<strong>in</strong>g to<br />
write.<br />
- writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks th<strong>at</strong> give children the end<strong>in</strong>g of a story <strong>an</strong>d require them to<br />
get there.<br />
• The use of t<strong>as</strong>k m<strong>at</strong>erials <strong>an</strong>d pictures<br />
Requirements of writ<strong>in</strong>g t<strong>as</strong>ks should be discussed, e.g. whether the outcome should<br />
follow the prompt closely, or, if it c<strong>an</strong> move away from it, wh<strong>at</strong> the parameters are.<br />
Prompt m<strong>at</strong>erials such <strong>as</strong> pictures should be discussed so th<strong>at</strong> different <strong>in</strong>terpret<strong>at</strong>ions<br />
c<strong>an</strong> be explored <strong>an</strong>d acceptable <strong>in</strong>terpret<strong>at</strong>ions identified. The criteria for writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
outcomes should be shared explicitly.<br />
• Use of first l<strong>an</strong>guage for develop<strong>in</strong>g additional l<strong>an</strong>guage literacy<br />
Where there are adults who share the children’s first l<strong>an</strong>guage(s), notic<strong>in</strong>g c<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>clude<br />
<strong>an</strong>alysis <strong>an</strong>d comparison of grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary use <strong>in</strong> the first l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>English</strong>. Such cross-l<strong>in</strong>guistic notic<strong>in</strong>g c<strong>an</strong> deepen children’s skills <strong>an</strong>d appreci<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
of how l<strong>an</strong>guage resources c<strong>an</strong> be used <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g.
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Develop<strong>in</strong>g str<strong>at</strong>egies<br />
Str<strong>at</strong>egies for writ<strong>in</strong>g are actions th<strong>at</strong> children c<strong>an</strong> adopt for themselves. Children<br />
need to be taught how to use a r<strong>an</strong>ge of str<strong>at</strong>egies <strong>an</strong>d underst<strong>an</strong>d when <strong>an</strong>d why a<br />
particular str<strong>at</strong>egy is useful. This c<strong>an</strong> be done effectively by adult demonstr<strong>at</strong>ion of<br />
how a writer th<strong>in</strong>ks <strong>an</strong>d writes, <strong>an</strong>d through shared text construction. Supported<br />
practice then helps the pupil <strong>in</strong>ternalise the str<strong>at</strong>egy.<br />
The teach<strong>in</strong>g of writ<strong>in</strong>g already tra<strong>in</strong>s pupils <strong>in</strong> the str<strong>at</strong>egy of pl<strong>an</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g the structure<br />
<strong>as</strong> well <strong>as</strong> the content of their texts. Some other str<strong>at</strong>egies th<strong>at</strong> might be useful<br />
<strong>in</strong>clude:<br />
• th<strong>in</strong>k<strong>in</strong>g yourself <strong>in</strong>to the role <strong>an</strong>d voice of the writer <strong>as</strong> you pl<strong>an</strong>, develop <strong>an</strong>d<br />
ref<strong>in</strong>e your writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• gener<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g ide<strong>as</strong> for writ<strong>in</strong>g through<br />
- shar<strong>in</strong>g first thoughts e.g. ways of describ<strong>in</strong>g a story character or sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- us<strong>in</strong>g visuals, prompt pictures, frames <strong>an</strong>d graphic org<strong>an</strong>isers<br />
- f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g key words <strong>in</strong> t<strong>as</strong>k <strong>in</strong>structions <strong>an</strong>d prompts, e.g. by highlight<strong>in</strong>g<br />
- discuss<strong>in</strong>g ide<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> first l<strong>an</strong>guage with peers<br />
• pl<strong>an</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g the whole text before start<strong>in</strong>g to write <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g the open<strong>in</strong>g, plot <strong>an</strong>d<br />
story end<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Practice<br />
M<strong>an</strong>y <strong>as</strong>pects of writ<strong>in</strong>g require repe<strong>at</strong>ed practice over long periods to become<br />
autom<strong>at</strong>ic <strong>an</strong>d skilful. Different types of practice will be appropri<strong>at</strong>e <strong>at</strong> different<br />
stages <strong>an</strong>d may <strong>in</strong>clude:<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> f<strong>as</strong>t <strong>an</strong>d <strong>at</strong> length<br />
Extended writ<strong>in</strong>g is a specific skill, dist<strong>in</strong>ct from writ<strong>in</strong>g sentences <strong>an</strong>d short<br />
paragraphs. As well <strong>as</strong> requir<strong>in</strong>g overall org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion, extended writ<strong>in</strong>g requires<br />
putt<strong>in</strong>g words on to paper or screen <strong>at</strong> speed. Practice <strong>in</strong> do<strong>in</strong>g this is needed. Pupils<br />
should also be helped to write accur<strong>at</strong>ely while writ<strong>in</strong>g f<strong>as</strong>t, e.g. by careful but quick<br />
copy<strong>in</strong>g of previously drafted work. All such t<strong>as</strong>ks should of course have me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>an</strong>d purpose for the child.<br />
• Spott<strong>in</strong>g errors<br />
Pupils should be taught how to f<strong>in</strong>d their own mistakes <strong>in</strong> drafted work <strong>an</strong>d practise<br />
this. Focussed check<strong>in</strong>g on selected <strong>as</strong>pects of l<strong>an</strong>guage use c<strong>an</strong> make this<br />
m<strong>an</strong>ageable <strong>an</strong>d more effective e.g. by f<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g pronouns <strong>an</strong>d check<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> they<br />
correctly refer to the appropri<strong>at</strong>e noun.<br />
• Rhetorical adaptability<br />
Both EMT <strong>an</strong>d EAL learners, particularly those achiev<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> level 3, need practice <strong>in</strong><br />
us<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d adapt<strong>in</strong>g sentence grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary for different genres.<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
Some <strong>as</strong>pects of l<strong>an</strong>guage lend themselves to expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ions by the teacher, to<br />
comparison of error <strong>an</strong>d correct form, to explicit labell<strong>in</strong>g with metal<strong>an</strong>guage. Other
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>Additional</strong> L<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>at</strong> <strong>Key</strong> <strong>Stage</strong> 2 89<br />
<strong>as</strong>pects of l<strong>an</strong>guage, such <strong>as</strong> the use of articles, are more complic<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>an</strong>d<br />
expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ions will only cover part of the full gramm<strong>at</strong>ical system.<br />
• Explicit teach<strong>in</strong>g of them<strong>at</strong>ic sets of phr<strong>as</strong>es, e.g. to use with direct speech or time<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es, might help with correct<strong>in</strong>g errors <strong>an</strong>d with learn<strong>in</strong>g new vocabulary.<br />
• Explicit <strong>at</strong>tention to how the time l<strong>in</strong>e of a story is built through time phr<strong>as</strong>es,<br />
adverbial clauses <strong>an</strong>d verb tenses.<br />
• Attention to verb forms is particularly import<strong>an</strong>t for pupils achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3.<br />
• Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion is part of sentence <strong>an</strong>d clause grammar, <strong>an</strong>d needs explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
to show pupils wh<strong>at</strong> full stops <strong>an</strong>d comm<strong>as</strong> do <strong>in</strong> written text <strong>an</strong>d where they need<br />
them <strong>in</strong> their own writ<strong>in</strong>g. Comm<strong>as</strong> should be taught <strong>as</strong> part of learn<strong>in</strong>g about<br />
embedded clauses with<strong>in</strong> complex sentences.<br />
Feedback b<strong>as</strong>ed on <strong>as</strong>sessment for learn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Some l<strong>an</strong>guage fe<strong>at</strong>ures are more challeng<strong>in</strong>g to teach explicitly to primary age<br />
children. In these c<strong>as</strong>es, modell<strong>in</strong>g c<strong>an</strong> be <strong>an</strong> effective str<strong>at</strong>egy to provide <strong>an</strong><br />
opportunity for EAL learners to come to recognise which forms are correct <strong>an</strong>d which<br />
are not. Feedback is given on children’s errors, supported by adult or peer modell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
of correct use.<br />
There are certa<strong>in</strong> l<strong>an</strong>guage fe<strong>at</strong>ures th<strong>at</strong> persistently cause problems for EAL writers,<br />
such <strong>as</strong> prepositions, <strong>an</strong>d these might benefit from corrective feedback over time.<br />
Assessment for learn<strong>in</strong>g identifies <strong>as</strong>pects which c<strong>an</strong> be taught <strong>as</strong> a whole cl<strong>as</strong>s, small<br />
group or <strong>in</strong>dividual level through shared, supported, guided writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d practised<br />
dur<strong>in</strong>g collabor<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>dividual writ<strong>in</strong>g across the curriculum.<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> is a good place to correct errors because they are visible <strong>an</strong>d because the<br />
draft<strong>in</strong>g process makes this a n<strong>at</strong>ural procedure. Modell<strong>in</strong>g oral l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>an</strong>d<br />
support<strong>in</strong>g oral rehearsal also provide opportunities for feedback on both form <strong>an</strong>d<br />
style.<br />
• Prepositional errors <strong>an</strong>d errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es should be corrected, <strong>in</strong> speech<br />
<strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g, <strong>in</strong> sensitive but consistent ways throughout all key stages.<br />
• Errors <strong>in</strong> agreement between Subject <strong>an</strong>d Verb, or noun <strong>an</strong>d pronoun, th<strong>at</strong> occur<br />
<strong>in</strong> children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g should be corrected, by po<strong>in</strong>t<strong>in</strong>g out the two words th<strong>at</strong> need<br />
to be connected through the agreement.<br />
• Errors with articles should be corrected so th<strong>at</strong> pupils gradually build up <strong>an</strong><br />
underst<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of how these work <strong>in</strong> <strong>English</strong>.
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9.2 Evalu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g Story <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>at</strong> KS2<br />
The grids th<strong>at</strong> follow are designed for use by teachers who w<strong>an</strong>t to explore the writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
of their pupils by look<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> the stories they produce. The process draws on the<br />
research by identify<strong>in</strong>g key <strong>as</strong>pects of written stories th<strong>at</strong> will be develop<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> this<br />
stage; observ<strong>in</strong>g the child actually writ<strong>in</strong>g will yield further <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion. The sample<br />
scripts <strong>in</strong> Appendix 3 are evalu<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> this way <strong>an</strong>d c<strong>an</strong> be used <strong>as</strong> examples of how to<br />
carry out the evalu<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
The first grid is to evalu<strong>at</strong>e the composition (the text <strong>as</strong> a whole), <strong>an</strong>d the second to<br />
evalu<strong>at</strong>e use of words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es to cre<strong>at</strong>e the story (with<strong>in</strong> the text). The third grid<br />
c<strong>an</strong> be used to summarise wh<strong>at</strong> is found out. A bl<strong>an</strong>k chart for <strong>an</strong>alys<strong>in</strong>g clause <strong>an</strong>d<br />
sentence grammar is also <strong>in</strong>cluded.<br />
Evalu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g Story <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>: 1 The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Read the whole story.<br />
Identify the components of the narr<strong>at</strong>ive: sett<strong>in</strong>g, characters, plot - problem <strong>an</strong>d resolution, end<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
How much does the writer elabor<strong>at</strong>e the components of the story?<br />
• sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• characters<br />
• problem<br />
• resolution<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Direct speech<br />
Is there <strong>an</strong>y part of the story where not enough (or too much) development is done for the<br />
reader?<br />
Which of these techniques does the writer use to develop the components?<br />
• description<br />
• direct speech<br />
• figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage - metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
How effectively are they used?<br />
Does the writ<strong>in</strong>g use the pictures or other prompts accur<strong>at</strong>ely?<br />
Does the end<strong>in</strong>g seem complete to the reader?<br />
Is the end<strong>in</strong>g particularly <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g or orig<strong>in</strong>al?<br />
Are paragraphs used accur<strong>at</strong>ely?<br />
• for direct speech<br />
• to show stages <strong>in</strong> the plot<br />
How much direct speech is used <strong>in</strong> the story?<br />
How well does the direct speech contribute to the quality of the story?<br />
How accur<strong>at</strong>e is the punctu<strong>at</strong>ion of the direct speech?<br />
Wh<strong>at</strong> variety is there <strong>in</strong> the vocabulary <strong>in</strong>troduc<strong>in</strong>g the direct speech? - e.g. yelled, screamed,<br />
shouted.
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Evalu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g Story <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>: 2 With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Take a section of the story to exam<strong>in</strong>e <strong>in</strong> detail - about 100 words long, not count<strong>in</strong>g the direct speech.<br />
Complete a column <strong>an</strong>alysis chart to show the grammar of the story.<br />
In the whole story, underl<strong>in</strong>e:<br />
• metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
• errors with prepositions or phr<strong>as</strong>es th<strong>at</strong> conta<strong>in</strong> errors<br />
• errors <strong>in</strong> the use of verbs, articles, <strong>an</strong>d agreements.<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Does the writer seem to know how to use<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion?<br />
Does the writer use variety <strong>in</strong><br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion to make the writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g?<br />
Use of the Subject/ Object /<br />
Complement slots <strong>in</strong> clauses<br />
Does the writer use a r<strong>an</strong>ge of word <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e lengths?<br />
Are Subjects, <strong>in</strong> particular, sometimes<br />
longer phr<strong>as</strong>es?<br />
How m<strong>an</strong>y sentences conta<strong>in</strong> subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e<br />
clauses?<br />
Wh<strong>at</strong> types of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses are used?<br />
Which b<strong>as</strong>ic / adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors are used?<br />
Which of these ways of us<strong>in</strong>g the Subject / Object /<br />
Complement slots <strong>in</strong> clauses are found?<br />
• pronouns<br />
• nouns<br />
• longer phr<strong>as</strong>es with adjectives <strong>an</strong>d adverbs<br />
• clauses (rel<strong>at</strong>ive or nom<strong>in</strong>al)<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Use of the Adverbial slot <strong>in</strong> clauses<br />
Does the writer use the Adverbial slot to<br />
add <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion on time, m<strong>an</strong>ner, place<br />
etc?<br />
Are phr<strong>as</strong>es sometimes long <strong>an</strong>d detailed?<br />
Use of the Verb slot <strong>in</strong> clauses<br />
Does the writer use different verb tenses<br />
to show time?<br />
Does the writer use modal verbs to show<br />
probability <strong>an</strong>d possibility?<br />
Which of these ways of us<strong>in</strong>g the Adverbial slots <strong>in</strong><br />
clauses are found?<br />
• bare prepositional phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
• longer phr<strong>as</strong>es with adjectives <strong>an</strong>d adverbs<br />
• clauses<br />
List the different verb tenses used <strong>in</strong> the story.<br />
List the modal verbs used <strong>in</strong> verb phr<strong>as</strong>es.<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Are words used together <strong>in</strong> phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong><br />
ways th<strong>at</strong> sound <strong>in</strong>accur<strong>at</strong>e?<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
How does the writer use metaphors <strong>an</strong>d<br />
similes?<br />
Verb errors<br />
List <strong>an</strong>d look for p<strong>at</strong>terns <strong>in</strong> errors <strong>in</strong> phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Look for phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> direct speech used without<br />
errors<br />
How m<strong>an</strong>y metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes does the writer<br />
use <strong>an</strong>d where?<br />
Wh<strong>at</strong> k<strong>in</strong>ds are used?<br />
Are they used appropri<strong>at</strong>ely?<br />
List <strong>an</strong>d look for p<strong>at</strong>terns <strong>in</strong> errors <strong>in</strong><br />
• end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• choice of tense<br />
: Agreement errors List <strong>an</strong>d look for p<strong>at</strong>terns <strong>in</strong> errors <strong>in</strong><br />
• Subject-Verb agreement<br />
• Noun-pronoun agreement
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Articles<br />
Prepositions<br />
List <strong>an</strong>d look for p<strong>at</strong>terns <strong>in</strong><br />
• miss<strong>in</strong>g articles<br />
• <strong>in</strong>correct articles<br />
List <strong>an</strong>d look for p<strong>at</strong>terns <strong>in</strong><br />
• miss<strong>in</strong>g prepositions<br />
• <strong>in</strong>correct prepositions<br />
Evalu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g story writ<strong>in</strong>g: Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Wh<strong>at</strong> the child c<strong>an</strong> do:<br />
Where the child c<strong>an</strong> be helped to improve:<br />
How the child c<strong>an</strong> be helped to improve:<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Wh<strong>at</strong> the child c<strong>an</strong> do:<br />
Where the child c<strong>an</strong> be helped to improve:<br />
How the child c<strong>an</strong> be helped to improve:
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Evalu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong>: Grammar <strong>an</strong>alysis<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial slot Subject noun phr<strong>as</strong>e Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e Object noun<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e/complement<br />
Adverbial slot<br />
Clause<br />
Type
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9.3 Conclusions<br />
<strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> requires pupils to draw on their l<strong>an</strong>guage resources <strong>in</strong> order to cre<strong>at</strong>e a whole<br />
text which is someth<strong>in</strong>g more th<strong>an</strong> a str<strong>in</strong>g of words <strong>an</strong>d sentences <strong>an</strong>d which sits<br />
recognisably with<strong>in</strong> a particular genre e.g. story or advertisement. Success <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />
comes from <strong>an</strong> underst<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of the ‘shape’ of these different text types, while <strong>at</strong> the<br />
same time be<strong>in</strong>g able to select, adapt <strong>an</strong>d comb<strong>in</strong>e words <strong>an</strong>d phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong>to th<strong>at</strong> textual<br />
shape.<br />
This project h<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ed the writ<strong>in</strong>g of pupils who use <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage. All the pupils <strong>in</strong>volved <strong>in</strong> the project had been <strong>in</strong> the UK for <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t five<br />
years <strong>an</strong>d therefore c<strong>an</strong> be expected to have received <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t five years of school<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>English</strong>. Exam<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of their stories <strong>an</strong>d radio advertisements h<strong>as</strong> shown th<strong>at</strong><br />
learn<strong>in</strong>g to use <strong>English</strong> <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional l<strong>an</strong>guage is a cont<strong>in</strong>u<strong>in</strong>g process for these<br />
children. In this process, support from teachers, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g direct teach<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d less<br />
explicit forms of <strong>in</strong>tervention, c<strong>an</strong> make a real difference to achievement.<br />
We hope th<strong>at</strong> the detailed explor<strong>at</strong>ion of children’s written texts described <strong>in</strong> this<br />
report will contribute to a deeper underst<strong>an</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g of how children use <strong>English</strong> when<br />
they write, <strong>an</strong>d to on-go<strong>in</strong>g efforts to support them <strong>in</strong> becom<strong>in</strong>g more effective<br />
writers.
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Develop<strong>in</strong>g Early <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> DfES 0056/2001<br />
Grammar for <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> DfES 0107/2000
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Appendix 1 Details of schools <strong>an</strong>d pupils’ first<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guages<br />
% of<br />
pupils<br />
known<br />
to be<br />
eligible<br />
for free<br />
school<br />
meals<br />
FSM<br />
1 fsm%
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First L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Number of pupils<br />
Alb<strong>an</strong>i<strong>an</strong> 1<br />
Arabic 3<br />
Bengali 18<br />
Ch<strong>in</strong>ese 1<br />
French Creole 1<br />
French Mauriti<strong>an</strong> 1<br />
Greek 2<br />
Gujer<strong>at</strong>i 13<br />
H<strong>in</strong>di 1<br />
Itali<strong>an</strong> 1<br />
Kuchi 1<br />
Kurdish 1<br />
L<strong>in</strong>gala 1<br />
Portuguese 1<br />
Punjabi 36<br />
Pushto 1<br />
S<strong>in</strong>ghalese 1<br />
Somali 3<br />
Sp<strong>an</strong>ish 1<br />
Tagalog 1<br />
Turkish 1<br />
Twi 1<br />
Urdu 22<br />
Yemeni 1<br />
Yoruba 3<br />
unknown 10<br />
Table 15 First l<strong>an</strong>guages of EAL learners (N = 138)
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ATTAINMENT TARGETS: En3 <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong><br />
Level 3<br />
Pupils' writ<strong>in</strong>g is often org<strong>an</strong>ised, imag<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d clear. The ma<strong>in</strong> fe<strong>at</strong>ures<br />
of different forms of writ<strong>in</strong>g are used appropri<strong>at</strong>ely, beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g to be adapted<br />
to different readers. Sequences of sentences extend ide<strong>as</strong> logically <strong>an</strong>d<br />
words are chosen for variety <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>terest. The b<strong>as</strong>ic gramm<strong>at</strong>ical structure<br />
of sentences is usually correct. Spell<strong>in</strong>g is usually accur<strong>at</strong>e, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> of<br />
common, polysyllabic words. Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion to mark sentences full stops,<br />
capital letters <strong>an</strong>d question marks is used accur<strong>at</strong>ely. H<strong>an</strong>dwrit<strong>in</strong>g is jo<strong>in</strong>ed<br />
<strong>an</strong>d legible.<br />
Level 4<br />
Pupils' writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> a r<strong>an</strong>ge of forms is lively <strong>an</strong>d thoughtful. Ide<strong>as</strong> are often<br />
susta<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>an</strong>d developed <strong>in</strong> <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g ways <strong>an</strong>d org<strong>an</strong>ised appropri<strong>at</strong>ely for<br />
the purpose of the reader. Vocabulary choices are often adventurous <strong>an</strong>d<br />
words are used for effect. Pupils are beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g to use gramm<strong>at</strong>ically<br />
complex sentences, extend<strong>in</strong>g me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g. Spell<strong>in</strong>g, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> of<br />
polysyllabic words th<strong>at</strong> conform to regular p<strong>at</strong>terns, is generally accur<strong>at</strong>e.<br />
Full stops, capital letters <strong>an</strong>d question marks are used correctly, <strong>an</strong>d pupils<br />
are beg<strong>in</strong>n<strong>in</strong>g to use punctu<strong>at</strong>ion with<strong>in</strong> the sentence. H<strong>an</strong>dwrit<strong>in</strong>g style is<br />
fluent, jo<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>an</strong>d legible.<br />
Level 5<br />
Pupils' writ<strong>in</strong>g is varied <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g, convey<strong>in</strong>g me<strong>an</strong><strong>in</strong>g clearly <strong>in</strong> a<br />
r<strong>an</strong>ge of forms for different readers, us<strong>in</strong>g a more formal style where<br />
appropri<strong>at</strong>e. Vocabulary choices are imag<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>d words are used<br />
precisely. Simple <strong>an</strong>d complex sentences are org<strong>an</strong>ised <strong>in</strong>to paragraphs.<br />
Words with complex regular p<strong>at</strong>terns are usually spelt correctly. A r<strong>an</strong>ge of<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong>ion, <strong>in</strong>clud<strong>in</strong>g comm<strong>as</strong>, apostrophes <strong>an</strong>d <strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong>, is<br />
usually used accur<strong>at</strong>ely. H<strong>an</strong>dwrit<strong>in</strong>g is jo<strong>in</strong>ed, clear <strong>an</strong>d fluent <strong>an</strong>d, where<br />
appropri<strong>at</strong>e, is adapted to a r<strong>an</strong>ge of t<strong>as</strong>ks.
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Appendix 3 Sample scripts<br />
This appendix <strong>in</strong>cludes, for one pupil from each of the six groups:<br />
• L<strong>an</strong>guage background; overall grade given <strong>in</strong> N<strong>at</strong>ional Curriculum Test; gender.<br />
• Story text.<br />
• Column <strong>an</strong>alysis of first 100 words of story.<br />
• Radio advertisement text.<br />
• Commentary <strong>an</strong>d po<strong>in</strong>ts for development.<br />
The children’s texts are reproduced with the orig<strong>in</strong>al punctu<strong>at</strong>ion, spell<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d<br />
spac<strong>in</strong>g.
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Script 1 Story EAL - 3 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Bengali<br />
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John w<strong>as</strong> com<strong>in</strong>g back from School with his Mother when he saw ever body<br />
queue up for this new game called Tekken 4 he shouted to his mother “C<strong>an</strong> I<br />
ple<strong>as</strong>e have this game mom I never have <strong>an</strong>y games Just this one mom” his<br />
mother said o.k he r<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>d queued up there were lots of people <strong>at</strong> the front of<br />
him the Game store never opened however when it did people started runn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
<strong>an</strong>d push<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> when everbody went <strong>in</strong> all the new games were gone set for one<br />
John r<strong>an</strong> towards the game so did N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha his cl<strong>as</strong>s girl. N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha w<strong>as</strong> dark<br />
sc<strong>in</strong>d <strong>an</strong>d had gloom<strong>in</strong>g eyes like ovale pebbles she had dark bush hair th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong><br />
<strong>in</strong> a pony tale.<br />
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John didn’t give up the the game he holded it tieted so did N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha ever body<br />
had payed for there game also had gone they both were still fright<strong>in</strong>g over the<br />
game. John w<strong>as</strong> tell<strong>in</strong>g her to let go but she didn’t she screamed “Why don’t<br />
you”. “Why should I” “I got it first”, yelled John. John mother Mrs Hill w<strong>as</strong> very<br />
amazed She said to John let go <strong>an</strong>d give it to N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha. “But mom I got it first<br />
she didn’t why should I give it to N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha why dosen’t she give it to me”,<br />
screamed John. They both were pull<strong>in</strong>g the game its like they were hav<strong>in</strong>g a<br />
game of tug of war. “Mr Brick the Shop M<strong>an</strong>eger said to John just give it to<br />
N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha.” John shouted “Why should I I got it first she did.” Mr Brick the<br />
shop m<strong>an</strong>iger said to them “Its, nearly clos<strong>in</strong>g time hows go<strong>in</strong>g to have it”.<br />
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N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha the risnablue one gave the game to John N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha walked out of the<br />
shop. John put the gave on the c<strong>an</strong>ter his Mother payed for it. While his<br />
mother w<strong>as</strong> pay<strong>in</strong>g for it Mr Brick said to John N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha is more risnablue, th<strong>an</strong><br />
you. F<strong>in</strong>ally Mrs Hill <strong>an</strong>d John went out of the shop his mother said to “Him I am<br />
not go<strong>in</strong>g to buy you a game <strong>an</strong>y more John said “but mom”. I”ll tell your dad<br />
wh<strong>at</strong> you have just done”
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Script 1 Column <strong>an</strong>alysis EAL - 3 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Bengali<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial slot Subject noun phr<strong>as</strong>e Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e Object noun<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e/complement<br />
Adverbial slot Clause<br />
Type<br />
John w<strong>as</strong> com<strong>in</strong>g back<br />
Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
from school<br />
when he saw everybody Adv<br />
queue up for this new game Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
called Tekken 4 Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
he shouted to his mother Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“C<strong>an</strong> I ple<strong>as</strong>e have this game mom I never have <strong>an</strong>y games Just this one mom”<br />
DS<br />
his mother said o.k Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
he r<strong>an</strong> Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d queued up Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
there were lots of people <strong>at</strong> the front of him Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
the Game store (never) opened Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
however<br />
when it did Adv<br />
people started runn<strong>in</strong>g Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d push<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong><br />
when everybody went <strong>in</strong> Adv<br />
all the new games were gone set (except) for one Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
John r<strong>an</strong> towards the game Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
so did<br />
N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha his cl<strong>as</strong>s girl. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha w<strong>as</strong> dark sk<strong>in</strong>ned<br />
<strong>an</strong>d had gloom<strong>in</strong>g eyes like<br />
oval pebbles<br />
<strong>an</strong>d she had dark Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
Ma<strong>in</strong>
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Script 1 Radio advertisement EAL - 3 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Bengali<br />
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Script 1 Commentary EAL - 3 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Bengali<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
level 3<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories have similar<br />
(low) amounts of development of<br />
each component, except Resolution<br />
where EAL do more.<br />
EMT stories less likely to follow the<br />
given pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
EAL stories had m<strong>an</strong>y <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d more th<strong>an</strong> EMT.<br />
Very few <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs, similar<br />
to EMT.<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT have problems<br />
with lack of paragraphs<br />
Script 1: Story<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g: Very little apart from “com<strong>in</strong>g back from<br />
school” <strong>in</strong> first l<strong>in</strong>e<br />
Characters: John, his mother / Mrs Hill, N<strong>at</strong><strong>as</strong>ha,<br />
dad <strong>at</strong> end<br />
Direct speech is ma<strong>in</strong> str<strong>at</strong>egy to Introduce<br />
characters (l<strong>in</strong>es 2,3) <strong>an</strong>d develop <strong>in</strong> vivid<br />
argument <strong>in</strong> middle paragraph.<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>es 8 <strong>an</strong>d 17<br />
Problem: l<strong>in</strong>es 10-18, through direct speech<br />
Resolution: l<strong>in</strong>e 22, very short<br />
Then more direct speech to close.<br />
Follows the pictures.<br />
Complete<br />
Not <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> end<strong>in</strong>g or particularly<br />
relev<strong>an</strong>t to the plot<br />
Uses 3 paragraphs. The direct speech needs<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y more paragraphs<br />
Length<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT write shorter<br />
stories, but long enough.<br />
Direct speech EAL use gre<strong>at</strong>er % of DS (§)<br />
Similar problems <strong>in</strong> punctu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g<br />
direct speech.<br />
Good length.<br />
A large proportion of the story is direct speech.<br />
The punctu<strong>at</strong>ion is correct <strong>in</strong> some places but<br />
not consistent.<br />
There is good variety <strong>in</strong> the vocabulary<br />
<strong>in</strong>troduc<strong>in</strong>g the direct speech - yelled, screamed,<br />
shouted<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>i<br />
on<br />
Subjects<br />
level 3<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
pronouns <strong>as</strong> Subjects<br />
(§)<br />
Script 1: Story<br />
3 Adverbial clauses <strong>an</strong>d 13 Ma<strong>in</strong> clauses, so <strong>in</strong>dex<br />
is low.<br />
No other types of clauses.<br />
100 word block uses b<strong>as</strong>ic subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or “when”<br />
only 3 times<br />
“while” (l<strong>in</strong>e 23)<br />
7 Subjects are pronouns. There are three longer<br />
Subject Noun phr<strong>as</strong>es “the Game store” <strong>an</strong>d “all<br />
the new games”<br />
One adjective <strong>in</strong> front of nouns - new<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Objt/<br />
Cmp<br />
Adv<br />
bial<br />
Vrb<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Object / Complement<br />
slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL use fewer words <strong>in</strong><br />
the Adverbial slot (**)<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Verb slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Only 7 phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> this slot. Longest one is the<br />
simile.<br />
Bare prepositional phr<strong>as</strong>es, only adjective is “new”<br />
Some variety <strong>in</strong> verb tenses <strong>an</strong>d forms<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Errors: “<strong>at</strong> the front of him” - <strong>in</strong> front of him (l<strong>in</strong>e 4)<br />
“his cl<strong>as</strong>s girl” is a phr<strong>as</strong>e th<strong>at</strong> is not quite right -<br />
“cl<strong>as</strong>s m<strong>at</strong>e” would work. (l<strong>in</strong>e 6)<br />
“buy you a game <strong>an</strong>y more” - <strong>an</strong>y more games<br />
(l<strong>in</strong>e 26)<br />
Direct speech uses m<strong>an</strong>y formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
without errors, e.g. “I never have <strong>an</strong>y games” or<br />
“I’ll tell your dad..”<br />
Word r<strong>an</strong>ge error - Mrs Hill w<strong>as</strong> very amazed (very<br />
doesn’t fit with amazed) (l<strong>in</strong>e 15)
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Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
gloom<strong>in</strong>g eyes like oval pebbles - is poetic despite<br />
(or because of) error with “gloom<strong>in</strong>g”. Pebbles<br />
would not usually carry positive connot<strong>at</strong>ions when<br />
used to describe eyes.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
verb<br />
errors<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
“queue” - queu<strong>in</strong>g (l<strong>in</strong>e 2)<br />
“never opened” - did not open - took a long time to<br />
open (l<strong>in</strong>e 5)<br />
:<br />
Agreements<br />
Articles<br />
Prepns<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL more omitted<br />
prepositions th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
(*)<br />
No errors <strong>in</strong> story<br />
No errors <strong>in</strong> story<br />
Technical<br />
accuracy:<br />
Punct<br />
u<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Very problem<strong>at</strong>ic. Miss<strong>in</strong>g full stops even <strong>in</strong> simple<br />
sentences, while direct speech h<strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y marks,<br />
some <strong>in</strong> the right places.<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Us<strong>in</strong>g sound to help with more difficult words<br />
risnablue (l<strong>in</strong>e 22)<br />
level 3<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL learners seem to h<strong>an</strong>dle the genre<br />
less confidently th<strong>an</strong> EMT writers,<br />
particularly <strong>at</strong> level 3.<br />
Open<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d slog<strong>an</strong>s less varied <strong>an</strong>d<br />
c<strong>at</strong>chy.<br />
Omission of key <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion, repe<strong>at</strong>ed<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT often <strong>in</strong>clude too much<br />
<strong>in</strong>fo on price <strong>an</strong>d purch<strong>as</strong>e<br />
Script 1: Radio advertisement<br />
Form<strong>at</strong>: Open<strong>in</strong>g is a full sentence r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> a c<strong>at</strong>chy phr<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
Org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion is appropri<strong>at</strong>e.<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is useful but not extensive.<br />
Repe<strong>at</strong>ed phone number <strong>an</strong>d contact details.<br />
Voice: the writer beg<strong>in</strong>s address<strong>in</strong>g the listener <strong>in</strong>directly <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>es 1 <strong>an</strong>d 2<br />
but then shifts to direct address <strong>as</strong> “you” from l<strong>in</strong>e 4 on.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es used correctly - l<strong>in</strong>e 14 “calls cost no more th<strong>an</strong> 30p<br />
or text us on ..”<br />
colloc<strong>at</strong>ional errors - gett<strong>in</strong>g (tak<strong>in</strong>g / hold<strong>in</strong>g) your baby’s h<strong>an</strong>d<br />
to give (take) there children to school<br />
Subject-Verb agreement error - it saves (l<strong>in</strong>e 11)<br />
Verb error: “s<strong>in</strong>g” s<strong>in</strong>g<strong>in</strong>g (l<strong>in</strong>e 6)<br />
Preposition/word use error: “sensitive with” (l<strong>in</strong>e 9)<br />
Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development:<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Story end<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>an</strong> effect for the reader.<br />
• Use of description to develop the sett<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d characters.<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion of sentences with full stops.<br />
Good use of direct speech to cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>at</strong>mosphere <strong>an</strong>d develop characters could be made even more effective<br />
through punctu<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d paragraph<strong>in</strong>g.
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Script 2 Story EAL - 4 - Boy First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Punjabi<br />
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It w<strong>as</strong> a bright sunny morn<strong>in</strong>g when Paul <strong>an</strong>d his mom, went to the market. Paul had light<br />
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blonde hair, light blue<br />
green eyes, th<strong>at</strong> looked like a c<strong>at</strong>s eyes. His ears were small<br />
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6<br />
<strong>as</strong> a acorn, h<strong>an</strong>d th<strong>at</strong> were big <strong>as</strong> a Gorilla’s h<strong>an</strong>ds. They were walk<strong>in</strong>g p<strong>as</strong>t a shop when<br />
Paul saw a new game called “c<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong> buy it for five pounds, when its gone it’s<br />
gone!!” Paul said to his mom “Mom, Mom c<strong>an</strong> I buy th<strong>at</strong> new game ple<strong>as</strong>e?” Then his mom<br />
whispered “O.K but if we have to stay longer th<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong> hour I’m go<strong>in</strong>g home.<br />
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Paul waited with his mom they waited <strong>an</strong>d waited, then Paul shouted “WHEN IS THE<br />
SHOP OPENING!!!” After th<strong>at</strong> they waited ten more m<strong>in</strong>tues then the door opened.<br />
Everyone rushed <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>d grabbed the game c<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong> <strong>an</strong>d l<strong>in</strong>ed up to pay for it.<br />
There w<strong>as</strong> one C<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong> left, then Paul r<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>d from the other side a girl with<br />
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black hair, brown eyes th<strong>at</strong> looked like<br />
dogs eyes, she w<strong>as</strong> runn<strong>in</strong>g to. They both<br />
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grabbed it <strong>an</strong>d shouted “Th<strong>at</strong>s m<strong>in</strong>e. No it isn’t”. They both argued for ten m<strong>in</strong>tues.<br />
Straight away a m<strong>an</strong> r<strong>an</strong> to them to say wh<strong>at</strong> is the m<strong>at</strong>ter then Paul shouted “I<br />
grabbed the game first” The m<strong>an</strong> whispered “who’s got a p.c.” Straight a way, even<br />
f<strong>as</strong>ter th<strong>an</strong> a fl<strong>as</strong>h Sharon whispered “Me I’ve got a p.c. <strong>at</strong> home.”<br />
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The tall ugly m<strong>an</strong> got a cd with the name C<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong>. They both paid five pounds.<br />
First they went to Paul’s house. They played the game, then <strong>in</strong> the afternoon Paul went<br />
over to Sharon’s house, he <strong>at</strong>e supper there <strong>an</strong>d played on the p.c. They became best<br />
friends. F<strong>in</strong>ally Paul <strong>an</strong>d Sharon were best friends, when they went some they always<br />
told each other, if you w<strong>an</strong>t to come or not.
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Script 2 Column <strong>an</strong>alysis EAL - 4 - Boy First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Punjabi<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial slot Subject noun phr<strong>as</strong>e Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e Object noun<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e/complement<br />
Adverbial slot Clause<br />
Type<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> a bright sunny morn<strong>in</strong>g Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
when Paul <strong>an</strong>d his mom went to the market. Adv<br />
Paul had light blonde hair<br />
Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
light blue green eyes<br />
th<strong>at</strong> looked like a c<strong>at</strong>s eyes Rel Obj<br />
His ears were small <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> acorn Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
* * h<strong>an</strong>d *Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
th<strong>at</strong> were big <strong>as</strong> a Gorilla’s h<strong>an</strong>ds Rel<br />
They were walk<strong>in</strong>g p<strong>as</strong>t a shop Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
when they saw a new game Adv<br />
called Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
“c<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong> buy it for five pounds, when its gone it’s gone!!”<br />
DS<br />
Paul said to his mom Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“Mom, Mom c<strong>an</strong> I buy th<strong>at</strong> new game ple<strong>as</strong>e?”<br />
DS<br />
Then his mom whispered Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“O.K but if we have to stay longer th<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong> hour I’m go<strong>in</strong>g home.<br />
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Paul waited with his mom Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
they waited Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d waited Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
then Paul shouted Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“WHEN IS THE SHOP OPENING!!!”<br />
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After th<strong>at</strong> they waited ten more m<strong>in</strong>utes Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
then the door opened Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
Everyone rushed <strong>in</strong> Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d grabbed the game C<strong>at</strong>ch the R<strong>at</strong> Ma<strong>in</strong>
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Script 2 Radio advertisement EAL - 4 - Boy First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Punjabi<br />
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joy pads one multi player. If you buy the package for fifty pound,<br />
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Script 2 Commentary EAL - 4 - Boy First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Punjabi<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
level 4<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL stories have slightly less<br />
development of each component.<br />
No clear difference <strong>in</strong> preferred<br />
str<strong>at</strong>egies.<br />
Script 2: Story<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g: M<strong>in</strong>imal description <strong>in</strong> open<strong>in</strong>g phr<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
Characters: Description <strong>in</strong> first paragraph.<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>es 2-3, <strong>an</strong>d aga<strong>in</strong> <strong>in</strong><br />
l<strong>in</strong>e 12. The m<strong>an</strong> (from l<strong>in</strong>e 14) is r<strong>at</strong>her<br />
mysterious - the reader needs more <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
Problem: l<strong>in</strong>es 12-13<br />
Resolution: l<strong>in</strong>e 14 on. R<strong>at</strong>her confus<strong>in</strong>g. It<br />
seems th<strong>at</strong> “they both paid..” (l<strong>in</strong>e 18) is the<br />
resolution.<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
EAL stories less likely to follow the<br />
given pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
Slightly more EMT stories have<br />
<strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
More EMT stories have <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
Good use of time phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors to<br />
move story along.<br />
Follows the pictures.<br />
Complete<br />
End<strong>in</strong>g moves from l<strong>at</strong>er the same day to longer<br />
term future.<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g Similar use of paragraph<strong>in</strong>g. Uses 3 paragraphs. The direct speech needs<br />
m<strong>an</strong>y more paragraphs<br />
Length Similar lengths Adequ<strong>at</strong>e length.<br />
Direct speech<br />
Good mixture of direct speech <strong>an</strong>d narr<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
The punctu<strong>at</strong>ion is correct <strong>in</strong> some places but<br />
not consistent.<br />
There is variety <strong>in</strong> the vocabulary <strong>in</strong>troduc<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
direct speech - shouted, whispered - but not<br />
always clear wh<strong>at</strong> this adds to plot.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Subjt<br />
Objt/<br />
Cmp<br />
Adv<br />
bial<br />
Vrb<br />
Formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
level 4<br />
EMT<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
s<strong>in</strong>gle word Subjects<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (*)<br />
EAL use more <strong>an</strong>d<br />
longer Objects /<br />
Complements (*)<br />
<strong>an</strong>d more th<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>y other<br />
group.<br />
EAL use fewer words <strong>in</strong><br />
Adverbial slot (*)<br />
EAL use more, shorter,<br />
Verb Phr<strong>as</strong>es (*)<br />
EAL conta<strong>in</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y more<br />
errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es (***)<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
Script 2: Story<br />
4 subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses <strong>an</strong>d 15 Ma<strong>in</strong> clauses, so<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex is low.<br />
Most sentences are ma<strong>in</strong> only - little use of<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
100 word block uses b<strong>as</strong>ic subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or “when”<br />
only.<br />
6 Subjects are pronouns, 5 are names. + “the<br />
door”<br />
No adjectives <strong>in</strong> Subject slot.<br />
Long phr<strong>as</strong>es with adjectives.<br />
Bare prepositional phr<strong>as</strong>es; no adjectives.<br />
Little variety <strong>in</strong> verb tenses <strong>an</strong>d forms - mostly p<strong>as</strong>t<br />
tense, one p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous “were walk<strong>in</strong>g”<br />
Errors: “even f<strong>as</strong>ter th<strong>an</strong> a fl<strong>as</strong>h” (l<strong>in</strong>e 16)<br />
L<strong>as</strong>t l<strong>in</strong>e (22) “told each other if… “ - <strong>as</strong>ked<br />
whether..<br />
Direct speech uses formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es without<br />
errors.<br />
Compare “eyes th<strong>at</strong> looked like a c<strong>at</strong>s eyes” (l<strong>in</strong>e<br />
2) with “eyes th<strong>at</strong> looked like dogs eyes” (l<strong>in</strong>e 12) -<br />
connot<strong>at</strong>ions not so positive.<br />
“ears - acorns” <strong>an</strong>d “h<strong>an</strong>ds - gorill<strong>as</strong> h<strong>an</strong>ds” (l<strong>in</strong>e 3)<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
verb<br />
error<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
No verb errors.
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Agreements<br />
Articles<br />
Prepns<br />
EAL more errors with<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct articles (*)<br />
Agreements: no<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t differences.<br />
EAL more <strong>in</strong>correctly<br />
used prepositions th<strong>an</strong><br />
EMT (*)<br />
“a acorn” (l<strong>in</strong>e 3)<br />
No errors <strong>in</strong> story<br />
Technical<br />
accuracy:<br />
Punct<br />
u<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
EAL omit fewer comm<strong>as</strong><br />
(§)<br />
Comm<strong>as</strong> sometimes used <strong>in</strong>stead of full stops<br />
(l<strong>in</strong>es 4, 8, 19).<br />
Full stops mostly used correctly.<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
EAL make fewer spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
errors (*)<br />
None<br />
level 4<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
not <strong>an</strong>alysed<br />
Script 2: Radio advertisement<br />
Form<strong>at</strong>: Open<strong>in</strong>g is a full sentence r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> a c<strong>at</strong>chy phr<strong>as</strong>e. Addresses listener<br />
directly.<br />
Org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion is appropri<strong>at</strong>e.<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is useful <strong>an</strong>d full.<br />
Voice: Writer moves from I <strong>at</strong> start to “we” <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>e 11.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Little use of adjectives <strong>an</strong>d adverbs to describe the toy <strong>an</strong>d fe<strong>at</strong>ures.<br />
Word order - “even you c<strong>an</strong> w<strong>at</strong>ch” (l<strong>in</strong>e 10) - you c<strong>an</strong> even w<strong>at</strong>ch.<br />
Colloc<strong>at</strong>ional error - joy pads (sticks) (l<strong>in</strong>e 5)<br />
Plural error: childrens (l<strong>in</strong>e 2)<br />
Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development:<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Story end<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>an</strong> effect for the reader.<br />
• Use of description to develop the sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Connot<strong>at</strong>ions of metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes.<br />
Feedback b<strong>as</strong>ed on <strong>as</strong>sessment for learn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• word order<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• Use of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion to construct longer <strong>an</strong>d more varied sentences.<br />
• Spread use of description from Object / Complement to Subject <strong>an</strong>d Adverbial slots of clauses <strong>as</strong> well.<br />
• Use of full stops to demarc<strong>at</strong>e sentences.<br />
• Good use of direct speech to cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>at</strong>mosphere <strong>an</strong>d develop characters could be made even more effective<br />
through punctu<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d paragraph<strong>in</strong>g.
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Script 3 Story EAL - 5 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Tagalog<br />
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It w<strong>as</strong> a summers day. The face of the moon disappeared <strong>an</strong>d the golden chariot moved<br />
across the horizon. The lush green gr<strong>as</strong>s d<strong>an</strong>ced with the daffodiles, whilst, the leaves<br />
swayed swiftly, side to side. The big day everyone w<strong>as</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g for had f<strong>in</strong>ally arrived. There<br />
w<strong>as</strong> a long queue accross the street <strong>in</strong> Wakefield town. The games shop w<strong>as</strong> sell<strong>in</strong>g their<br />
br<strong>an</strong>d-new game. – it w<strong>as</strong> the magnificent game everyone w<strong>as</strong> long<strong>in</strong>g for ever s<strong>in</strong>ce l<strong>as</strong>t<br />
month! More <strong>an</strong>d more people gradually jo<strong>in</strong>ed the queue. Peter w<strong>as</strong> becom<strong>in</strong>g extremely tired<br />
wait<strong>in</strong>g there; s<strong>in</strong>ce, he queued up <strong>at</strong> seven <strong>in</strong> the morn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
For hours <strong>an</strong>d hours he had been wait<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
“Mother”, he whispered, “when will the shop open?”<br />
“Not for <strong>an</strong>other hour or so!” she replied ple<strong>as</strong><strong>an</strong>tly.<br />
Peter beg<strong>an</strong> to get imp<strong>at</strong>ient – his face w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g red. He gazed <strong>at</strong> the advertizement on the<br />
crystal w<strong>in</strong>dows <strong>an</strong>d sighed.<br />
“I will get th<strong>at</strong> f<strong>an</strong>t<strong>as</strong>tic game!” he mumbled. The crowd w<strong>as</strong> gett<strong>in</strong>g longer <strong>an</strong>d longer (longer<br />
th<strong>at</strong> th<strong>at</strong> narrow street). There came a loud noise like a bee buzz<strong>in</strong>g. Buzz buzz here… buzz<br />
buzz there.<br />
F<strong>in</strong>ally, the doors slowly opened. Everyone rushed <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>d pushed the door back. The<br />
security fell back with a loud thump.<br />
“Slow down! Slow down!” he exclaimed, “Plenty games for all of you!”<br />
All the children rushed <strong>in</strong>, <strong>as</strong> f<strong>as</strong>t <strong>as</strong> lighten<strong>in</strong>g, tak<strong>in</strong>g hold of their tre<strong>as</strong>ure. Peter w<strong>as</strong><br />
amazed! He had never seen <strong>as</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y games <strong>as</strong> he did… he w<strong>as</strong> speechless!<br />
All the adults queue <strong>at</strong> the counter; <strong>in</strong> order to get ready to pay for their purch<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
Peter w<strong>as</strong> such <strong>in</strong> shock th<strong>at</strong> he couldn’t move. His family were not <strong>as</strong> wealthy, <strong>as</strong> the others<br />
on their street; therefore, he did not buy <strong>an</strong>y accessories to play with. Nevertheless, he<br />
saved up his birthday money, ever s<strong>in</strong>ce he w<strong>as</strong> seven <strong>an</strong>d it w<strong>as</strong> the day to spend it. Games<br />
were piled all over the v<strong>as</strong>t shelves, ever on the floor! New ones <strong>an</strong>d old ones: such <strong>as</strong> ‘Harry<br />
one’ <strong>an</strong>d ‘Pop the balloon <strong>in</strong> the cr<strong>as</strong>h course’.<br />
Suddenly, Peter identified only one of the new games. The others had taken them all. A<br />
young girl, with blue eyes r<strong>an</strong> like a w<strong>in</strong>d to grab it. Peter exam<strong>in</strong>ed her <strong>an</strong>d leaped out to<br />
take hold of it first.<br />
“Oh, ple<strong>as</strong>e my name’s Anna,” the girl cried, “ple<strong>as</strong>e may I have th<strong>at</strong> game?”<br />
“Sorry” Peter replied <strong>as</strong> he strolled happily to his mother. “Come on! Stir your stumps”, his<br />
mother shouted.<br />
The little girl beg<strong>an</strong> to cry; therefore Peter allowed her to play with the game with him <strong>at</strong><br />
home. From th<strong>at</strong> day on, they became the best of m<strong>at</strong>es; furthermore, they shared all their<br />
precious possessions with one <strong>an</strong>d <strong>an</strong>other.
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Script 3 Column <strong>an</strong>alysis EAL - 5 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Tagalog<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial Subject noun phr<strong>as</strong>e Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e Object noun<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>e/complement<br />
Adverbial<br />
Clause<br />
Type<br />
It w<strong>as</strong> a summers day. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
The face of the moon disappeared Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d the golden chariot moved across the horizon. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
The lush green gr<strong>as</strong>s d<strong>an</strong>ced with the daffodiles Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
whilst the leaves swayed swiftly<br />
Adv<br />
side to side<br />
The big day Ma<strong>in</strong>…<br />
everyone w<strong>as</strong> wait<strong>in</strong>g for Rel Sub<br />
had (f<strong>in</strong>ally) arrived. …Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
There w<strong>as</strong> a long queue across the street Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>in</strong> Wakefield town.<br />
The games shop w<strong>as</strong> sell<strong>in</strong>g their br<strong>an</strong>d-new<br />
Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
game--<br />
it w<strong>as</strong> the magnificent<br />
Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
game<br />
everyone w<strong>as</strong> long<strong>in</strong>g for ever s<strong>in</strong>ce l<strong>as</strong>t month. Rel Obj<br />
More <strong>an</strong>d more (gradually) jo<strong>in</strong>ed the queue. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
people<br />
Peter w<strong>as</strong> becom<strong>in</strong>g extremely tired Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
wait<strong>in</strong>g there Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
s<strong>in</strong>ce, he queued up <strong>at</strong> seven <strong>in</strong> the Adv
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Script 3 Radio advertisement EAL - 5 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Tagalog<br />
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It h<strong>as</strong> a very soft texture; which, is especially des<strong>in</strong>ged for<br />
young children. When children hug it tightly, the teddy bear’s ears<br />
<strong>an</strong>d paws light up const<strong>an</strong>tly <strong>in</strong> various colours: green, blue, purple <strong>an</strong>d<br />
red. This teddy bear is light, therefore the children are able to hold<br />
it; moreover, it is extremely colourful. Each bear comes with two<br />
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Script 3 Commentary EAL - 5 - Girl First l<strong>an</strong>guage: Tagalog<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
level 5<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL stories have less development<br />
of Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Resolution th<strong>an</strong> EMT; more<br />
development of Sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
EAL stories less likely to follow the<br />
given pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
More EAL stories have <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Fewer EAL stories have <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g Both use paragraphs well. Uses paragraphs well.<br />
Script 3: Story<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g: Lot of description <strong>in</strong> open<strong>in</strong>g l<strong>in</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d<br />
throughout. Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage (l<strong>in</strong>es 1-3, 14).<br />
Characters: Peter developed through description<br />
<strong>an</strong>d speech. At po<strong>in</strong>ts throughout story e.g. l<strong>in</strong>es<br />
22-24, background <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion builds emp<strong>at</strong>hy<br />
from reader.<br />
Mother only developed through speech (l<strong>in</strong>es 10,<br />
32)<br />
Girl developed through figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage,<br />
description <strong>an</strong>d speech.<br />
Problem: l<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong> the story <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>e 28<br />
Resolution: l<strong>in</strong>e 33-34. Low key, no writer<br />
comment. Implicit moral.<br />
Time phr<strong>as</strong>es, talk <strong>an</strong>d subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors move story<br />
along.<br />
Follows the pictures.<br />
Feels <strong>in</strong>complete because it is not connected to<br />
the well-developed character or sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
End<strong>in</strong>g is r<strong>at</strong>her weak compared to open<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Length Similar lengths Good length.<br />
EAL use more words of DS (§) Good mixture of direct speech <strong>an</strong>d narr<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
Direct speech<br />
EAL use more DS to develop the There is variety <strong>in</strong> the vocabulary <strong>in</strong>troduc<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
Problem <strong>an</strong>d less to develop direct speech - mumbled, replied, cried - <strong>an</strong>d this<br />
Resolution.<br />
adds to development of characters.<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Subjt<br />
Objt/<br />
Cmp<br />
level 5<br />
EAL<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Subject slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Object / Complement<br />
slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Script 3: Story<br />
4 subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses <strong>an</strong>d 9 Ma<strong>in</strong> clauses, so<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex is high.<br />
Subject <strong>an</strong>d Object rel<strong>at</strong>ive clauses <strong>in</strong> first 100<br />
words.<br />
“whilst” (l<strong>in</strong>e 2)<br />
“s<strong>in</strong>ce” (l<strong>in</strong>e 7) but followed by verb tense error<br />
5 Subjects are pronouns, 6 are phr<strong>as</strong>es with<br />
adjectives - very sophistic<strong>at</strong>ed.<br />
Phr<strong>as</strong>es with adjectives <strong>an</strong>d adverb “extremely”.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Adv<br />
bial<br />
Vrb<br />
Formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Adverbial slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Verb slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
adverb but no adjectives.<br />
Variety <strong>in</strong> verb tenses <strong>an</strong>d forms - p<strong>as</strong>t tense, p<strong>as</strong>t<br />
cont<strong>in</strong>uous, p<strong>as</strong>t perfect “had arrived”<br />
Errors: “ever s<strong>in</strong>ce l<strong>as</strong>t month” (l<strong>in</strong>e 5) s<strong>in</strong>ce<br />
“plenty games” (l<strong>in</strong>e 18) plenty of<br />
“r<strong>an</strong> like a w<strong>in</strong>d” (l<strong>in</strong>e 28) the w<strong>in</strong>d<br />
“with one <strong>an</strong>d <strong>an</strong>other” (l<strong>in</strong>e 35) with one <strong>an</strong>other<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
“the face of the moon” “the golden chariot moved”<br />
“gr<strong>as</strong>s d<strong>an</strong>ced with the daffodils”<br />
“noise like a bee buzz<strong>in</strong>g”<br />
“r<strong>an</strong> like a w<strong>in</strong>d”<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
verb<br />
errors<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>s<br />
some errors <strong>in</strong> adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
verb tenses e.g. p<strong>as</strong>t<br />
perfect.<br />
P<strong>as</strong>t perfect/cont<strong>in</strong>uous tense needed: l<strong>in</strong>e 5 - had<br />
been long<strong>in</strong>g for<br />
l<strong>in</strong>e 7 - had started to queue<br />
l<strong>in</strong>e 24 - had been sav<strong>in</strong>g
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Agreements<br />
Articles<br />
Prepns<br />
Very few errors with<br />
articles, but EAL more<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (§)<br />
Agreements: differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
a / the <strong>in</strong> “r<strong>an</strong> like a w<strong>in</strong>d”<br />
“plenty games” - omitted “of”<br />
Technical<br />
accuracy:<br />
Punct<br />
u<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Competent use.<br />
Some errors with semi-colons (l<strong>in</strong>es 21, 33)<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
None<br />
level 5<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
Clear overview of content. -<br />
<strong>in</strong>cluded sufficient<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d not too<br />
much of <strong>an</strong>y one k<strong>in</strong>d,<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>ed less<br />
variety of sentences <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
Grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary<br />
used to show ch<strong>an</strong>ge <strong>in</strong><br />
voice.<br />
Script 3: Radio advertisement<br />
Form<strong>at</strong>: Open<strong>in</strong>g is a full sentence r<strong>at</strong>her th<strong>an</strong> a c<strong>at</strong>chy phr<strong>as</strong>e. Does not address<br />
listener directly until l<strong>in</strong>e 12 - “your children”.<br />
Slog<strong>an</strong> (l<strong>in</strong>e 14-15) “th<strong>in</strong>k of your children - put a smile on their face”<br />
Org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion is appropri<strong>at</strong>e.<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is useful <strong>an</strong>d full. Repetition of colours.<br />
Voice: Ch<strong>an</strong>ge from open<strong>in</strong>g to clos<strong>in</strong>g through address to listener <strong>an</strong>d grammar.<br />
Vocabulary <strong>an</strong>d grammar ch<strong>an</strong>ges from middle part to clos<strong>in</strong>g. Central section is<br />
r<strong>at</strong>her more like written th<strong>an</strong> spoken <strong>English</strong> because of “therefore, moreover”.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Use of adjectives (soft, light, colourful) <strong>an</strong>d adverbs (const<strong>an</strong>tly, absolutely,<br />
especially) to describe the toy <strong>an</strong>d fe<strong>at</strong>ures, <strong>an</strong>d for persu<strong>as</strong>ion..<br />
Use of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d some short sentences.<br />
Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development:<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Read<strong>in</strong>g good stories with different types of end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g how writers cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>an</strong> effect on the reader<br />
through the end<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
• Experienc<strong>in</strong>g a r<strong>an</strong>ge of genres of spoken <strong>an</strong>d written <strong>English</strong>, <strong>an</strong>d how they use vocabulary <strong>an</strong>d grammar<br />
for impact on audience <strong>an</strong>d to construct purpose.<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• Use of semicolons with adv<strong>an</strong>ced sentence structures.<br />
• Use of p<strong>as</strong>t perfect cont<strong>in</strong>uous tense (had been wait<strong>in</strong>g) to show on-go<strong>in</strong>g action rel<strong>at</strong>ive to a po<strong>in</strong>t <strong>in</strong> time <strong>in</strong><br />
the p<strong>as</strong>t.
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Script 4 Story EMT- 3 - Girl<br />
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In the summere holidays David <strong>an</strong>d his mum clare went shopp<strong>in</strong>g there had been shopp<strong>in</strong>g for <strong>an</strong><br />
hour <strong>an</strong>d half.<br />
As they were go<strong>in</strong>g back to the car David saw the new game th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> com<strong>in</strong>g out, the new game th<strong>at</strong><br />
he w<strong>an</strong>ted to get when it came out.<br />
So David <strong>as</strong>ked his mum Clare if they could go <strong>an</strong>d wait<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the queue <strong>an</strong>d his mum said “yes but I<br />
hope it will not take long”.<br />
While they were wait<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the queue there w<strong>as</strong> people shout<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d argu<strong>in</strong>g, they were shout<strong>in</strong>g<br />
“Open now open now”.<br />
But about 20 m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er they opened the Shop, <strong>as</strong> he opened the shop door people just r<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>d<br />
got the game <strong>an</strong>d payed for it, <strong>an</strong>d then went.<br />
At the same time David <strong>an</strong>d this girl got the game, they were argu<strong>in</strong>g for about 10 m<strong>in</strong>utes. Then<br />
the shopkeepers saw them argu<strong>in</strong>g so he went over <strong>an</strong>d said “why are you two argu<strong>in</strong>g”, “I got this<br />
game first” said David <strong>an</strong>d the girl said “I did” <strong>an</strong>d they just started to argue aga<strong>in</strong>. The shopkeeper<br />
shouted “shut up”, everyone heard him shout <strong>an</strong>d they just looked.<br />
After th<strong>at</strong> David <strong>an</strong>d the girl said sorry to the shopkeeper <strong>an</strong>d sorry to each other.<br />
Then the shopkeeper said “I have got one th<strong>at</strong> I saved for <strong>an</strong>yone”.<br />
So David just let the girl have it because he w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g to get the one th<strong>at</strong> the shopkeeper saved.<br />
So the girl went <strong>an</strong>d payed for the new game she w<strong>as</strong> get<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d then went home.<br />
David went to his mum to get the money to pay for the game “How much is it David” said Clare<br />
Davids mum “twenty pound” said David Twenty pound said David’s mum “Are you sure” “yes said<br />
David.<br />
So David’s mum gave him the money to go <strong>an</strong>d pay for it, so he did.<br />
The shopkeeper said “14.99 then ple<strong>as</strong>e” so David gave him the money then got the ch<strong>an</strong>ge <strong>an</strong>d said<br />
“th<strong>an</strong>k you” <strong>an</strong>d went.<br />
When David got outside he gave the ch<strong>an</strong>ge to his mum, <strong>an</strong>d his mum said “you said it w<strong>as</strong> twenty<br />
pound”.<br />
“Well th<strong>at</strong> is wh<strong>at</strong> I thought it costed” said David.<br />
After th<strong>at</strong> David said “th<strong>an</strong>k you” to his mum for giv<strong>in</strong>g his the money to get the game.<br />
And then went home to play it with his mum.
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Script 4 Story<br />
EMT- 3 - Girl<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial Subject Verb Object /<br />
Complement<br />
Adverbial<br />
Clause<br />
Type<br />
In the summere David <strong>an</strong>d his mum went shopp<strong>in</strong>g Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
holidays<br />
clare<br />
there [they?] had been shopp<strong>in</strong>g for <strong>an</strong> hour <strong>an</strong>d a half. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
As they were go<strong>in</strong>g back to the car Adv<br />
David saw the new game Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> com<strong>in</strong>g out Rel Obj<br />
* * the new game<br />
th<strong>at</strong> he w<strong>an</strong>ted to get Rel<br />
when it came out. Adv<br />
So David <strong>as</strong>ked his mum Clare Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
if they could go Nom. Obj.<br />
<strong>an</strong>d wait <strong>in</strong> the queue Nom. Obj.<br />
<strong>an</strong>d his mum said Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“yes but I hope it will not take too long”<br />
DS<br />
While they were wait<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong> the queue Adv<br />
there w<strong>as</strong> people Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
shout<strong>in</strong>g Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
<strong>an</strong>d argu<strong>in</strong>g Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
they were shout<strong>in</strong>g Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“Open now open now”<br />
But<br />
about 20 m<strong>in</strong>utes<br />
l<strong>at</strong>er<br />
DS<br />
they opened the shop door Ma<strong>in</strong>
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“Are you bored of toys well there is a new toy”. “Only for girls it is a doll<br />
called Misty.” “You c<strong>an</strong> buy it from toy’s ur us <strong>an</strong>d Early learn<strong>in</strong>g” “If you<br />
spend over £15.00 on a doll <strong>an</strong>d other th<strong>in</strong>gs you will get a doll free.” The<br />
doll called Misty c<strong>an</strong> move talk <strong>an</strong>d if you buy it you get 15 pairs of shoes<br />
<strong>an</strong>d clothes, fre just for only 12.99 <strong>an</strong>d you get 15% off the new brilli<strong>an</strong>t<br />
toy.” It could be for a present because I’m th<strong>in</strong> all the girl would like one. I<br />
would go <strong>an</strong>d get one before they go so hurry down to toys ur us or Early<br />
learn<strong>in</strong>g now”. With the doll you get a b<strong>at</strong>h <strong>an</strong>d b<strong>at</strong>h th<strong>in</strong>gs.
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Script 4 Commentary EMT- 3 - Girl<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Length<br />
Direct speech<br />
level 3<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT stories have<br />
similar (low) amounts of<br />
development of each<br />
component, except Resolution<br />
where EAL do more.<br />
EMT stories less likely to follow<br />
the given pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
EAL stories had m<strong>an</strong>y<br />
<strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d more<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT.<br />
Very few <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g end<strong>in</strong>gs,<br />
similar to EMT.<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT have<br />
problems with lack of<br />
paragraphs<br />
Both EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT write shorter<br />
stories, but long enough.<br />
EAL use gre<strong>at</strong>er % of DS (§)<br />
Similar problems <strong>in</strong> punctu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g<br />
direct speech.<br />
Script 4: Story<br />
Very little development of narr<strong>at</strong>ive components.<br />
Little use of description.<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g: Only the time <strong>an</strong>d “shopp<strong>in</strong>g” given <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>e 1.<br />
Characters: Little development, only names<br />
Problem: L<strong>in</strong>es 11-13, developed through direct<br />
speech.<br />
Resolution: L<strong>in</strong>es 16 -17. Resolved without <strong>an</strong>y<br />
tension - “David just let the girl have it”.<br />
Good use of adverbial clauses <strong>an</strong>d rel<strong>at</strong>ive time<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es (about 20 m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er, After th<strong>at</strong>, then) to<br />
move the story on.<br />
Follows pictures.<br />
After l<strong>in</strong>e 18, rest of story is about pay<strong>in</strong>g for the<br />
game - not particularly cre<strong>at</strong>ive.<br />
Very m<strong>an</strong>y short paragraphs, often just one<br />
sentence..<br />
Good length.<br />
Lots of direct speech. Some problems with<br />
punctu<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g it, especially miss<strong>in</strong>g question marks<br />
<strong>an</strong>d comm<strong>as</strong>.<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>i<br />
on<br />
Subjts<br />
level 3<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
Similar<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories<br />
use adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
EAL stories use<br />
more pronouns <strong>as</strong><br />
Subjects (§)<br />
Script 4: Story<br />
8 ma<strong>in</strong> clauses <strong>an</strong>d 7 subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses, so high<br />
subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion <strong>in</strong>dex for this level.<br />
“while” ( l<strong>in</strong>e 4)<br />
9 pronouns; 3 names; one phr<strong>as</strong>e “his mum”.<br />
Bare Subject noun phr<strong>as</strong>es - no adjectives.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Objt/<br />
Cmp<br />
Advbi<br />
al<br />
Verb<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use<br />
of Object /<br />
Complement slot<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL use fewer<br />
words <strong>in</strong> the<br />
Adverbial slot (**)<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use<br />
of Verb slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Only 5 Objects / Complements.<br />
Very bare phr<strong>as</strong>es - only adjective is “new” <strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong><br />
pictures.<br />
Simple prepositional phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> the Adverbial slot <strong>an</strong>d<br />
5 Adverbial clauses.<br />
Use of p<strong>as</strong>t perfect cont<strong>in</strong>uous tense <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>e 1 (had<br />
been shopp<strong>in</strong>g). Several sentences comb<strong>in</strong>e p<strong>as</strong>t <strong>an</strong>d<br />
p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous tenses e.g. l<strong>in</strong>e 3 “<strong>as</strong> they were go<strong>in</strong>g<br />
back … David saw<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
“I’ve got one th<strong>at</strong> I saved for <strong>an</strong>yone” (l<strong>in</strong>e 16) sounds<br />
odd or <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL stories use<br />
more metaphors<br />
<strong>an</strong>d similes th<strong>an</strong><br />
EMT stories.<br />
none
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accuracy:<br />
verb<br />
errors<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Errors with verb end<strong>in</strong>gs:<br />
“could go <strong>an</strong>d wait<strong>in</strong>g” (l<strong>in</strong>e 5)<br />
“it costed” (l<strong>in</strong>e 27)<br />
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Agreements<br />
Articles<br />
Prepns<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
EAL more omitted<br />
prepositions th<strong>an</strong><br />
EMT (*)<br />
“there w<strong>as</strong> people” (l<strong>in</strong>e 7)<br />
none<br />
Technical<br />
accuracy:<br />
Punct<br />
u<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Full stops are used but some are miss<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Comm<strong>as</strong> used <strong>in</strong> wrong places (e.g.l<strong>in</strong>es 7, 12, 25)<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Good.<br />
level 3<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL learners seem to h<strong>an</strong>dle the genre<br />
less confidently th<strong>an</strong> EMT writers,<br />
particularly <strong>at</strong> level 3.<br />
Open<strong>in</strong>gs <strong>an</strong>d slog<strong>an</strong>s less varied <strong>an</strong>d<br />
c<strong>at</strong>chy.<br />
Omission of key <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion, repe<strong>at</strong>ed<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion.<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT often <strong>in</strong>clude too much<br />
<strong>in</strong>fo on price <strong>an</strong>d purch<strong>as</strong>e<br />
Script 4: Radio advertisement<br />
Form<strong>at</strong>: Open<strong>in</strong>g c<strong>at</strong>ches <strong>at</strong>tention through question to listener.<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is not well org<strong>an</strong>ised e.g. l<strong>as</strong>t sentence returns to fe<strong>at</strong>ures.<br />
Repe<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion on purch<strong>as</strong>e.<br />
Message to listener <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>e 7 “so hurry down to toys ur us”<br />
Voice: The writer addresses the listener directly <strong>as</strong> “you”. In l<strong>in</strong>e 6, the<br />
I <strong>in</strong> “I’m th<strong>in</strong>” is presumably the doll speak<strong>in</strong>g to the listener. This could<br />
be clearer.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Very little use of adjectives or adverbs <strong>in</strong> description.<br />
Punctu<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>as</strong> direct speech - suggests confusion <strong>as</strong> to form required.<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>e error - “just for only 12.99” (l<strong>in</strong>e 5)<br />
Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development:<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Story end<strong>in</strong>gs th<strong>at</strong> cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>an</strong> effect for the reader.<br />
• Use of description to develop the sett<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d characters.<br />
Development of str<strong>at</strong>egies / Practice<br />
• Read<strong>in</strong>g draft of writ<strong>in</strong>g from perspective of reader - to org<strong>an</strong>ise <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion, cre<strong>at</strong>e <strong>in</strong>terest.<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• Use of paragraphs to shape the story.<br />
• Use of full stops to demarc<strong>at</strong>e sentences <strong>an</strong>d comm<strong>as</strong> with<strong>in</strong> sentences.
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“Mum! They’ve got it! They’ve got Meg<strong>at</strong>ron 3000!” Lee shouted, <strong>as</strong> he jumped<br />
<strong>in</strong>to the air with joy. Lee looked up to the poster <strong>in</strong> the game shop w<strong>in</strong>dow one more<br />
time to see if wh<strong>at</strong> saw 5 second ago w<strong>as</strong> true. Lee couldn’t wait to get the new game<br />
<strong>an</strong>d bo<strong>as</strong>t about it to his friends.<br />
Lee <strong>an</strong>d his Mum jo<strong>in</strong>ed to the end of the large queue to get <strong>in</strong>to the shop.<br />
Everyone w<strong>as</strong> talk<strong>in</strong>g about the new game <strong>an</strong>d eager to get <strong>in</strong>to the shop.<br />
The store clerk opened the door <strong>an</strong>d everyth<strong>in</strong>g went haywire. Everyone w<strong>as</strong><br />
push<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d shov<strong>in</strong>g like mad.<br />
Inside the shop w<strong>as</strong> extremely crowded. Lee lost his Mum <strong>in</strong> the process of<br />
gett<strong>in</strong>g <strong>in</strong>to the shop, but she had to be <strong>in</strong> the crowd somewhere.<br />
Everyone grabbed their copy of the game untill there w<strong>as</strong> one game cartridge<br />
left. Lee <strong>an</strong>d a dark sk<strong>in</strong>ned girl who had her hair tied back <strong>in</strong> a pony tail grabbed the<br />
game <strong>at</strong> the exact same time. The girl pulled with all her might to set the game free<br />
from Lee’s h<strong>an</strong>ds. The girl r<strong>an</strong> to queue up with the game <strong>in</strong> her h<strong>an</strong>d, but Lee tripped<br />
her over <strong>an</strong>d she fell over <strong>an</strong>d dropped her game. Lee took the game <strong>an</strong>d looked back <strong>at</strong><br />
the girl. He saw her clutch<strong>in</strong>g her bloody elbow. He gave the game back to her.<br />
“Sorry,” he said shamefully. Even though he didn’t leave the shop with the game,<br />
he left with some pride.
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Column <strong>an</strong>alysis EMT - 4 - Boy<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial Subject Verb phr<strong>as</strong>e Object /<br />
Complement<br />
Adverbial<br />
Clause<br />
Type<br />
“Mum! They’ve got it! they’ve got Meg<strong>at</strong>ron 3000!”<br />
Lee shouted Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>as</strong> he jumped <strong>in</strong>to the air<br />
Adv<br />
with joy.<br />
Lee looked up to the poster <strong>in</strong> the game Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
shop w<strong>in</strong>dow<br />
one more time to see Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
if Nom…<br />
wh<strong>at</strong> [he] saw 5 seconds ago Nom<strong>in</strong>al<br />
w<strong>as</strong> true. … Nom<br />
Lee couldn’t wait Ma<strong>in</strong> …<br />
to get the new game Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
<strong>an</strong>d bo<strong>as</strong>t about it to his friends. …Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
Lee <strong>an</strong>d his mum jo<strong>in</strong>ed to the end of the large Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
queue<br />
to get <strong>in</strong>to the shop. Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
Everyone w<strong>as</strong> talk<strong>in</strong>g about the new game Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
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to get <strong>in</strong>to the shop. Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
The store clerk opened the door Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d everyth<strong>in</strong>g went haywire. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
Everyone w<strong>as</strong> push<strong>in</strong>g Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d shov<strong>in</strong>g like mad Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
Inside the Ma<strong>in</strong>
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• A m<strong>in</strong>iture portable T.V<br />
• A m<strong>in</strong>iture Portable radio<br />
• And even a Gameboy Pocket.<br />
“You c<strong>an</strong> get all of this for the amaz<strong>in</strong>g price of £69.99! Get it for<br />
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The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
level 4<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
EAL stories have slightly less<br />
development of each component.<br />
No clear difference <strong>in</strong> preferred<br />
str<strong>at</strong>egies.<br />
EAL stories less likely to follow the<br />
given pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
Slightly more EMT stories have<br />
<strong>in</strong>complete end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
More EMT stories have <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
Script 5: Story<br />
Good open<strong>in</strong>g through direct speech.<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g: M<strong>in</strong>imal description <strong>in</strong> first paragraph.<br />
Characters: Indirect description of Lee through<br />
actions <strong>an</strong>d thoughts (l<strong>in</strong>es 1-4).<br />
M<strong>in</strong>imal description of girl (l<strong>in</strong>e 12)<br />
Problem: Lost mother seems to be problem<br />
(l<strong>in</strong>es 9-10), then given problem occurs (l<strong>in</strong>e 13)<br />
Resolution: Through sequence of actions <strong>an</strong>d<br />
decisions by Lee. Short sentences <strong>an</strong>d apology<br />
for effect (l<strong>in</strong>e 16, 17)<br />
Follows the pictures.<br />
Complete<br />
End<strong>in</strong>g h<strong>as</strong> impact through s<strong>in</strong>gle word “sorry”<br />
<strong>an</strong>d through comparison (zeugma) <strong>in</strong> l<strong>as</strong>t<br />
sentence.<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g Similar use of paragraph<strong>in</strong>g. Uses 6 paragraphs to m<strong>at</strong>ch events.<br />
Length Similar lengths R<strong>at</strong>her short.<br />
Little but effective use of direct speech <strong>in</strong><br />
Direct speech<br />
narr<strong>at</strong>ion - only <strong>in</strong> open<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d clos<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Subjt<br />
Objt/<br />
Cmp<br />
Adv<br />
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Vrb<br />
Formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
level 4<br />
EMT<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
s<strong>in</strong>gle word Subjects<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (*)<br />
EAL use more <strong>an</strong>d<br />
longer Objects /<br />
Complements (*)<br />
<strong>an</strong>d more th<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>y other<br />
group.<br />
EAL use fewer words <strong>in</strong><br />
Adverbial slot (*)<br />
EAL use more, shorter,<br />
Verb Phr<strong>as</strong>es (*)<br />
EAL conta<strong>in</strong> m<strong>an</strong>y more<br />
errors <strong>in</strong> formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es (***)<br />
Script 5: Story<br />
3 subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses <strong>an</strong>d 9 Ma<strong>in</strong> clauses, so<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex is average.<br />
Good mixture of long <strong>an</strong>d short, simple <strong>an</strong>d<br />
compound sentences to cre<strong>at</strong>e effect.<br />
until (l<strong>in</strong>e 11)<br />
even though (l<strong>in</strong>e 17)<br />
4 Subjects are pronouns, 4 are names. + “the<br />
store clerk”<br />
No adjectives <strong>in</strong> Subject slot.<br />
Bare phr<strong>as</strong>es.<br />
M<strong>an</strong>y phr<strong>as</strong>es but not m<strong>an</strong>y adjectives or adverbs.<br />
Moves between p<strong>as</strong>t tense <strong>an</strong>d p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous.<br />
Not a lot of variety otherwise.<br />
Error(?): “<strong>at</strong> the exact same time” (l<strong>in</strong>e 13) is from<br />
spoken <strong>English</strong>, looks a little odd <strong>in</strong> written.<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
“haywire” (l<strong>in</strong>e 7)<br />
Clos<strong>in</strong>g sentence - “left with some pride”<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
verb<br />
error<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
No verb errors.<br />
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Agreements<br />
Articles<br />
EAL more errors with<br />
<strong>in</strong>correct articles (*)<br />
Agreements: no<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t differences.<br />
none
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EAL more <strong>in</strong>correctly<br />
used prepositions th<strong>an</strong><br />
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Technical<br />
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Few comm<strong>as</strong> but used correctly.<br />
Full stops used correctly.<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
EAL make fewer spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
errors (*)<br />
None<br />
level 4<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
not <strong>an</strong>alysed<br />
Script 5: Radio advertisement<br />
Form<strong>at</strong>: Open<strong>in</strong>g is a c<strong>at</strong>chy question to the listener.<br />
Slog<strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>cluded (l<strong>in</strong>es 8- 9).<br />
Org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion is good.<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is brief <strong>an</strong>d to the po<strong>in</strong>t.<br />
Voice: Ch<strong>an</strong>ges from question <strong>an</strong>d <strong>an</strong>swer (l<strong>in</strong>es 1-2) to descriptive <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion (l<strong>in</strong>es<br />
3-8) to slog<strong>an</strong> <strong>an</strong>d persu<strong>as</strong>ion (8-11) <strong>an</strong>d f<strong>in</strong>ally to maker <strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion (l<strong>in</strong>e 12).<br />
Direct speech punctu<strong>at</strong>ion not needed.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Some use of adjectives (m<strong>in</strong>i<strong>at</strong>ure / amaz<strong>in</strong>g) to persuade through describ<strong>in</strong>g the toy<br />
<strong>an</strong>d fe<strong>at</strong>ures.<br />
M<strong>an</strong>y short phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d sentences, for effect.<br />
Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development:<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Use of description <strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> additional tool to develop narr<strong>at</strong>ive, <strong>in</strong> comb<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion with use of short, bare<br />
sentences th<strong>at</strong> already works well.<br />
• Wider r<strong>an</strong>ge of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>an</strong>d clause types.<br />
Practice<br />
• <strong>Writ<strong>in</strong>g</strong> longer texts.<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• Use of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion to construct longer <strong>an</strong>d more varied sentences.<br />
Feedback from <strong>as</strong>sessment for learn<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Help writer identify parts of story where more description could add impact.
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“Ple<strong>as</strong>e mum, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e.” begged John, when he walked p<strong>as</strong>t the game-shop<br />
<strong>an</strong>d saw a new spaceraiders game. “Oh, alright, John, we’ll queue up here.” said his mum,<br />
ex<strong>as</strong>per<strong>at</strong>ed, “Although it will take a long time, John.”<br />
“Th<strong>an</strong>ks mum, you’re the best.”<br />
Ten m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er, the queue hadn’t badged, but John hadn’t noticed. He w<strong>as</strong> to excited for<br />
th<strong>at</strong>. But his mum had <strong>an</strong>d w<strong>as</strong> def<strong>in</strong>etley sick of the queue already.<br />
“Oh, come on John. This queue will never budge.”<br />
“No mum, ple<strong>as</strong>e.”<br />
But she w<strong>as</strong> right. The queue w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g nowhere. There must have been more th<strong>an</strong> forty people<br />
queue<strong>in</strong>g up, but John w<strong>as</strong> adam<strong>an</strong>t. He w<strong>as</strong> stay<strong>in</strong>g put.<br />
F<strong>in</strong>ally, the doors were opened. There w<strong>as</strong> a huge rush to get <strong>in</strong> <strong>an</strong>d John <strong>an</strong>d his mum were<br />
caught up <strong>in</strong> it. Everyone w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g for the some th<strong>in</strong>g. The game. John w<strong>as</strong> start<strong>in</strong>g to get<br />
worried. “By this time,” he thought, “the game will be gone.”<br />
John saw it. He tried runn<strong>in</strong>g through the crowd but it w<strong>as</strong> hard. Now most of the<br />
crowd w<strong>as</strong> head<strong>in</strong>g towards the till. Th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> the opposite way to the games. “It’s taken me a<br />
long time,” he thought, “but I’m lucky to get it.” He grabbed the l<strong>as</strong>t one <strong>an</strong>d tried to pull it<br />
away.<br />
Then he w<strong>as</strong> stopped. Someth<strong>in</strong>g else w<strong>as</strong> pull<strong>in</strong>g it. He looked up <strong>an</strong>d saw a girl, about his<br />
age, hold<strong>in</strong>g it.<br />
“Excuse me, I had it first. C<strong>an</strong> you let go ple<strong>as</strong>e?” she said demond<strong>in</strong>gly.<br />
“No, it’s m<strong>in</strong>e.” said John.<br />
“I know,” replied K<strong>at</strong>e (th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> her name). “Let’s share it.”<br />
“Deal. You c<strong>an</strong> come round my house to play it <strong>an</strong>d then I will go round to your house. Okay?”<br />
“Okay.”<br />
One week l<strong>at</strong>er, K<strong>at</strong>e w<strong>as</strong> <strong>at</strong> John’s house <strong>an</strong>d they were play<strong>in</strong>g Space raiders.<br />
“Yeah. I’ve got 3,626,109. Th<strong>at</strong> be<strong>at</strong>s your highest score. Take th<strong>at</strong> John.” said K<strong>at</strong>e gleefully.<br />
“Wait until it’s my turn, K<strong>at</strong>e. I’ll m<strong>as</strong>h th<strong>at</strong> score.”<br />
They became the best of friends. One time when they met, they saw <strong>an</strong> advert on tv. It<br />
w<strong>as</strong> for the sequel to the Spaceraiders game they had already.<br />
“Ple<strong>as</strong>e mum, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e.” begged John.<br />
“Oh no. No, no, no. We’re not go<strong>in</strong>g through all th<strong>at</strong> aga<strong>in</strong>. Never.” replied his mum.<br />
“Mum, ple<strong>as</strong>e.” <strong>as</strong>ked K<strong>at</strong>e to her mum.<br />
“No!” she replied.<br />
“Okay.” K<strong>at</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d John said moodily. Then they went upstairs to play some more computer games.
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Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Coord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>or<br />
Adverbial Subject Verb Object / Complement Adverbial Clause<br />
Type<br />
“Ple<strong>as</strong>e mum, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e, ple<strong>as</strong>e.”<br />
DS<br />
begged<br />
John Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
when he walked p<strong>as</strong>t the game shop Adv<br />
<strong>an</strong>d saw a new spaceraiders<br />
Adv<br />
game<br />
“Oh, alright, John, we’ll queue up here.”<br />
DS<br />
said<br />
his mum, ex<strong>as</strong>per<strong>at</strong>ed Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“Although it will take a long time, John.”<br />
DS<br />
“Th<strong>an</strong>ks mum, you’re the best.”<br />
DS<br />
Ten m<strong>in</strong>utes l<strong>at</strong>er the queue hadn’t budged Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
but John hadn’t noticed Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
He w<strong>as</strong> to excited for th<strong>at</strong> Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
But his mum had Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
<strong>an</strong>d w<strong>as</strong> (def<strong>in</strong>itely) sick of the queue already. Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
“Oh, come on John. This queue will never budge.”<br />
DS<br />
“No mum ple<strong>as</strong>e.”<br />
DS<br />
But she w<strong>as</strong> right Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
The queue w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g nowhere Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
There must have been more th<strong>an</strong> forty people Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
queue<strong>in</strong>g up Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
but John w<strong>as</strong> adam<strong>an</strong>t Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
He w<strong>as</strong> stay<strong>in</strong>g put Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
F<strong>in</strong>ally the doors were opened Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
There w<strong>as</strong> a huge rush Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
to get <strong>in</strong> Non-f<strong>in</strong>ite<br />
<strong>an</strong>d John <strong>an</strong>d his mum were caught up <strong>in</strong> it Ma<strong>in</strong><br />
Everyone w<strong>as</strong> go<strong>in</strong>g Ma<strong>in</strong>
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level 5<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
Script 6: Story<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
development:<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Characters<br />
Problem<br />
Resolution<br />
Use of picture<br />
prompts<br />
End<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
EAL stories have less development<br />
of Characters, Problem <strong>an</strong>d<br />
Resolution th<strong>an</strong> EMT; more<br />
development of Sett<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
EAL stories less likely to follow the<br />
given pictures accur<strong>at</strong>ely.<br />
More EAL stories have <strong>in</strong>complete<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Fewer EAL stories have <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g<br />
end<strong>in</strong>gs.<br />
Opens <strong>an</strong>d closes with direct speech.<br />
The components are not just set out but built up<br />
<strong>an</strong>d overlapp<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
Sett<strong>in</strong>g: Little description of place <strong>an</strong>d time.<br />
Characters: developed through direct speech;<br />
each personality is shown through the way they<br />
talk <strong>an</strong>d th<strong>in</strong>k.<br />
Problem: Build up beg<strong>in</strong> <strong>in</strong> l<strong>in</strong>es 12. L<strong>in</strong>es 18-19<br />
act <strong>as</strong> pivot <strong>in</strong> the story between sections with<br />
lots of direct speech. Short sentences <strong>an</strong>d one<br />
long one capture the action. Two l<strong>in</strong>es of talk<br />
lead to<br />
Resolution: l<strong>in</strong>e 22-28. There is a m<strong>in</strong>i-narr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
<strong>in</strong>side the Resolution ph<strong>as</strong>e (l<strong>in</strong>es 28-34) which<br />
h<strong>as</strong> Sett<strong>in</strong>g (28) Problem (29) <strong>an</strong>d Resolution<br />
(34). The l<strong>as</strong>t l<strong>in</strong>e concludes both the m<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>arr<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
<strong>an</strong>d the ma<strong>in</strong> one.<br />
Time phr<strong>as</strong>es, talk <strong>an</strong>d use of comb<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ions of<br />
verb tenses move the story along.<br />
Follows the pictures.<br />
Complete<br />
Interest<strong>in</strong>g comparison with script 3. L<strong>as</strong>t<br />
sentence is also simple <strong>an</strong>d downbe<strong>at</strong> but,<br />
because it h<strong>as</strong> force from be<strong>in</strong>g the clos<strong>in</strong>g of<br />
the m<strong>in</strong>i-narr<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>at</strong> the same time, it is<br />
s<strong>at</strong>isfy<strong>in</strong>g to the reader.<br />
Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g Both use paragraphs well. Uses m<strong>an</strong>y paragraphs well.<br />
Length Similar lengths Good length.<br />
EAL use more words of DS (§) There is a lot of direct speech, <strong>an</strong>d John’s direct<br />
Direct speech<br />
thought (e.g. l<strong>in</strong>e 13) but none is superfluous to<br />
EAL use more DS to develop the the narr<strong>at</strong>ive. Writer ensures the reader c<strong>an</strong><br />
Problem <strong>an</strong>d less to develop follow the plot through the talk.<br />
Resolution.<br />
Some variety <strong>in</strong> the vocabulary <strong>in</strong>troduc<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
direct speech, but also m<strong>an</strong>y adjectives <strong>an</strong>d<br />
adverbs (ex<strong>as</strong>per<strong>at</strong>ed, gleefully, moodily) which<br />
adds to development of characters.<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Sentence<br />
grammar<br />
Clause<br />
structure<br />
Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Subjt<br />
Objt/<br />
Cmp<br />
Adv<br />
bial<br />
Vrb<br />
level 5<br />
EAL<br />
Similar subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex<br />
More EMT stories use<br />
adv<strong>an</strong>ced subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors.<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Subject slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Object / Complement<br />
slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Adverbial slot not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences <strong>in</strong> use of<br />
Verb slot not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Script 6: Story<br />
4 subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses <strong>an</strong>d 16 Ma<strong>in</strong> clauses, so<br />
<strong>in</strong>dex is not high. Much use of compound<br />
sentences with “but” <strong>an</strong>d “<strong>an</strong>d”.<br />
none used<br />
10 Subjects are pronouns, 6 are phr<strong>as</strong>es. Only 1<br />
adjective.<br />
Not high use of this slot, but <strong>in</strong>cludes unusual<br />
vocabulary - “adam<strong>an</strong>t”.<br />
Not much use of this slot. No phr<strong>as</strong>es with<br />
adjectives.<br />
Good variety <strong>an</strong>d comb<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ions of verb tenses <strong>an</strong>d<br />
forms - p<strong>as</strong>t tense, p<strong>as</strong>t cont<strong>in</strong>uous, p<strong>as</strong>t perfect<br />
“hadn’t budged”. P<strong>as</strong>sive <strong>an</strong>d active forms.<br />
Writer uses Verbs <strong>as</strong> major tool <strong>in</strong> build<strong>in</strong>g the<br />
story, <strong>an</strong>d overlapp<strong>in</strong>g the components for effect.
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Words <strong>an</strong>d<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Formulaic<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Error: “<strong>as</strong>ked K<strong>at</strong>e to her mum” (l<strong>in</strong>e 32)<br />
Figur<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
EAL stories use more<br />
metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT stories.<br />
Low key metaphorical talk <strong>in</strong> several places e.g.<br />
“We’re not go<strong>in</strong>g through all th<strong>at</strong> aga<strong>in</strong>” (l<strong>in</strong>e 31)<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
accuracy:<br />
:<br />
verb<br />
errors<br />
Agreement<br />
s Articles<br />
Prepns<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>s<br />
some errors <strong>in</strong> adv<strong>an</strong>ced<br />
verb tenses e.g. p<strong>as</strong>t<br />
perfect.<br />
Very few errors with<br />
articles, but EAL more<br />
th<strong>an</strong> EMT (§)<br />
Agreements: differences<br />
not signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
No errors<br />
No errors<br />
No errors<br />
Technical<br />
accuracy:<br />
Punct<br />
u<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
Extremely competent.<br />
Some full stops used <strong>at</strong> the end of direct speech<br />
where comm<strong>as</strong> are needed (l<strong>in</strong>es 30, 31, 32, 34)<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Differences not<br />
signific<strong>an</strong>t<br />
to (too) (l<strong>in</strong>e 5<br />
def<strong>in</strong>etely (l<strong>in</strong>e 6)<br />
level 5<br />
EAL <strong>an</strong>d EMT<br />
Clear overview of content. -<br />
<strong>in</strong>cluded sufficient<br />
<strong>in</strong>form<strong>at</strong>ion <strong>an</strong>d not too<br />
much of <strong>an</strong>y one k<strong>in</strong>d,<br />
EAL writ<strong>in</strong>g conta<strong>in</strong>ed less<br />
variety of sentences <strong>an</strong>d<br />
vocabulary th<strong>an</strong> EMT<br />
Grammar <strong>an</strong>d vocabulary<br />
used to show ch<strong>an</strong>ge <strong>in</strong><br />
voice.<br />
Script 6: Radio advertisement<br />
Form<strong>at</strong>: Open<strong>in</strong>g is a short c<strong>at</strong>chy sentence.<br />
Next two sentences are persu<strong>as</strong>ive <strong>in</strong> tone <strong>an</strong>d summarise - “the first walk<strong>in</strong>g talk<strong>in</strong>g<br />
toy”.<br />
Org<strong>an</strong>is<strong>at</strong>ion is appropri<strong>at</strong>e but does not use paragraphs.<br />
Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is useful <strong>an</strong>d full. Inform<strong>at</strong>ion is given <strong>in</strong> persu<strong>as</strong>ive way, not just st<strong>at</strong>ed,<br />
e.g. “it c<strong>an</strong> even pick th<strong>in</strong>gs up..” (l<strong>in</strong>e 7), “th<strong>at</strong> arm is so strong ..” (l<strong>in</strong>e 8)<br />
Voice: Fairly const<strong>an</strong>t, persu<strong>as</strong>ive tone. Even the details of price <strong>an</strong>d shop are<br />
phr<strong>as</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> persu<strong>as</strong>ive tone.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Use of adjectives (super-cool, excellent, enh<strong>an</strong>ced) <strong>an</strong>d adverbs (even, specially,<br />
mega, just) for persu<strong>as</strong>ion..<br />
Use of short sentences <strong>an</strong>d imper<strong>at</strong>ive forms to address reader directly (type it, get<br />
down, be).<br />
Po<strong>in</strong>ts for development:<br />
It would be <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g to know if this pupil is <strong>as</strong> competent <strong>in</strong> other genres <strong>as</strong> he is with narr<strong>at</strong>ive, <strong>an</strong>d<br />
c<strong>an</strong> use a full r<strong>an</strong>ge of subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ors <strong>an</strong>d clause types where this is appropri<strong>at</strong>e. If not, then extend<strong>in</strong>g<br />
his r<strong>an</strong>ge would be import<strong>an</strong>t.<br />
Awareness rais<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d notic<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• Read<strong>in</strong>g non-fiction to notice use of l<strong>an</strong>guage for non-narr<strong>at</strong>ive purposes.<br />
Practice<br />
• Us<strong>in</strong>g subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion to express r<strong>an</strong>ge of logical rel<strong>at</strong>ions between ide<strong>as</strong>.<br />
Explicit <strong>in</strong>struction<br />
• Use of paragraphs <strong>in</strong> advertisements.
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Appendix 4 Methodology<br />
When scripts were received, they were given a code number <strong>an</strong>d details of the writer’s<br />
l<strong>an</strong>guage background, age, etc. were entered <strong>in</strong>to <strong>an</strong> SPSS d<strong>at</strong>ab<strong>as</strong>e. Scripts were<br />
typed <strong>in</strong> prepar<strong>at</strong>ion for the computer <strong>an</strong>alysis of vocabulary.<br />
The explor<strong>at</strong>ory stage of <strong>an</strong>alysis<br />
The first stage of <strong>an</strong>alysis w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong> <strong>in</strong>-depth explor<strong>at</strong>ory study of a sample of scripts<br />
from across the six groups. As well <strong>as</strong> exam<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g all the fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> were<br />
<strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> the previous project (Cameron, 2003), we also looked for fe<strong>at</strong>ures th<strong>at</strong><br />
might be special to children’s writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>at</strong> this level <strong>an</strong>d to the narr<strong>at</strong>ive genre, such <strong>as</strong><br />
direct speech <strong>an</strong>d figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage.<br />
The explor<strong>at</strong>ory study led to a list of fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g to be <strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ed (Table 17),<br />
through r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g, count<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>d more explor<strong>at</strong>ory, descriptive <strong>an</strong>alysis.<br />
R<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g the scripts<br />
A r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g sheet w<strong>as</strong> devised to be used with each story script, cover<strong>in</strong>g both the text <strong>as</strong><br />
a whole <strong>an</strong>d the use of l<strong>an</strong>guage with<strong>in</strong> the text. Three r<strong>at</strong>ers, with L<strong>in</strong>guistics<br />
qualific<strong>at</strong>ions to <strong>at</strong> le<strong>as</strong>t MA level, were tra<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> the use of the r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g sheet. After<br />
<strong>in</strong>itial expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ions of the procedure, there were several rounds of r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g, moder<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
<strong>an</strong>d discussion to maximise <strong>in</strong>ter-r<strong>at</strong>er reliability (see below).<br />
Storyl<strong>in</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d narr<strong>at</strong>ive development<br />
Aspects of narr<strong>at</strong>ive development (set out <strong>in</strong> the first box of Table 16) required<br />
holistic judgements by r<strong>at</strong>ers of the complete texts. Some of the fe<strong>at</strong>ures were<br />
straightforward to r<strong>at</strong>e, such <strong>as</strong> the presence of a moral <strong>at</strong> the end of a story. Others,<br />
such <strong>as</strong> whether <strong>an</strong> end<strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> <strong>in</strong> some way orig<strong>in</strong>al, were more subjective <strong>an</strong>d for<br />
these fe<strong>at</strong>ures, we gave examples of stories represent<strong>in</strong>g each of the possible r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs<br />
with expl<strong>an</strong><strong>at</strong>ions of how a particular r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g w<strong>as</strong> reached.<br />
The d<strong>at</strong>a produced from these r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs were ‘c<strong>at</strong>egorical’ i.e. frequencies of<br />
occurrences <strong>in</strong> separ<strong>at</strong>e c<strong>at</strong>egories. For example, the amount of development of<br />
characters w<strong>as</strong> r<strong>at</strong>ed with the three c<strong>at</strong>egories: m<strong>in</strong>imal, some, a lot.<br />
Grammar <strong>an</strong>d errors<br />
After r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g <strong>as</strong>pects of the whole text, r<strong>at</strong>ers carried out a gramm<strong>at</strong>ical <strong>an</strong>alysis of the<br />
first 100 words of each story, follow<strong>in</strong>g the method described <strong>in</strong> section 2.7 <strong>an</strong>d us<strong>in</strong>g<br />
a column <strong>an</strong>alysis, <strong>as</strong> shown <strong>in</strong> Appendix 3. R<strong>at</strong>ers were given detailed <strong>in</strong>structions<br />
on the gramm<strong>at</strong>ical <strong>an</strong>alysis <strong>an</strong>d checked with the researchers about problems th<strong>at</strong><br />
arose <strong>as</strong> they were work<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
After do<strong>in</strong>g the column <strong>an</strong>alysis, r<strong>at</strong>ers counted various fe<strong>at</strong>ures of l<strong>an</strong>guage use <strong>an</strong>d<br />
various types of errors (see Table 16 for details).<br />
R<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g sheets <strong>an</strong>d column <strong>an</strong>alyses were returned to the research team <strong>an</strong>d scores<br />
entered <strong>in</strong>to the d<strong>at</strong>ab<strong>as</strong>e. The d<strong>at</strong>a from this part of the work w<strong>as</strong> me<strong>as</strong>ured on ‘r<strong>at</strong>io’
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scales i.e. a numerical score on a scale with equal <strong>in</strong>tervals from zero, for example,<br />
the number of Adverbial clauses <strong>in</strong> the 100 word block.<br />
Inter-r<strong>at</strong>er reliability<br />
Several precautions were taken to ensure th<strong>at</strong> r<strong>at</strong>ers were consistent <strong>in</strong> their <strong>an</strong>alyses<br />
<strong>an</strong>d r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs. In the light of previous experience, we selected r<strong>at</strong>ers with high levels of<br />
l<strong>in</strong>guistic knowledge to avoid problems with gramm<strong>at</strong>ical <strong>an</strong>alysis. Other methods of<br />
maximis<strong>in</strong>g reliability <strong>in</strong>cluded:<br />
• tra<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g of r<strong>at</strong>ers<br />
• written <strong>in</strong>structions <strong>an</strong>d reference m<strong>at</strong>erials with sample r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs<br />
• trial r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g of the same scripts <strong>an</strong>d moder<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
• access to researchers to <strong>as</strong>k about problems aris<strong>in</strong>g.<br />
To check on the levels of reliability, each r<strong>at</strong>er <strong>an</strong>d the pr<strong>in</strong>cipal researcher received<br />
the same three, r<strong>an</strong>domly selected, scripts <strong>as</strong> part of their set, without know<strong>in</strong>g which<br />
of the scripts they r<strong>at</strong>ed were be<strong>in</strong>g used for the <strong>in</strong>ter-r<strong>at</strong>er check. Inter-r<strong>at</strong>er reliability<br />
w<strong>as</strong> calcul<strong>at</strong>ed for each c<strong>at</strong>egory th<strong>at</strong> w<strong>as</strong> r<strong>at</strong>ed: narr<strong>at</strong>ive development, sentence<br />
grammar <strong>an</strong>d subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion, phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d words <strong>in</strong> clause slots, gramm<strong>at</strong>ical accuracy,<br />
technical accuracy, <strong>an</strong>d direct speech. Reliability across r<strong>at</strong>ers w<strong>as</strong> calcul<strong>at</strong>ed for each<br />
fe<strong>at</strong>ure with<strong>in</strong> these c<strong>at</strong>egories by divid<strong>in</strong>g the number of agreements by the number<br />
of r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs. The average agreement across all c<strong>at</strong>egories w<strong>as</strong> 0.72, which is acceptable.<br />
Unacceptably low levels of agreement were found for 3 fe<strong>at</strong>ures: the length <strong>an</strong>d<br />
number of words <strong>in</strong> Adverbials, the number of non-f<strong>in</strong>ite clauses, <strong>an</strong>d the number of<br />
errors with comm<strong>as</strong>. We have therefore reported results on these fe<strong>at</strong>ures with<br />
cautions.<br />
St<strong>at</strong>istical <strong>an</strong>alyses<br />
The scores produced through the r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>g procedure were subjected to st<strong>at</strong>istical<br />
<strong>an</strong>alyses us<strong>in</strong>g SPSS.<br />
C<strong>at</strong>egorical <strong>an</strong>d r<strong>at</strong>io scale d<strong>at</strong>a require different sorts of test. The c<strong>at</strong>egorical d<strong>at</strong>a<br />
from the more holistic r<strong>at</strong><strong>in</strong>gs were subjected to chi-square tests to see if there w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong><br />
<strong>as</strong>soci<strong>at</strong>ion between frequency scores <strong>an</strong>d group variables.<br />
The numeric, r<strong>at</strong>io scale d<strong>at</strong>a w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>alysed us<strong>in</strong>g two-tailed, unrel<strong>at</strong>ed t-tests to see if<br />
there were differences between the me<strong>an</strong> scores of groups. Because groups were of<br />
different sizes, the scores were first tested for homogeneity of vari<strong>an</strong>ce us<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Levene’s test.<br />
The b<strong>as</strong>ic level of signific<strong>an</strong>ce α w<strong>as</strong> 0.05. If the probability of a particular difference<br />
<strong>in</strong> me<strong>an</strong> scores or <strong>as</strong>soci<strong>at</strong>ion w<strong>as</strong> less th<strong>an</strong> 0.05, the result is reported <strong>as</strong> ‘signific<strong>an</strong>t’.<br />
In some c<strong>as</strong>es, the probability of a difference w<strong>as</strong> found to be signific<strong>an</strong>t <strong>at</strong> the lower<br />
levels of 0.01 <strong>an</strong>d 0.001, <strong>an</strong>d these are reported <strong>as</strong> ‘highly signific<strong>an</strong>t’ <strong>an</strong>d ‘very<br />
highly signific<strong>an</strong>t’ respectively. There were some differences th<strong>at</strong> had a probability<br />
between 0.05 <strong>an</strong>d 0.1, <strong>an</strong>d these are reported <strong>as</strong> ‘approach<strong>in</strong>g signific<strong>an</strong>ce’. Not too<br />
much import<strong>an</strong>ce c<strong>an</strong> be <strong>at</strong>tached to these l<strong>at</strong>ter results, other th<strong>an</strong> th<strong>at</strong> a larger sample<br />
might show signific<strong>an</strong>t differences <strong>an</strong>d so the fe<strong>at</strong>ures may be worth further<br />
<strong>in</strong>vestig<strong>at</strong>ion.
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Descriptive <strong>an</strong>alyses<br />
Several fe<strong>at</strong>ures of writ<strong>in</strong>g th<strong>at</strong> lower achiev<strong>in</strong>g pupils found difficult were more fully<br />
explored, <strong>in</strong> addition to count<strong>in</strong>g numbers of errors <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks. This more<br />
detailed <strong>an</strong>alysis of errors w<strong>as</strong> carried out through full exam<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of a sample of<br />
twenty stories from EAL learners graded <strong>as</strong> achiev<strong>in</strong>g level 3. The sample w<strong>as</strong> chosen<br />
to be represent<strong>at</strong>ive of the major l<strong>an</strong>guage groups <strong>an</strong>d LEAs. All errors <strong>in</strong> the<br />
follow<strong>in</strong>g fe<strong>at</strong>ures were extracted <strong>an</strong>d c<strong>at</strong>egorised:<br />
• formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
• agreements<br />
• articles<br />
• verbs<br />
• prepositions.<br />
‘Errors’ th<strong>at</strong> could be regional dialectal vari<strong>at</strong>ions were excluded, <strong>as</strong> far <strong>as</strong> possible.<br />
The <strong>an</strong>alyses of vocabulary <strong>an</strong>d figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage are expla<strong>in</strong>ed <strong>in</strong> the relev<strong>an</strong>t<br />
sections of Chapter 6.
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Level Fe<strong>at</strong>ures of story writ<strong>in</strong>g <strong>an</strong>alysed How it w<strong>as</strong> <strong>an</strong>alysed Type of D<strong>at</strong>a Analysis / St<strong>at</strong>istical<br />
Test<br />
The text <strong>as</strong> a whole<br />
Construct<strong>in</strong>g a story<br />
Attention to specified storyl<strong>in</strong>e<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive Development<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers noted whether or not the writer<br />
followed the storyboard cues<br />
C<strong>at</strong>egorical<br />
Chi square<br />
• sett<strong>in</strong>g<br />
• character<br />
• problem<br />
• resolution<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers judged how much<br />
development w<strong>as</strong> used <strong>in</strong> each:<br />
m<strong>in</strong>imal, some, a lot<br />
C<strong>at</strong>egorical<br />
Chi square<br />
Narr<strong>at</strong>ive development str<strong>at</strong>egies:<br />
• description<br />
• figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
• direct speech<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers noted which of the str<strong>at</strong>egies<br />
were used to develop each.<br />
Plot resolution:<br />
• completeness<br />
• <strong>in</strong>clusion of moral<br />
• cre<strong>at</strong>ivity / orig<strong>in</strong>ality<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers <strong>an</strong>swered yes or no<br />
• Paragraph<strong>in</strong>g Number of paragraphs counted:<br />
none, m<strong>an</strong>y short, 2-3, 4-5<br />
With<strong>in</strong> the text<br />
Us<strong>in</strong>g l<strong>an</strong>guage to<br />
write the story<br />
Sentence <strong>an</strong>d clause level<br />
Use of Subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion<br />
Length <strong>an</strong>d number of<br />
• clause types<br />
• phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>an</strong>d words <strong>in</strong> clause slots<br />
Column <strong>an</strong>alysis of 100 word<br />
segment. R<strong>at</strong>ers identified types of<br />
clauses, then counted total ma<strong>in</strong><br />
clauses <strong>an</strong>d total subord<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>e clauses<br />
Interval<br />
t-tests<br />
Phr<strong>as</strong>e <strong>an</strong>d word level<br />
Vocabulary<br />
• richness: r<strong>an</strong>ge of word types used<br />
• length of stories<br />
Lexical <strong>an</strong>alysis of 34 stories from<br />
each of 6 groups, us<strong>in</strong>g Wordsmith<br />
Tools <strong>an</strong>d Lexical Frequency Profile.<br />
C<strong>at</strong>egorical<br />
Visual <strong>in</strong>spection of<br />
proportions.<br />
Word lists.
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Figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage: metaphors <strong>an</strong>d similes<br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers identified stories with use of<br />
figur<strong>at</strong>ive l<strong>an</strong>guage. All <strong>in</strong>st<strong>an</strong>ces<br />
extracted from these stories.<br />
L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
samples.<br />
Qualit<strong>at</strong>ive <strong>an</strong>alysis<br />
<strong>an</strong>d qu<strong>an</strong>tit<strong>at</strong>ive<br />
description.<br />
Formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es<br />
1. R<strong>at</strong>ers counted number of errors <strong>in</strong><br />
formulaic phr<strong>as</strong>es <strong>in</strong> 100 word blocks.<br />
1. Interval.<br />
T-tests<br />
2. Close exam<strong>in</strong><strong>at</strong>ion of full texts of<br />
20 EAL stories.<br />
2. L<strong>an</strong>guage<br />
Descriptive <strong>an</strong>alysis<br />
of error types.<br />
Agreements<br />
• Subject-Verb<br />
• Noun-Pronoun<br />
• Plurals<br />
Articles<br />
Verb use <strong>an</strong>d end<strong>in</strong>gs<br />
Prepositions<br />
1. R<strong>at</strong>ers identified errors <strong>in</strong> the 100<br />
word segment for each c<strong>at</strong>egory<br />
2. Error <strong>an</strong>alysis of full texts of a<br />
sample of 20 EAL stories.<br />
1. Interval T-tests<br />
2. L<strong>an</strong>guage Descriptive. Errors<br />
were c<strong>at</strong>alogued <strong>an</strong>d<br />
frequencies of types<br />
noted<br />
Technical accuracy<br />
Punctu<strong>at</strong>ion<br />
• comm<strong>as</strong><br />
• full stops<br />
• <strong>in</strong>verted comm<strong>as</strong><br />
R<strong>at</strong>ers counted errors <strong>in</strong> the 100 word<br />
segment for each c<strong>at</strong>egory<br />
Interval<br />
T-tests<br />
Spell<strong>in</strong>g<br />
Table 16 How the stories were <strong>an</strong>alysed
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